Ee Fiction(please Read And Reply)

[baileya]

Hi this is my first script please tell me what you think. I have a whole storyline and many more to come planned out. I am looking forward to your comments and will happily take advice.

Everyone is rushing around in the millers preparing for the welcome home party for demi.
Rosieshouting) Keith! Keith! Are you ready? Its time to go and get Demi.
Keith:Ye. One minute Rose I'm just putting up these banners.
Darren Enters
Darren: Mum why dont you take Aleesha with you. I think Demi would love to see her.
Rosiehappily) Ye. Great idea Darren. Come here
Rosie hugs darren just as Keith enters.
Keithputting his coat on) Ready. I think we better get going.
Keith Rosie and Aleesha leave to pick up Demi. About half an hour later Darren and Mickey are finishing off the decorations when there is a knock at the door.
Mickey: Daz answer that
Darren answers the door
Darren: Oh come in they aint back yet.
The guests including Pauline,The Beales,Gus and The Brannings enter
Paulinesurprised) Oh wow. What an effort youve put in here.
Darrengloating) Oh well we do try.
About 5 minutes had passed until Rosies voice was heard
Rosie: Were back!
Keith,Rosie,Demi and Aleesha enter the room.
Everyone: Surprise! Welcome home Demi.
Demi didnt smile she just set of at a pace upstairs and you could here her sobbing.
Rosie and Keith exchanged looks
Keith: Right everyone enjoy themselves. Ill go upstairs and speak to Demi.

NEXT EPISODE: KEITH HAS A HEART TO HEART WITH DEMI.

[eastenderfan_91]

its great please post more very very soon

[kirstienod]

its great post more very soon