wow fantastic you are a great writer bb cant wait for the next part
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wow fantastic you are a great writer bb cant wait for the next part
its really good! :thumbsup: well done your a great writer! :clap: cant wait for the next part its got me hooked! :)
Scene 6 – The Red Rum Flat - Day
Amy is sitting down, Patrick is standing up, ready to leave the room.
Patrick: Common then, get on with it…
Amy: Sit down Patrick, I cant talk to you when your all agitated like this
Patrick hastily sits down.
Amy: Right, well I’m sure I’m not the only one to say… our marriage hasn’t been going smoothly for a long time…
Patrick: What’s all this about?
Amy: Hear me out, I mean I know we’ve had our highs and lows, mainly lows… thanks to you and your affairs… but I don’t hold it against you, we’ve stuck together over everything and well I know we have something special…
Patrick: Of course we have, you’re my wife… and I love you…
Amy: Yeah well it doesn’t seem that way at times, your so distant from me… it’s like our marriage has gone dull and well we need something new…
Patrick: Like what?
Amy: Well I was thinking…and I’ve come up with a brilliant idea, it’s what I’ve always wanted?
Patrick: A waterbed?
Amy: No, a baby!
Amy is delighted, but Patrick clearly isn’t.
Scene 7 – Jenkins Manor – Day
Tanya is sitting in the kitchen putting on her make-up, Nick is eating some toast.
Tanya: You’d think he’d learn to calm down a bit wouldn’t you… but no he’s as arrogant as ever…
Nick: Is it any wonder? Ed ruined his big night…he didn’t want anything to go wrong, and Ed humiliated him in front of everyone dad knows, a major no no
Tanya: Stop siding with him! You should know he’s in the wrong…
Nick: I do but…
Tanya: I know what it is, once again its this divide…
Nick: Christ Tan, you still got that going around in your head…
Tanya: Just because me and Ed are your half brother and sister you side with dad to get brownie points.
Nick: Shut up! Your talking rubbish Tanya! I’ve had enough of the pair of you this morning, I’m going to go and have my breakfast in piece!
Richard walks into the kitchen
Richard: Oh upset someone else have you?
Tanya: It appears so! But someone’s gotta look out for Ed otherwise this family will just forget he exists!
Richard: You say that like it’s a bad thing!
Tanya: I really cant work you out sometimes dad honestly! I’m going out!
Richard: Why?
Tanya: Because I actually care for my brother and want to know what’s happened to him!
Scene 8 – Val’s Hairdressers - Day
Val is cutting Annie’s hair, another hairdresser is cutting Josies’s.
Annie: Poor Belinda…was it sudden?
Val: Yeah it came as a right shock, I mean she’d always been fit as a fiddle, then her ticker just runs out of battery, and bobs ya uncle she’s stiff on the floor.
Annie & Josie: orrrrrr
Josie: Hows James?
Val: He don’t know if he’s coming or going poor sod, I’ve told him to get a grip but honestly, daft sod, I mean personally I couldn’t stand the woman….
Annie: Val!
Val: Well I don’t mean to speak ill of the dead but she was a bloomin’ nightmare! Absolute control freak, wouldn’t let James go till he was 35! Deranged old…
Tanya walks in a rush…
Tanya: Alright ladies
Josie and Annie mutter their hellos.
Val: Oh look who it is, what time dya call this? Work starts at 9 on the dot, not 25 minutes later!
Tanya: I’m sorry Val I had something busy on…what with Ed and all… infact dyou mind if I pop out for a minute…I need to speak to someone
Val: You’re taking the proverbial pi…..
Tanya: Just five minutes Val!
Val: Oh go on then!
Tanya leaves, and in walks Margaret.
Val: Anyways enough of Belinda, what about that party up the manor last night! Oh my god that was a right bit of entertainment: family feuds, parental disownage, it was like and episode of Dallas!
Josie: Poor Edward!
Val: Poor Richard! Fancy having a son like that… in fact I wouldn’t be surprised if he had something to do with that robbery that’s all over the news…
Margaret rushes into the hairdressers
Margaret: You never guess what girls! I’ve gone some juicy old gossip…
Val, Annie and Josie all turn around eagerly like vultures.
Scene 9 – The Red Rum Flat – Day
Amy: Well then? What dya think?
Patrick: A baby?
Amy: Oh it would be just so perfect Patrick! A little baby to love and look after…it would make us even stronger!
Patrick: We’d make awful parents!
Amy: Speak for yourself!
Patrick: I can hardly look after a bar, never long a baby. No Amy I’m afraid the answer is no.
Amy: Don’t be so selfish Patrick!
Patrick: Selfish?
Amy: I’m not prepared to see our marriage go down the drain, and as far as I can see it’s a baby or the end…
Patrick: We are not having a baby!
Amy: Yes we are! If I say I want one then I’ll blooming well have one Patrick!
Patrick: No you are not! And that’s final! I’m going out!
Amy: Where?
Patrick: Far away from you! You can run the bar yourself today!
Patrick slams the door shut. Amy screams, and throws a teapot against the wall.
Scene 10 – Harvey’s Motors - Day
Tanya walks into Harvey’s motors, Chris is working on a motor and Craig is sitting at the desk doing some paperwork. Chris wolf whistles at Tanya.
Chris: Well hello there Tanya…
Craig: Chris, hop it for a bit…
Chris: But I’ve got to…
Craig: Hop it!
Chris walks off. Tanya nervously advances towards Craig.
Craig: Well what brings little miss spoilt brat around here, need ya merc fixing?
Tanya: It’s about Ed…
Craig: Oh I don’t wanna hear it Tanya! I told you last night Tanya I don’t wanna see or hear from him ever again…
Tanya: Yeah well you said a lot last night didn’t you?
Craig: And?
Tanya: look is he safe? That’s all I’m worried about…
Craig: As far as I know
Tanya: As far as you know!?
Craig: Look he did the job, and he’s lying low. I’ve got no grief with him no more, as long as he stays away I don’t care what he does… so does that answer your question?
Tanya: Where is he? Do you know?
Craig: If I told you, you’d have him back in Baymoore faster than a hooker to a street corner, so no, I don’t think I’ll be telling you that…
Tanya attempts to talk but Craig interrupts
Craig: Now clear out of my way, and don’t come hassling me again.
Scene 11 – Greasy Gary’s – Day
Gary is cooking breakfasts, Nick is standing behind the counter talking to him.
Nick: If I’d stayed there a moment longer my head would have just exploded, if it isn’t him snapping everyone’s head off it’s Tan complaining about the injustice Ed has had to go trough
Gary: Don’t worry mate your not the only one, I’ve had it all night with her, that’s the only fault of Tanya’s, when she’s got a point shell keep on making it till it drives you insane, if only I knew that before I married her…
The pair laugh, the camera pans over to Margaret, Annie and Josie drinking tea and gossiping.
Margaret: And then she’s telling me that she believes me after all…
Josie: I’ve always known he was a baden, but I didn’t think he’d be behind that…
Annie: Nothing would surprise me with Craig Harvey, he’s scum he is…
Josie: Dya really recon that Richard’s youngest was involved…?
Margaret: Well put it this way he’s had dealings with Craig in the past, he leaves Baymoore in the middle of the night and next morning all this is in the news… he’s as guilty as Sudam Hussein…
Annie and Josie mutter agreement.
Scene 12 – Craig’s House - Night
Craig, Mandy and Margaret are sitting around the dinner table, eating their tea, awkward looks are being dished around. Craig’s phone rings, Nigel is calling. Margaret tuts. Craig gets up and walks into the hallway.
Craig: Yes Nigel what is it? ….you what! You’ve got to be joking me!
Craig is furious
Scene 13 – Jenkins Manor – Night
Tanya walks in after a hard day at work. She goes over to the housephone, and checks that no one is around. She dials a number. It’s aswerphone.
Tanya: (into phone) Hi Ed, it’s Tanya…where are you? Are you okay?.... look I know you were in trouble with Craig but he says it’s okay now… please Ed get in touch to let me know your safe…call me…
Tanya puts down the phone, and runs her hand trough her hair in stress. She turns to head towards the living room and Richard is standing there.
Tanya: (scared) Christ dad! You scared the hell out of me!
Richard: Shouldn’t be making sneaky phone calls then you should?
Tanya: Look…
Richard: What an earth was that? Trouble with Craig?
Tanya: Oh you’re actually concerned about him now!
Richard: Just tell me Tanya!
The doorbell rings, Richard goes to answer the door. Two policemen are standing there.
Richard: Yes! Can I help you!
PO: Mr Taylor, I’m afraid there have been some developments in your son’s disappearance sir….
A shocked look on Richard and Tanya’s face.
End of show.
:eek: is he ok or is it just about the robbings! :eek: oh my god post more soon asap! lol its really good and really interesting. keep up the good work! :thumbsup:
its far worser than robbings, and if craig finds him hes a dead man!Quote:
Originally Posted by xXxJessxXx
BB thats amazing, you are so talented its unreal.