You should carry on this is fantastic!!!!
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You should carry on this is fantastic!!!!
this week im going to try and right a few episodes so as i dont have to rush the output...i cant wait to right the arson epsiode! tanya and richard should learn that criag is not a man to be messed with!
sounds good
Sounds excellent cant wait great banner
does anyone mind if i reduce the length of each episode
becuase
1) the other soaps are shorter than mine
2) i might get more feedback and posters reading it
3) storylines can develop faster and you all get to read more
let me know what ya think??? :confused:
it does'nt bother me go for it
DEVON SEAS
LIFE IN DEVON IS ANYTHING BUT PEACEFUL
EPISODE 2:
Aftermath
Written By Bryan Turner
Scene 1 - Craig's House - Day
Craig's is sitting at the breakfast table reading a the newspaper, the headline says "Robbers Beat Drug Squad". Craig's phone rings.
Craig: (into phone) Hello Harvey... oh its you Nigel... how did it go?... good that's what i like to hear... and Ed hasnt done no funny buisness?.... right then make sure he keeps his head down at the safehouse... good... bye.
Craig puts down the phone. Mandy who is doing the washing up knows something is up.
Mandy: Who was that?
Craig: Someone...
Mandy: We're you on about what i think you were...
Craig: Rule one, you stick to your buisness, and I'll stick to mine, keep your snout out and do some housework...
Mandy: Dont speak to me like that! I might be your wife but you have no right to speak to me like that...
Craig: Is that a fact?
Mandy: Yes it is, you've promised me that your not the man everyone says you are...but i have my suscpions...
Craig: I wear the trousers in this family Mandy, you do as i say, and i said to shut the hell up! Now im off to work... if that's ok with you!
Mandy dosent answer, Craig storms out of the house and slams the door shut. Margaret peeps her head around the kitchen door.
Margaret: Marital bliss? .... i think not....
Scene 2 - Jenkins Manor - Day
The tv is on but Richard isnt paying any attention
Newsreader: In other news the police have been left shocked after a warehouse filled with illegal drugs was raided last night. The warehouse in the docklands of Exeter was to be raided at dawn by the police following weeks of undercover investigating. The cocaine, with a street value of over a million pounds is now…
Richard turns off the tv, he stares at a picture of Ed.
TANYA: Did you manage to get any sleep dad?
RICHARD: No, I’ve had too much on my mind…
TANYA: I know that, but you need to sleep, there’s no good becoming ill aswell…
RICHARD: Look Tanya if I need your opinions I’ll ask for them! I need some space at the moment…time to think…
TANYA: Time to think about what? He’s gone now dad…there’s no good thinking of the “what ifs”, it’s your fault he’s gone…
RICHARD: He was going to go anyway…
TANYA: Yeah well you didn’t exactly stop him did you? God knows what’s going trough his mind at the moment!
RICHARD: Tanya! Please just get out of my face!
TANYA: Watch what you say dad, you've already lost one child this week, be careful you dont loose another!
Scene 3 - The Red Rum Public House - Day
Patrick is on the downstairs phone, looking shifty and checking that Amy isnt coming downstairs.
Patrick: (into phone) ...christ it's so annoying knowing your just down the road and that i have to sleep with that dinosaur every night instead of you.... (laughs ) yes she is that bad... nora batties had more sex appeal than amy in a skimpy nightie... look can we meet up later for lunch...im starving, and not for ham cobs... (laughs)... great, I'll meet you there then...
Amy: (O.S) Patrick!
Patrick: (into phone) look i'd better go babe... the dragon's calling me... bye sexy...
Amy: Patrick!
Patrick: (Sarcastic) What darling???
Patrick runs up the staircase...
Amy: Who was that on the phone?
Patrick: Oh just the brewery tryna fob me off with some foreighn plonk...well...what do you want?
Amy: We need to talk...
Patrick: What about? The weather? The price of petrol? Whether Jordans hadnt another boob job? Common I've gotta open the bar...
Amy: About us i think we need a serious talk...dont you?
Scene 4 - Andrews' House - Day
The morning after the night before: Jame's mom is dead. James is sitting in the living room, family albumn open, she is crying. Val walks in...
Val: Hey you coulda woke me...
James: Oh i never went to sleep at all...
Val: Babes.... cheer up eh? There's no need looking dull is there?
James: Valery my mother has just died, im not going to be singing and dancing the streets now am i?
Val: I didnt except a chorus of "life's a cabaret" im just saying... no point going into a deep depression...we need to put a strong front up for the girls...they've lost their nan they're bound to be distraught...
James: ...how are they?
Val: Not too good, it's hit Em bad, they were really close...
James: Tell me about it, well...you'll have to look after the girls..ive got too much to plan...the cremation, the wake...
Val sits down next to James
Val: Look you ent gotta do all this on your own, im here for yoiu...we'll do it together ok?
val hugs James.
Scene 5 - Craig's House - Day
Margaret is sitting down at the kitchen table, half busy with the crossword in Take a Break. Mandy is cleaning the kitchen.
Margaret: So then you gonna tell me what that little barny was about?
Mandy: I dont wanna talk about it mom..
Margaret: Well tough your gonna have to...
Mandy: Its Craig...
Margaret: I kinda gathered that... common take a seat...
Mandy sits down and pours herself some tea.
Mandy: All these years people have said "he's a baden", "he's a criminal, a gangster", "he's no good for you", and I've always just ignored them, becuase he promised me that they were all lying...
Margaret: So what, you're married to Ronny Krey and your in denial, thinking he's the best thing since the chippendales... i've told you from the start that he's a baden...
Mandy: Yes well i think for once you might be right...
Margaret: Why whats he done? Had a punchup with al capone?
Mandy: No seriously mom... you know that drugs robbery, im pretty sure Craig, or his men are behind it...
Margaret: Have you told anyone about this?
Mandy: Are you mad he'd kill me! And you'd better not tell no-one either!
Margaret: Would i do such a thing... (smirks)
episode 2 concludes later on tonight! :p