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I think its time for the next part...
This part is dedicated to Nana Moon,who was a very special person,Alfie's not the only one who will miss her.
Part Thirteen
Rosie had sent Darren and Demi to the shops to get Milk.The only reason the were going was because she said,keep the change and gave them a fiver.
"Milk's only abou' a pound,if you buy the cheap kind,"Said Darren."So thats only £2 each."
"I should have came myself,"Demi said.Then the pair heard a familiar voice.
"Dems...Darren.Wait up!"Leo called,a short distance behind them.Naturally Darrens speed picked up,and he started to walk faster,but his sister pulled him back.
"Hi Leo.What you doin' 'ere?"
"Gettin' bread.You?"
"Milk."She said.
"So 'ow are ya?"He asked.
"Fine before you came."Muttered Darren,under his breath,but Demi heard him,and she knew Leo did too.
"Just ignore him."She whispered into his ear,"He's just lonely 'cos he's not 'ad a girl in ages!"
"Shut up Dems,I heard that!"
"Well,you deserve it,for bein' so mean to poor Leo!"
"POOR LEO?!ARE YOU FOR REAL?!"
"Oh,Darren.Don't be like that.He used to be our best mate...when we were kids!"
"Yeah,well,"He said,bitterly,"We were too young to know betta...He's changed Dems!"
"No he hasn't the feud just got in the way!"
"Exactly.You know their all scum.Look what they've put our family through since."
"Its Ray that's doin' all that 'orrible stuff.Leo's got nuffing to do wif it!"
"Yeah well you can believe what ya like.I'm not goin' to let a complete SCUM flirt wif my sister!"
"He's not flirtin' wif me....An',besides,what are you gonna do 'bout it?"
"I'LL SHOW YA!"And he punched Leo in the nose.
Leo wasn't going to stand back and let him bully him.So he hit him back,and they started to fight.
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Part Fourteen
They were in English.Demi and Leo.
"Leo....I..I'm really sorry,about Saturday."
"Don't be."He didn't look up from his work.
"Don't be?"She was a little puzzled at his words.
"Did you punch me?"
"No."
"Well then you've got nuffing to be sorry 'bout."
"But Darren....."
"Actually Darren did do me some good."
"How's that?"
"Well..my Dad didn't shout at me.He seemed quite...proud,in his twisted way of course."Demi wasn't sure what to say now."I'm guessing Darren didn't get that kinda luck?"
"No he didn't.Grounded for two weeks.I'm grounded too."
"Your grounded?What did you do?"
Demi shrugged."Only for a week.I think its 'coz of the feud.My Dad was a little angry,he said,'You stood up for a Taylor over your own family!'"
"It wasn't like that."
"I know. It seems that a Taylor and a Miller, just isn't a good idea."
"To them maybe,but not to us.Or me at least."
"Oh,no.Not to me either.I think its a great idea."
"Yeah.Your still special to me.We're still mates.Right?"
Demi smiled."We'll always be mates.And nothing they can do or say will stop that."
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The next parts on its way,sorry,but there's not much action in it.More of a dream.
Part Fifteen
It was Saturday and Rachel and Joanne were out having fun.Demi really wished that she could join them. Keith and Rosie were in the kitchen and Darren and Demi were watching a kids film called 'The Green Train and the Blue Car,'.Well Demi wasn't really watching it she was thinking about Leo.This was a huge crush she had,one like never before she couldn't stop thinking about him and most nights she'd have dreams about him.
Last nights dream was scary,not a nightmare,just scary.Demi had a dream that her,Jo and Rach were in school,on a normal day.Then Leo walked up to her and Rach started flirting with him,all of a sudden he started kissing Demi.
Demi grinned,that had totally been the best part of the dream.
"What ya smilin' at?"Asked Darren,in a rather irrated voice.
"Ohh...am I grounded from smilin' an' bein' 'appy now?"
"Well no..."Darren looked puzzled."Oh,I don't care,whateva!"
In the dream once Leo and Demi stopped kissing they both confessed that they fancied each other rotten.Unfortuneately though,Darren had spotted the pair and rushed over and punched Leo.He then started beating Leo up.Leo was left with quite a few bruises,but he still managed to lock lips with his new girlfriend once more.Then Ray came running in the school gates with a huge knife and stabbed his own son.Demi screamed out in horror.Leo was rushed to hospital,then was announced Dead.Demi was,of course Devasted.
Near the end of the Dream was after Leo's funeral,everything had happened in one day.Demi went home to a family that disowned her.Every last one,her Mum,Mickey,Darren,even her Dad who was really disappointed in her even though she'd just suffered a terrible loss,they threw her out onto the streets.
Demi went to Rachels house,but Rachel also hated her for taking away the boy she fancied,even though Leo and Demi were only together about half an hour,Rach blamed Demi for his death.
Demi was deeply saddened by the actions of the people close to her but expected Jo to be on her side.But she was wrong,Jo agreed with Rach and said that she had acted like a terrible friend.
So Demi had to drag herself back to the Millers' and sat down,on the cold floor outside their flat,she felt so empty.Then Ray appeared and started to call her a 'Tart murderer' he repeated it louder and louder until it was screaming out in Demi's head.
Then a black hole appeared and a cold ice hand grabbed Demi and pulled her into the hole,which swallowed her up.
Demi couldn't remember the rest of the dream,though she was sure she'd woke up after that.The thought of the dreams events made her shiver.
"You alrigh'?"Asked Darren.
Demi could tell he was trying to appologise for being so cold earlier."Yeah."She said,not too sure of herself."I s'pose I am."
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I know that wasn't much of a 'cliffhanger' and I am sorry if anyone found it boring,though I was out of ideas and tried my best.
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its brillant! well done post more soon please
denfinately :thumbsup: that was the best part yet!! what a terrible dream for demi though ... awww
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Sorry I've not posted in ages,but I'll try to post more of this soon!
Aww yay! :cheer: Can't wait, such a fab script! :D
I was suffering a little writers block with this story,but I eventually managed to come up with this :
Part Sixteen
Demi was in school,for a change.She hadn't really felt like going in today,but she decided to because she had english today and secretly couldn't wait to see Leo.It was lunch and she was with Jo and Rach.
"10 minutes until they lock us back in,"Jo joked,after checking the time.
"Thats so not funny!"Rach protested.
"Yeah,"Demi agreed,"'Coz we're in maths next."
"I hate maths,"Said Rach
"Me too,"Said Demi
"It aint that bad I suppose,"Jo said
Both Demi and Rachel glared at her.
"Well,it aint!"
"You know who else doesn't like maths?....uh..."Demi was going to say Leo but quickly changed her mind.
"No,who?"
"Um...uh...Darren."Demi hesitantly answered
"No he don't.Darren likes maths,he says its great coz he can tell if he's bein' ripped off."
"How do you know that then Jo?"Asked Rach
"Do ya fancy my brother?"
"No..no of course not.I just sit next to him in English!"
"Yeah,but Demz sits next to Leo in english an' she fancies him."
"N..no I don't!"
"Come on demi,"Said Jo,"We know you do."
"It's alright."Said Rach."I don't mind.Can't blame ya can I,he's gorgeous isn't he?"
At probably the most convient time the bell rang.Demi was saved by the bell,for now.
"Uh...maths 'ere we come."Jo sighed.
"Well if we don't wanna go,"Demi said,"Then lets not."
"She's right.Lets just bunk off!"Said Rach,with a smile.
"My Mum would kill me!"
"Mine too,but they're not gonna find out are they?"Demi had won her over.
"Ohh,alrigh' then."
The three headed to the school gates where they saw Darren and his mate David.
"Hey ladies,"Said David
"Alrigh' you three."Said Darren
"Hiya Darren...."Jo said,but quickly added,"And David."
"So where you goin'?"Asked Demz
"Bunkin' off,why where are you goin'?"
"Same."This time it was Rachel who answered
"Would ya like to come wif?"David asked.
"Where?"Asked Demi
"Davids' gaff,his parents are out."
"Cool,"Said Jo.
"Well we've nuffing better to do."Rach said.
Demi thought for a moment."Oh,alrigh' then."
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Not that good I know,but It would still be good to hear your replies.
Oh and don't worry,I have an idea for the next part and I promise Leo will be in it!
Fab part :thumbsup: Ooo and yay Leo... sounds like it's going to get better! :D Can't wait for more! :cheer: