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Wow, good start! That Jason is a bit of a shifty character, isn't he? Cheating on his wife, on the grand opening of the bar which is his and Nicolas "future" :rotfl: He sounds a bit evil.... I like him already :D
Abi has a good name, as well :D
Keep it up!
Scene 4- Outside Nightlife Nightclub- Night
(Russell and Terry are the "Nightlife" bouncers. They are standing at the doors, after dealing with some drunks who have just left the nightclub)
Terry: I'm fed up of drunks! We always get them...why can't they drink some alcohol and stay sober?! Why do they have to go off track with their drinking?! Sorry for the rant Russ... well anyway, tonight seems to be going well..grand opening night and all that..
Russell: I'm bloody surprised! I thought clubbers wouldn't wanna set foot in this nightclub again after it got burnt down...but it's been refurbished...it's been a massive turn around!
(Suddenly a tipsy man called Kev Peters comes up to Russell)
Kev: Oi..i need to talk to ya! You've got some explaining to do...
Russell: Oh piss off! I've had enough of drunks tonight! Get home and get bloody sober!
(Kev punches Russell in the face)
Kev: You need to explain to me...why you done what you did!
Terry: What the bloody hell is he on about?!
Russell: I don't know...he's a bloody drunk, drunks always talk crap!
Kev: I'm not talking crap...listen to me!!
(Kev grabs Russell and punches him continually. Terry restrains Russell)
Terry: Now come on mate...go home! We don't want any trouble...
Russell: If he wants trouble..he'll bloody well get it!
(Russell punches Kev back. A full scale fight begins. Kev and Russell punching each other, but then Russell punches Kev to the ground. Kev's head starts bleeding)
Russell: You gonna cut the crap now?!
(Kev speaks in pain)
Kev: I need to talk to you R...
(Russell interrupts)
Russell: Thought not!
(Russell grabs Kev by the collar and drags him to a nearby alleyway)
Terry: Russell, what the hell do you think your doing?!
(Russell throws Kev into the alleyway and beats him until he lies unconscious. Kev is on the ground unconscious, Russell looks over him)
Russell: Thought that would shut you up!
(Russell leaves the alleyway)
I wonder what Kev wanted to tell him? :hmm:
Great stuff!
it sounded like he had something important to say. Very exciting start. I had a feeling Jason would be a bit of a player.
Great Start Dave !.
Just read this its fab well done
great work dave. me thinks we're going to be begging for a 2nd series.
Scene 5- Nightlife Nightclub Office- Night
(Jason and Madeline are having sex in Jason's office. Suddenly Nicola comes to the office door and tries to open it, but it's locked)
Nicola: Jason! Open this door..
Madeline: ****! Who the hell's that?!
(Jason whispers)
Jason: It's my bloody wife! Just as we were enjoying ourselves! :rolleyes: You need to hide and get your clothes back on!
Nicola: Jason...why the hell's this door locked?!
Jason: I'm coming now love...i was just busy with paperwork...you know i don't like to be disturbed...
Nicola: But it's the opening night!
Jason: Well why are you disturbing me Nic! This better be bloody important..what do you want?!
Nicola: Open this door and i'll explain!
(Jason grabs the key to his office door and opens it as Madeline hides behind Jason's desk putting her clothes back on. Nicola enters the office)
Nicola: There's a fight outside Jas...
Jason: And? What do you want me to do about it?! The bouncers are outside for a reason...to deal with the drunks and to stop fights...can't they do their bloody job properly?!
Nicola: They're trying to break it up Jas...i didn't know who else to turn too...the fight is full scale out there...somebody else needs to get out there and help!
Jason: For christ sake...i'll get out there now!
(Jason leaves the office, angry that his encounter with Madeline was cut short. Nicola looks at Jason's office desk, suspicious, there is no paperwork on his desk at all, all she can smell is perfume. Nicola leaves the office)
i'm realling starting to like this Dave, i think your onto a winner with this, keep up the good work!
glad to see so many people are reading it, it's a brilliant script
*crosses fingers for a second season* :cheer:
Hahaha! I should say!! :rotfl: Such a manly response there, lol!Quote:
Originally Posted by DaVeyWaVey
Great stuff!
Scene 6- Outside Nightlife Nightclub- Night
(Jason charges outside the nightclub, clearly not impressed. Nicola follows behind Jason in a hurry. Jason gets outside and sees two men violently brawling over a woman who is standing on the pavement feeling helpless)
Jason: Oh fantastic! This is all i need...i thought you two could deal with this!
Terry: We tried to boss...but they can't stop fighting! We managed to pull them apart but they just started fighting again..
Jason: Well if that's how they want it...you have to beat them down! I thought you would know that being bouncers...
Terry: Violence isn't always the answer though...
Jason: If you think that, then maybe your in the wrong job!
(We cut to the men fighting)
Man 1: I met her first!
Man 2: No i met her first!
Man 1: I brought her a bloody drink, i was getting somewhere with her..then you snatched her away from me! How could you do that?!
(The men start kicking and punching each other all over again but this time, Jason walks over to one of the men and beats him to the ground, preventing him from fighting with the other man. The woman on the pavement screams)
Woman: Get off him! Get off him!
Nicola: Jas...your overreacting! Stop it now!
CUT TO NIGHTLIFE NIGHTCLUB OFFICE:
(Madeline has finished getting changed. She tries to leave the nightclub office unseen, but she fails to realise that she has dropped her packet of cocaine on the office floor. Madeline leaves the office, and tries to blend back into the nightclub crowd, but barman Jonathan Jones has noticed her leaving the office. He becomes instantly suspicious)