Hollymount - Village Life is anything but Peaceful

[Katy]

Got bored during the holidays so i thought id give my own little soap ago, as it seems to be the thing on Soapboards at the minute with Caught in the waves, and Bad Men.

Main Locations

Hollymount Comprhensive School.

Lake and Park

O'neills Bakery and Cafe

Supermarket

Kellys Autos

The Horse and Jockey - (the local) Every soap needs one.

Characters

The Kellys
The Phillips
The O'Neills
The Jordons
The Keegans
The Marshalls

Others
Bradley Phillips
Gina O Mare
Sarah Keane
Tommy Davenport
Callum Dunne
Jonno Dunne

Character profiles in other thread.

[big bro fan]

Looking good cant wait to read the next bit. Watch out though a new soap is coming.

[DaVeyWaVey]

This is great Cornetgal, i am glad there will be a new soap coming to the boards..means more competition. :D But it looks good so i am sure i will become a big fan of your soap. I can't wait until you post the first script and i hope you make it an ongoing thing. :)

[Katy]

Michaela and Rik are walking through the park on there way to school. Gemma Riks Little sister is following.

Rik - Do you think we are too young to know what we want.

Michaela - What wheres this come from. Of course were not 16 isnt exactly young well to my dad im still a kid but no matter what age you are your capable to think for yourself.

Rik - Yeh Me as well. I love you you know.

Michaela - Aww Bless ya, Dont be going all Soppy and Emotional your great the way you are.

The pair kiss

Gemma - Rikki and Michael Sitting in a tree K I S S

Rik - Oi Squirt school now.... Sisters who'd have em

Kellys Auto centre

Mark - DAD, Charlie wants you

Steve - Tell her No.

Mark - Sis he said no.

Charlie - oi cheeky he dont even know what i want yet. I need money mum went to work with my purse and bank card so i dont have any money to get dinner.

Mark - heres a tenner now scatter, yourll be late.

Charlie - tar bro.

Mark - I Want chance

Charlie - I know ill see you at 2.

Steve - 2????

Charlie - Half day taraa

Steve - Part timer

[Katy]

Hollyomount Park

Dean Jordon is practicing his Football and keeping himself in shape. They have a reserve game the next day and he is so desperate to get a first team start. Every Footballer has to start somewhere like his da keeps saying the conference is better than the local school team.

Rik - Deano, You all right mate. Long time no see.

Dean - hiya mate. Im good ta how are you and Michaela still loves young dream.

Rik - Yeah shes good i really like her you know best thing thats happened to me in ages. I hear you arent Single no more.

Dean - Nope your right, Nicole O Neill.

Rik - You done all right shes pretty fit. Well have to go on a night out the four of us.

Dean - Yeah thats a great idea, ill give you a call.

Rik - You walking back to the estate.

Dean - No i need another hour or two.

Rik - flipping heck talk about commitment its nearly dark. ANyway ill see you in the morning, but dont forget me whan your Englands start striker.

Dean - Would I forget you mate. Englands a long way off yet, Hollyomount aint no Chelsea but its a start.

RIk - See you tomorrow mate Bye

Dean - Bye.

Rik walks back towards the estate whistling Yourll Never walk alone.

Lad - Gerrrim

Rik - Whoah mate i aint got nothing on me ahhhhh.

Rik let out a scream and a cry for help but no one came. A pool of blood was begining to form and a small blade was left by the side of him, which someone had dropped. Rik lay there motionless and unconcious.

[DaVeyWaVey]

This is great so far Cornetgal!! Rik being stabbed at the end was totally unexpected! I can't wait to read what happens next!

I like your script so far because of the dialogue and interaction between characters and i really mean that.

Keep it up! :)

[Jada-GDR]

yay another one lol, i think i live off the soaps on this site

[Katy]

The phone rings at the Marshalls. Gemma Runs to go and fetch it.

Gemma - Ill get it, Hello.

Caller - Hello is that Debbie Marshall

Gemma - Nope its her daughter Gemma. I'll just fetch her

Debbie - Is it for me, who is it.

Gemma - Dunno i didnt ask.

Debbie - Hello, Debbie speaking

Caller - Hello, its Hollyomaount General Hospital im afraid to inform you that you son has been involved in an accident.

Debbie - Noooo. Breaks down in tears

Will - Debs whats the matter.... Give me the phone.

Caller - Im sorry to inform you over the phone but Richard was in an accident i think youd be best to get down here before we inform you of the details. It happened about an hour ago in the park.

Will - Were on our way, come on get in the car. Gemma help your mum please.

Gemma - Is he ok.

Will just get in the car i dont know yet. Hurry up.

THe family head of to the hospital to see whats happened to Rik.

Scene cuts to the Phillips house where Ash is making tea

Ash - Mich, I need a can of beer

Michaela - Why what you making.

Ash - Shephards pie, the beers to drink, dur.

Michaela - ssh. I know. What do you want Fosters

Ash - Yep Thanks angel.

Michaela - Just going to phone Rik.

Ash - You and that boyfriend you just seen him.

The doorbell goes

Ash - What the flaming hell do you lot want. I aint done nothing wrong and i was no way near that car theft on Bridges road before you ask.

Police Officer - Actually Mr Phillips its your Daughter Michaela we are after.

Ash - Why whats she done

Police Officer - We just need to ask her a few questions about her boyfriend Richard Marshall

Ash - Ill get her but dont you DARE upset her other wise you may be charging me with police assult. You Get me.

Police - Clear as a whistle mr Phillips. Michaela please

Ash - Oh Yeah, Mich Police to see you.... Youd best come in hadnt you.

[di marco]

great! :D just read the whole lot, its really good. more very soon please

[Katy]

Ash is hugging his daughter, she is upset after hearing the news about Rik.

Ash - For goodness sake can you not see shes upset.

Michaela - I dont get why anyone would do this why do you think id no anything. I hadnt seen him since school.

Police - OK, i can take you to the hospital if you want to see him.

Ash - That wont be necessary

Michaela - But Dad i want to see him

Ash - I know but ill take you.

Michaela - Thanks dad.

Police - You can follow us in your van.

[di marco]

great! :D awwwwww poor michaela. more soon please

[Katy]

Is been four days since Riks accident and although stable he has still not regained consioness. Scene Is in the the school.

Mr Cheshire - Michaela, would you please do some work ive asked four times for you to stop day dreaming, and you have not answered one question on the book yet.

Micheala - Sorry Sir, im just struggling to concentrate at the minute.

Mr Cheshire - I know its hard for you but at this present moment in time of mice and men is more inportant.

Michaela gets up and leave the room in tears.

Mr Cheshire - For goodness sake, what is it wirh female hormones

Dean - Your out of order, Riks still out cold and your worried about a stupid book

Mr Cheshire - and where do you think your going

Dean - To see if shes ok, Sir and im not asking if its ok

Mr Cheshire - Sit down, if you leave the room you ll have detention

Dean - Ill have the detention then, after school is it. See you then

he leaves the room leaving mr Cheshire shouting at him

Dean - Kayla, where are you. Come here. hes just a joker

Michaela - No one seems to care that hes lying there, i cant handle it. ]

Dean - i know, i cant come the hospital; with you tonight. Detention

Michaela - not for waling out the classroom

Dean - Yep fraid so, but id rather sit here with you than listen to that patronising old git.

Michaela smiles.

Dean - Ah, thats more like it a smile. Dont be so soft and give us a hug.

[DaVeyWaVey]

Aww...a nice scene, i think romance could be on the cards for Dean and Michaela. :)

[di marco]

great! :D awwww deans sweet! more very soon please

[Katy]

thanks for all your coments, more coming tonight/tomorrow.

[Pinkbanana]

Hey just stumbled upon this thread.....and glad I did. Have enjoyed reading Hollymount. Cracking stuff!

Looking forward to the next instalment. :)

[Katy]

Teh horse and jockey pub.

Will - A pint please Gina love.

Gina - £1 30 please. Hows Debbie

Will - Shes at the hospital im going up later hes still not come round

Gina - It must be awful for her

Will - Were all pretty shook up, our Gemmas taken it really bad

Scene cuts to the marshalls

The phone is ringing

Gemma - Hello

Debbie - Hes awake hes come round, youd best come up now.

Gemma - I cant believe it, is he ok.

Debbie - Yes hes as well as expected bit shook up about what happens. Wheres Will

Gemma - I dont know

Debbie - well go and find him and come and see him. Oh and Gem find Michaela Phillips, he wants to see her.

Gemma - Ill see you soon, tell Rik ive missed him.

Debbie - Will do.

Gemma grabs her coat to look for her dad.

[Katy]

Bradley moore storms into the pub.

Gina - Brad, whats wrong

Bradley - You

Gina - Pardon. I havent done anything

Bradley - Am i not good enough for you, is that it. I give you everything you want a home, nice presents and this is how you repay me

Tommy - Look Brad we dont want any trouble in here mate, save you row till you get home.

Bradley - She is not coming home

Gina - Bradley please what have i done, whatever it is im sorry i do appreciate you i promise.

Bradley - Your a two timing bitch.

Tommy - Whoa mate mate, thats enough people are trying to have a quiet drink. Come on ill take you home.

Bradley im not drunk, just want to know why shes done it to me.

Gina - I havent i swear, i wouldnt please listen lets do this another day wait till i get home please.

Bradley - So whats simon got that i havent

Gina - simon, look your making a show of yourself in front of the whole

Ash - Dont stop on our account this is better then Eastenders.

Tommy - ash shut it

Gina - no, no, you got it all wrong.

Bradley - give me one reason why i should let you stay.

Gina - Simon is a doctor, Im carrying your baby.

Gina runs through to the back of the pub in tears. Bradley is shell shocked stands staring into space

[Katy]

Gina is sitting in Tommy and sarahs bedroom above the pub, shell shocked at how she has had to announce her pregnany to him. Theres a knock on the door.

Sarah - Can i come in

Gina - Its your room of course you can

Sarah - Is that true

Gina - Yeah, i really dont know what im going to do, he looked so unhappy when i told him. I had it all planned in my head you know.

Sarah - Come here and give us a hug

Gina - Sar, Im so scared i can barely support myself what the hell am i going to do when a baby comes a long.

Sarah - We have loads of time to think about that, look go and find Bradley. Me and Tommy can manage here tonight it doesnt look very busy.

Gina - Cheers mate i dont know what id do without you.

Sarah - Youd survive.

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Will Marshall is heading out of the pub and towards his house where he spots his daughter Gemma

Will - Gem, what you doing out

Gemma - Dad, ive been looking everywhere for you. Riks come round

Will - What!!!! why didnt you tell me

Gemma - Come on weve got to get to the hospital. Ive been looking everywhere for you.

Will - Gem dont tell your mam i was in the Jockey.

Gemma - I wont ill knock on at Michaelas and see if shes in, Rik wants to see her.

[di marco]

great! :D just caught up. i feel sorry for gina and im glad riks come round. more very soon please