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Basically everything is how it should be and we are going from the EXPLOSIVE STORYLINE (I've made it the explosive episode)
In the queen Vic
Jake: So how about we go out for a drink later
Chrissie: Why? I own a pub!
Jake: Well why I dont come here for a drink?
Chrissie: Dont you normally?
Jake: Fine. Why dont I come to your flat for a drink?
Chrissie: ....Nah!
Jake: Pretty Please
Chrissie: Jake you are gonna have to try so much harder
Jake: How?
Chrissie: By...(Chrissie mutters in his ear and Jake turns bright red)
Jake: No way
Chrissie: Fine (she goes and serves someone else and Jake stares after her)
(Danny walks in)
Danny: Quit ogling the landlady
Jake: Shut up Danny
Danny: Sorry. Touchy subject
Jake: Well she wants me to...(whispers in Dann'y ear)
Danny: Woah! You gonna do it?
Jake: Maybe.
Danny: This I gotta see
Jake: You wont be there
Danny: Where you gonna get the stuff from?
Jake: Dunno.
Suddenly someone is banging on the vic doors (the pub is open, but it adds to the suspense)
Mystery voice1: Boys I know your in there
Jake: Was it just me or did that voice sound familiar?
Danny: Kind off
Mystery voice2: JAKE, DANNY. GET OUT HERE NOW.
Jake: Fred and Edie! F**K!
Danny: We gotta hide
Chrissie: What's going on?
Jake: You aint seen us. (Jake and Dany fly over the bar and hide. A huge burly man with a gun and a woman dressed in black walk in)
Chrissie: Can I help you?
Edie: The moon goons!
Chrissie: Dunno
Edie: Always heard barmaids were stupid.
Chrissie: I aint a barmaid!
Edie: Fine. I always heard Public Alchol service mamagers were dumb.
Fred: WHERE ARE THEY?
Chrissie: I dont know
Fred: Fine! (he shoots just above Pauline's head)
Dot: Oh I Say!
Chrissie: Look what you've done!
Edie: Tell us where they are and your pub dont get wrecked.
Chrissie: Listen. I DONT KNOW
Fred: (shoots again this time just above Keith's head)
Dot: OH I SAY
Edie: Shut up you old trout
Dot: Oh I Say
Edie: Last chance
Chrissie: Or what?
Fred: Or your dead!
Chrissie: (Takes a deep breathe) Listen love I dont know where the hell they are!
Suddenly the back door opens and Tracey walks in
Tracey: Oh chrissie you know these new earplugs of mine are so effective, cant hear a thing. (She enters the bar but she doesn't notice what is happening.) What on earth are Jake and Danny doing down there? What's going on?
Edie: Thanks love, nearly didn't find them. (Jumps over the bar) Hello boys. (she pulls them up and round the bar) Missed me?
Jake: Not really
Edie: Well I miss my money. You know there's something I have been wanting to do for ages (she knocks their heads together)
Danny: Ow! What was that for?
Edie: That was for my missing twenty grand and Fred has something for you too I am sure
Fred: YEAH BUT IT AINT...
Edie: Fred dont shout
Fred: Sorry. Yeah but it for display in a public place. LEts just say you aint coming back!
Jake: F**K! JUst let us go
Edie: Um....No!
Chrissie: I'm calling the cops
Edie: Dont even think about it! None of you think about saying a word
Suddenly Jake and Danny make a run for it but two bodyguards are waiting outside.
Edie: You think I'd come without my bodyguards. Get then in the car boys.
Jake and Danny are dragged in a black mercedes and Fred gets in. Chrissie and everyone have run outside to try and stop them
Edie: Oh before I go let me introduce myself I'm Edie. Edie Hunter.
She steps in the car and they zoom off.
Chrissie: JJJJAAAAAAAKKKKEEEEEEE!
She breaks down sobbing.
Little Mo: Dnt worry we're gonna call the police and get everything sorted
Chrissie: OH shut up. Just leave me alone go back to sleeping with your sisters husband!
Dot: Oh I...
Chrissie: You can shut up too Dot. The Vic is closed!
Chrissie storms inside and locks the doors, then breaks down in tears.
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Please tell me what you think. Will continue if i get positive feedback.
xxx
cool! that is really good!! keep going i want 2 no wat happens 2 danny and jake!!!!!!
lol
It's wkd you should post more I can't wait to see what happens next
Chris_2k11
24-04-2005, 01:58
that was great, had to laugh at Dot butting in all the time :lol:
di marco
24-04-2005, 08:42
great! :D you really have to post more. loved the way dot kept saying oh i say!!! :) hope danny and jake are gonna be alright. hope theres more soon, cant wait
I almost pee'd my pants in parts. You have GOT to post more. If you don't i'll scream and scream untill i'm purple, and purple rain is such a cliche so more please :D
SarahWakefield
24-04-2005, 09:33
That Was Really Good! Well Done ;)
.:Kitz:.
24-04-2005, 10:30
Oh i say! That was fab, Dot was so funny. But how mean calling her an old trout?! Keep posting PLEASE!!
That is great More soon i hope
Luv ya
Layne
x x x
Ooh i say!
Angeldelight
26-04-2005, 19:20
OH MY GOD this is such as brill scrpti you have to write i NEED to know what happenes, don't keep me in suspense, my nerves can't take it
I will post some more tomorrow. Just writing it now.
I will post some more tomorrow. Just writing it now.
Tomorrow??? Thats code for today right????
Angeldelight
27-04-2005, 18:37
where is it? i can't see it! where is it? i can't see it! where is it? i can't see it!
Jake: So how about we go out for a drink later
Chrissie: Why? I own a pub!
Jake: Well why I dont come here for a drink?
Chrissie: Dont you normally?
Jake: Fine. Why dont I come to your flat for a drink?
Chrissie: ....Nah!
Jake: Pretty Please
Chrissie: Jake you are gonna have to try so much harder
Jake: How?
Chrissie: By...(Chrissie mutters in his ear and Jake turns bright red)
Jake: No way
Chrissie: Fine (she goes and serves someone else and Jake stares after her)
I was loving the JC flirtation here :love:
Dot: Oh I...
And I loved Dot too :lol::lol::lol::lol:
Chris_2k11
01-05-2005, 17:25
please post more soon jake_moon_rox! :D
Sorry for not posting here it is.
Chrissie stood at the window staring closely everytime a car drove up. She hadn't slept for days, all she could think about was where Jake was. Suddenly she saw Alfie running towards the Vic. She raced downstairs and pulled the door open.
Chrissie: What is it?
Alfie: They've called
Chrissie: And...
Alfie: They want £10 000 or they..
Chrissie: They what...
Alfie: they kill them
Chrissie: We need to get that money
Alfie: How? I dont have any savings
Chrissie: All I have is this place. We could sell it
Alfie: No Way. I have an idea
Chrissie: Yeah
Alfie: Johnny
Chrissie: Do you think he'll do it?
Alfie: It's worth a try. I'll go now.
Chrissie: I'm coming too.
Chrissie grabs her coat and the two of them run across to the club
Chrissie: JOHNNY
Johnny wanders out of his office
Johnny: What is it? Have you heard anything?
Alfie: We have heard something. They want £10 000 by 5 o'clock or else.
Johnny: Look come with me. I got about £9000 in the safe. I'll get it now. I care about Jake, he's like a son to me. What about the other grand?
Chrissie: I have that in my bank.
Alfie: Well come on then. What are we waiting for? Its all ready half three
Chrissie: Where do we have to meet them anyway?
Alfie: At the old quarry
Johnny: That's a bit odd.
Chrissie: Look we don't have time to worry
LATER
Chrissie and Alfie pull up at the old quarry and see the kidnappers standing side by side. Behind them is an old fiesta. When Chrissie and Alfie step out they can here shouts from coming inside it.
Edie: I told you to gag them Fred
Fred: I did, ther ejust dead loud for hostages
Chrissie: (muttering to Alfie) Their in there
Alfie: I know (To Edie) We got your money
Edie: Hand it over then
Alfie gives the briefcase to Edie.
Alfie: You gonna let them go then?
Edie: Well all the money is there so...
She pulls out a remote control
Edie: You see this. It's set up to control that car over there. One press of this button and off it goes.
Chrissie: You wouldn't. We gave you the money.
Edie: Tough! She presses the button.
Screams are heard from the car as it rolls down into the quarry. There's silence and then suddenly the car blows up.
Chrissie runs to the edge and sees the smouldering wreck.
Chrissie: NNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOO
To be continued...
.:SpIcYsPy:.
07-05-2005, 19:52
Give me more please. Noooooo. Why do you do this to us. Please come back!! COME BACK JAKE!! I need you!!
EastendersRox
08-05-2005, 08:17
They won't die, at least I hope not.
No, don't do this to us!!!! Post more soon!
di marco
08-05-2005, 09:13
great! :D you cant make jake and danny die, they need to live! :) hope theres more soon, cant wait
Here's whats coming up:
Someone returns from the dead
A rather dashing young man is returning to the square
Dot passes her driving test
more soon
xxx
Oh my gawd! You can't leave it like that!
Poor Chrissie! Poor Jake! Poor everyone apart from Fred and Edie!
Fab anyways :cheer: !
Angeldelight
08-05-2005, 13:58
what? what? what? you can't leave it like that!!! you can't kill them yoiu cant YOU JUST CAN't kill them, :sobbing on the keyboard: no you can't kill them
EastendersRox
09-05-2005, 16:54
You Can't Leave It Like That!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Angeldelight
09-05-2005, 17:30
where are you? why haven't you posted anymore!!!
you have to get back here right now, my nerves can't take the suspense any more :breaking into sob on the keyboard:
please tell me what happens
EastendersRox
09-05-2005, 17:34
Post Soon!
COME BACK NOW I want to know and I want to know now
Pleaseeeeeee Pretty please this is fabaroonie
Angeldelight
11-05-2005, 18:58
i need to know!!!! i REALLY need to know!! they can't be dead, god please don't let them be dead!!!
my nerves are all frazzled, please post more and tell me what happens, PRETTY PLEASE
To warn you this is a very sad part, so hankies at the ready.
Chrissie sat at the front of the church along side Alfie, Nana, Sam and Spencer. Tears slowly dripped down her face as she stared at the two empty coffins. The bodies of Jake and Danny had been destoryed in the blast, only one thing was left, Jake's scarf. Chrissie kept it tightly wound round her neck, she would always keep it. The vicar was saying a few words, but it meant nothing, not like Alfie's speech. Alfie had said how lively the two boys were, and how they had always looked out for each other. How anyone who had ever known them had been lucky. And how Chrissie should always remember how luckyshe was to have met a man like Jake.
Angels by Robbie Williams started to play as Alfie, Spencer, Johnny, Charlie, Dennis, Ian, and two of Jake and Danny's old mates carried the two coffins out of the church towards the grave. Chrissie and everyone followed. The church was full, people Chrissie knew and people she didn't. It felt safe to have them around her.
Slowly the two coffins were lowered into each of the graves. The box of dirt was past round. Chrissie took a handful and threw it. As she watched it float up into the air and land on Jake's coffin she remebered all the great times they had had. And then the tears came again. Alfie and Dennis led her away from the grave and Chrissie slowly collapsed down crying.
To be continued.....
.:SpIcYsPy:.
11-05-2005, 19:26
*starts crying so much buckets are needed and are filled up in seconds*
Angeldelight
11-05-2005, 19:35
Oh My God, my mascara has run but i don't care!!!! how could you do that? how could you kill them!!!!!
please tell me they're alive!! please tell me they're alive!! please tell me they're alive!!
pleaseeeeeeeee don't let them die
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! You've made me cry now :crying:
You can't kill them! Please just tell me you posted this be accident! PLEASE! Don't say they're dead.
*Cries an ocean of tears* I need JC loving and quick before I die like Jake and Danny did :crying:. NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
You know this is very hard for me to write. I have to write Jake's grave and it feels so weird!
Here's the next part
2 weeks on
Rosie, Little Mo and everyone else stand outside the vic. The snow is starting to fall and they're all freezing.
Rosie: Chrissie open up (to everyone else) It's been over 2 weeks since she opened up. She's going to have to come out sometime.
Suddenly Dennis comes out of the Vic
Little Mo: How did you get in there?
Dennis: Doesn't matter. She's not there
Rosie: There's only one place she can be
Dennis: Jake's grave
Dennis and Little Mo run towardsthe cemetry
At the cemetry.
Between the two graves lies a lonely figure. She's covered in snow and she is muttering.
Chrissie: I'm coming Jake, I'll be there soon. Just a bit longer.
Slowly her lips stop moving and her eyelids close.
Little Mo: Dennis she's here
Dennis: Pick her up, I'm calling an ambulance.
Little Mo: I'm not giving up. Just keep her warm.
30 minutes later
Doctor: Stand clear, shocking
Dennis stands outside the door, his nose pressed against the window. She can't die he wont let her.
Chrissie's spirit slowly floats from her body. She can see them trying to save her. She doesn't want to be saved. Slwoly she leaves the hospital and she floats up a tunnel. There's a light at the end and as she gets closer she sees gates and a figure. Jake. His hands are outstretched. She can nearly reach him. Slowly she closes her hand around Jake's and he pulls her into a passionate kis. She never wants to leave. Suddenly she's being pulled, pulled away from Jake back down the tunel.
Chrissie: Jake
She starts to enter her body and her eyes flutter open, crystal tears falling down her cheeks. She can still feel Jake, she wants him. She doesn't want to be here.
Doctor: You can come in we've saved her.
Dennis runs in and grabs Chrissie's hand.
Dennis: Chrissie can you hear me?
Chrissie doesn't reply and slowly she closes her eyes. He's not Jake.
To Be Continued
xxx
EastendersRox
12-05-2005, 16:01
More!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
OMG! Post more soon!
I'm in tears :crying:!
oH MY GOD, THIS IS SO SAD!!!!!
pOST MORE SOON THOIUGH, STAY PLEASE CHRISSIE
luv ya
Layne
x x x
Angeldelight
12-05-2005, 21:38
Oh My God what are you doing to us!!!!!!!!!! post more now
Here I am blubbing my eyes out you murdered jake and danny then tried to take Chrissie away SOBBING ON KEY BOARD
This is fab post more but why is it that I think Jake and Danny might still be alive they didn't exactly find anything did they
EastendersRox
13-05-2005, 16:02
Make them alive! Write anything, like they fought with Fred and Edie and took their place to steal the money. Or, or, say that they escaped and that's why they didn't find their bodies!!!!!!!!!!! Anything to bring them back!
di marco
14-05-2005, 08:14
brill! :D this is soooooooo sad! jake and danny need to be alive, you cant kill them! :) post more soon please, cant wait
Please ignore the spoilers I gave you as I have changed the course of the story. Sorry
Here's the next bit
Chrissie was working behind the bar at the vic. Its been 4 months since the deaths of Jake and Danny. Suddenly an announcement comes on the radio.
Reporter: Following a tip off from an unkown person the arrest has been made on one Mr Fredrick Bobo Johansson and one Miss Edie Engle Sveden. They have been charged with the murder of a Mr Daniel Moon and a Mr Jacob Moon. While studying the scene of the crime, a body has been discovered. We are unable at this time to identify if it is either of the two brothers, or another victim. The poilce have made contact with the two next of kin who will be called upon to identify the body. Next we take a look at the heros in your area.
Chrissie: Oh my god. What if it's Jake or Danny?
Mo: Chrissie, It's the police on the phone for you. (she hands Chrissie the phone)
Chrissie: Hello. Yes this is Mrs Watts. huh uh. Ok I'll be right there. Bye. They want we to go identify the body.
Mo: Oh (suddenly Alfie comes in)
Alfie: Chrissie they called me aswell. Can we take your car?
Chrissie: Sure
Mo: Alfie I was wondering if tonight you wanted to go out for a drink?
Alfie: Mo, I have just been told one of family bodies has beenfound. Do you think I have time for a drink?
Mo: Oh well, No. Look Alfie I know what you're going through
Alfie: You have no idea
Chrissie: Come on lets go
At the morgue
Police: Right, we know this must be veyr hard for the both of you. What we are going to do is just pull back the sheet and could you tell us if you recognise the body.
Chrissie and Alfie: Ok
Slowly the sheet is pulled back
Alfie: Oh god
Chrissie: Oh no.
Police: Do you recognise the body?
Chrissie: Yes its..........
To be continued
di marco
14-05-2005, 10:16
great! :D wonder who the body is. you cant leave us in suspense like that! :) more soon please, cant wait
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! Who is it? Who is it? Who is it? TELL ME!
Sorry I was going to post the next part of my script yesterday but I wasn't in. I will post it now because I said I would if you would :D
Post more soon :angel:
EastendersRox
14-05-2005, 13:45
Who is it??????????????
who is it????????????????? please tell us soon.
Jessie Wallace
16-05-2005, 13:15
That was great, well done
Angeldelight
16-05-2005, 13:16
Noooooooooooooooooooo get back here right now!!! how dare you leave it like that!!!! you HAVE to tell us who it is!!!!!
:sobbing on the keyboard:
please don't let them be dead, please don't let them be dead, please don't let them be dead, please don't let them be dead, please don't let them be dead, please don't let them be dead
Need to no who it is, come on MORE!!!!!
EastendersRox
16-05-2005, 16:07
Come back!!!!!!!!!!! You have to tell us who it is!!!!!! I think one of the brothers died and the other one survived and tipped Fred and Edie off to the police.
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Come back please don't leave it like that I have to Know pleaseeeeeee this is brill
EastendersRox
17-05-2005, 16:19
Come back now! We need more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
you really are rather mean keeping us waiting like this :(
EastendersRox
19-05-2005, 16:13
True...
who th hel is it? :searchme: dont be mean!! please! :crying:
its great tho :clap:
Well I am trying to revise. Sorry. More tomoro. I promise
xxx
Chrissie: Yes its...... Danny
Police: Thank you. I know this must be hard for you but we are doing everything we can to find Jake.
Alfie: You mean there's no sign of the body
Police: No I'm sorry. Look do you need a ride home
Alfie; No its OK we need a walk. Ok Chrissie?
Chrissie: (Wiping away the tears) Ok.
They slowly wak out of the police station
Chrissie: What happens if they don't ever find Jake? Alfie, what happens if he's still out there. Alive.
Alfie: There's no point thinking about that.
(alfie throws down a £2 coin to a beggar)
Alfie: I always feel sorry for people like that. Come on lets get back to the vic
They walk away. as the beggar picks up the coin.
Beggar: Thanks Alfie
xxx
POOR DANNY he's dead that's so mean but Jake's alive yay yay This is brill
di marco
20-05-2005, 06:36
great! oh no that dannys dead. but could the beggar be jake? just a random guess but he knew alfies name! :) more soon please, cant wait
Great stuff. Hope Jakes alive, I was wondering about the beggar as he knew Alfie by name!
EastendersRox
20-05-2005, 16:15
great! oh no that dannys dead. but could the beggar be jake? just a random guess but he knew alfies name! :) more soon please, cant wait
Very true, di marco! How did the beggar now Alfie's name? Maybe that is Jake! Plz let it be!
Angeldelight
20-05-2005, 16:19
ahhhhhh poor Danny.... i can't believe you killed him :sobbing quietly:
it's Jake!! it's Jake!! it's Jake!! it's Jake!! it's Jake!! it's Jake!! it's Jake!! it's Jake!! he's alive!! HE'S ALIVE
EastendersRox
20-05-2005, 16:23
Plz, LET IT BE JAKE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
please please please please please let it be jake!! :cheer:
more soon please :bow:
EastendersRox
20-05-2005, 17:25
Let it be Jake, plz let it be! It has to be!
Alfie and Chrissie sit in the Vic. Everyone has heard the news that Danny's dead and they are holding a minute's silence. Suddenly the doors fly open and the beggar crawls in.
Beggar: Help me please
Alfie: look I'm trying to hold a silence for my cousin ok.
Beggar: oh my god Alfie, their dead.
Alfie: Only one of them is. Hold on how do you my name?
Beggar: Don't you recognise me?
Chrissie: Jake?
Beggar: No. I'm spencer.
TO BE CONTINUED......
Sorry it would be to simple if it was Jake. trying to decide what to do with JAke though. hhhhmmmmmm.... the possibilities!
Angeldelight
20-05-2005, 18:14
Spencer... Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oo... where's Jake? where's Jake? where's Jake... please don't let him be dead
tjhis is brill you have to keep posting
Spencer is alive DAMN but why is he a tramp and what about Jake SNIFFS LOUDLY I want him to back be with Chrissie and they can have a little bebe awwwwwwwwwwwwwww
this is brill post more very soon
Oh god ignor me I read it and then worte that without thinking put it down to too much drink last night and my dreadful tutor making us go in to college this morning when I'd only had four hours sleep I will change it
Angeldelight
20-05-2005, 18:52
you had more than 4 hours sleep you... hehe... i'm glad you wrote that and not me... it's not JAKE... WHERS JAKE GONE???
Jake and Chrissie FOREVER n EVER n EVER
Sharon and Dennis FOREVER n EVER n EVER
OMG! Sorry I didn't noticed you'd posted the last 2 parts until now. This is fab but WHERE'S JAKE? I need to know like, now!
WE WANT JAKE BACK!!!!! For chrissies sake!
This is great, more asap
Luv ya
Layne
x x x
EastendersRox
21-05-2005, 07:36
For god sake! SPENCER? We want Jake back! Whatever you do, bring him back!
di marco
21-05-2005, 08:20
great! :D spencer??? what about jake, he needs to come back! :) post more very soon please, cant wait
SPENCER :angry:i wonder where jake is :hmm: hopefuly well find out v soon! hint hint!!
its great tho :clap:
EastendersRox
22-05-2005, 07:51
Bring Jake back so I don't have to kill you (not)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
But you see how desperate I am.
If you spent less time living your life and more time writing stories for us, we wouldn't get so frustrated at you !!!!!!!!!!!!
MORE!!!!!
Fine. Rain to shut you up. Here
Alfie: Spencer?
Spencer: Whats going on?
Chrissie: Do you want to go upstairs and talk?
Alfie: Yeah. Come on spence.
Upstairs:
Spencer: What happened to Jake and Danny?
Alfie: Well they were kidnapped and then driven off a cliff and now Danny's body has been found. But we all know Jake is dead. Chrissie just can't face it.
Spencer: God. This must be hard.
Alfie: Yeah. But why are you a tramp?
Spencer: Ah
Alfie: Ah?
Spencer: Well when I left Maxwell and I didn't really get on so I left. Then I met up with this guy and we started sleeping rough. I didn't want to come back here. Iw as mess. Then one night my mate disappeared. So I headed back to Walford. But I couldn't face seeing you so....
Alfie: Come here bruv.
He envelopes him in a hug but then Chrissie shouts from downstairs
Chrissie: OH MY GOD. JAKE!
hahahahahaha i can't believe that worked....THANK YOU!!!
now more please :D
di marco
22-05-2005, 09:56
great! :D yay please say that jakes actually there, alive! :) more very soon please, cant wait
o wow! pls say jakeys back!!PLEASE!! :thumbsup:
More soon, great stuff, Jake yey!!!!!!!
JAKE JAKE JAKE YAY YAY this is fab but I need more pleaseeeeeeeee
Angeldelight
22-05-2005, 17:05
yey yey yey yey... Jake's back... Jake's back... Jake's back... jake's back
EastendersRox
23-05-2005, 16:25
Jake's back, YIPPEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ok it's tomorrow now....hurry and post !!!!!!
Angeldelight
23-05-2005, 20:00
it's tomorrow and i stil can't see it... where is it... :sobbing on the keyboard: i cna't take this anymore...
di marco
24-05-2005, 08:42
you lied to us! :( you havent posted the next part :( i need to know if jakes alive!!!
Hey give me a break. it is hard controlling people's lives. ok! I also have exams. fine here is Jake!
Alfie: Spence I've got to go.
Alfie races downstairs.
Alfie: Chrissie, where's Jake?
Chrissie: right there
Alfie: Where?
Chrissie: Right there look. He's right in front of me.
Alfie: Chrissie, No one is there
Chrissie: But he's right there. Alfie can't you see him. Wait he's going. Jake, come back!
Alfie: Chrissie: I think you need to go see the doctor
Chrissie: But he was right there Alfie!
TO BE CONTINUED.....
EastendersRox
24-05-2005, 16:23
She was just going mad? SO HE ISN'T REALLY BACK?
o no chrissies goin mad!!! nooooooooo :crying:
tis great!! but can we have th real jakey bak please!! :bow:
Chrissie io feel for you, i want Jake too!
This is great, good luck woth your exams and post more asap!
Luv ya
layne
x x x
di marco
24-05-2005, 21:11
great! :D oh no chrissies going mad! jake needs to come back though! :) post more soon please, cant wait
(ps. good luck with the exams)
I got all me hopes up and he weren't there or was he this is brill
Angeldelight
25-05-2005, 17:03
noooooooooooooo... you have to tell me he was there... he is REAL... he WAS there...please tell me he was there... please please :sobbing on the keyboard:... Don't worry Chrissie we ALL want him too
Absolutley brill... please post more... more more more
JAAAAAAAAAAAAKE! Come back nowwwwwwwwwwww! We all miss you :crying:
Post more now and bring back Jake so Chrissie and him can be together!
the_watts_rule
26-05-2005, 08:35
Oh I Say! That was fab!
I am so sorry but i probably wont be posting till saturday as my exams have started. soz
xxx
p.s here's a clue- there's is a man in chrissie's life
EastendersRox
26-05-2005, 16:11
Ooooooooooooooh. who?
Angeldelight
26-05-2005, 16:34
Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!!j Ake's Back!!!!!
Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!! Jake's Back!!!!!j Ake's Back!!!!!
It might not be him! But yey if it is!!!!!!!! :cheer:
But who else could it be??? :hmm:
EastendersRox
27-05-2005, 16:00
???????????
But plz let it be Jake!
Here we go...
Doctor: Well I can't see anything mentally or physically wrong with you
Chrissie: Really? But what about me seeing jake and nobody else seeing him
Doctor: I would say it was all just grief. I think you just need to rest for a few days. You had the shock of having to identify Danny's body. It's all too much. You need to rest before you have a nervous breakdown.
Chrissie: Ok. Thank you doctor
Alfie takes her home and she goes to lie down. Alfie heads to the phone
Alfie: You need to get here now. She needs you. No, don't try using that as an excuse. She's on the edge all ready. You were here and now you've gone flouncing off with your new fancy women. Get back here now. I don't care what you're doing.Bring your girlfriend if you must. But it is rather inconsiderate. Danny's dead. We know. No, don't try to get off it with that. Here tomorrow, or else
He hangs up
TO BE CONTINUED...............
EastendersRox
29-05-2005, 18:18
Could he be talking to Den?
Angeldelight
29-05-2005, 18:25
what? what? what?
i'm really confused now... are you talking about Jake or Den... help i'm confused... help
I'm a bit confuzzled to, please post the next part it will sort us all out!
xxx
EastendersRox
30-05-2005, 07:13
Well, it sounds like Den to me, isn't he dead?
here's a clu. Its not Den!
here's a clu. Its not Den!
Doesn't help! LOL!! Please post more whenever darlin, luv this!!!
Layne
x x x
nana is sitting by the fire when Alfie comes in.
Alfie: Are you Ok nana?
Nana: I just, well its not the same without the boys.
Alfie: We all miss them
Nana: Oh alfie. (nana breaks down crying)
Alfie: nana I've got someone that I hink you should talk to.
Nana: Who?
Alfie drags someone in
Nana: Bobby???????
Who is bobby??? This is great post more soon, please
Layne
x x x
Angeldelight
30-05-2005, 13:59
Bobby? who's Bobby? i'm really really really confused now... please post more soon... more more more...
do we know boby?? :searchme:
o wel tis great!! :clap:
Who's Bobby?
Bring Jake back or else!
EastendersRox
31-05-2005, 09:04
Oooooooooh, who's Bobby?
di marco
31-05-2005, 09:17
brill! :D but whos bobby? and i wanna know where jake is! :) more very soon please, cant wait
Bobby is Jake and Danny's dad isn't he this is brill
congrats JBL, ur the only one that knew that.
Nana: Bobby what on earth are you doing here?
Bobby: Alf...(alfie glares at him) I heard danny was dead and Jake was missing so I came to support you.
Nana goes and hits Bobby.
Nana: Don't tell such porkies. You never come and visit your sons or me and now you come with your new girlfriend flirting. Its disgusting.
Meanwhile
The police are rooting aound the crime scene when a scream is heard.
Police 1: what is it?
Police 2: It's a hand and it has a ring on it with J
Police 1 : could it be?
Police 2: I dont know but we should call the families in case
:eek: :eek: :eek: is it jake???
more more more
Is it jake, post moree soon fab stuff
Luv ya
Layne
x x x
Angeldelight
05-06-2005, 14:35
noooooooooooooooooooo... please don't let him be dead... please post more... i need to know where he is... I NEED TO KNOW... more more more
Please bring back Jake and let him be with Chrissie.
Fab again :)
ameliauk1
05-06-2005, 19:58
wow great but its really confusing bringing all these characters in and then posting tiny bits and leaving long times in between. its a good story though xx amelia
Chrissie stood behind the bar as the phone started ringing.
Chrissie: Tracey can you watch the bar?
Tracey: sure
Chrissie went to answer the phone.
Chrissie: hello
Police 1: Hello Mrs Watts. Its the police
Chrissie: What have you found him
Police 1: We've found a hand and we believe it to be jakes.
Chrissie faints to the floor. suddenly the letterbox opened and an envelope fell through the door. Chrisise scrambled over to the door and grabbed the envelope, she opened it and screamed.
Tracey: what is it Chrissie?
Chrissie: Its jake's...........
TO BE CONTINUED.............
EastendersRox
06-06-2005, 16:12
What???????????
OMG please post more soon, need to no what it is!!
Layne
x x x
What is it? Post more soon!
omg what is it???????? :confused: :searchme:
more soon please! :clap:
chrissie sat crying in the living room as the police came running in.
Police: Where is it?
Chrissie: Its (sobs) on the (sobs) table
The police walk over to the table.
Police: YUCK!
Police: That's hardly the right attitude. We'll have to take this away for examination,check it's Mr moons.
Chrissie: Thanks.
Meanwhile
At the quarry someone was creeping up the cliff.
TO BE CONTINUED........
P.S I may end this soon depends how i feel
EastendersRox
07-06-2005, 16:28
It sounds like his hand or something, YUCK!
EastendersRox
07-06-2005, 16:28
It sounds like he's dead!
di marco
09-06-2005, 09:05
great! :D please say its jake climbing up the cliff! :) more soon please, cant wait
Angeldelight
09-06-2005, 12:40
ok please let it not be Jake's other hand... that would just be to gross... please let him be alive... post more soon...
Please let jakey boy return he's soooooooooo cute post more very soooon Pleaseeee
huh :confused:
is it jakes hand or is he climbing up the cliff?? :searchme: or is it both???!! :)
more soon please!!! :cheer:
Finally here is the next bit
Chrissie sat sobbing in the kitchen. The phone rang.
Chrissie: Hello
Police: Mrs watts we have some good news
(Chrissie wipes away the tears): Yes
Police: We can confirm neither bits of the body discovered belong to Mr Moon
Chrissie: You mean Jake could still be alive?
Police: Yes.
Chrissie: Oh thank you so much. (She hangs up)
(Meanwhile someone is walking up the stairs)
Chrissie sits at the kitchen table when someone's hands go over her eyes, she is about toscream when they say
MM:Guess who?
To BE CONTINUED
Gunshot Will Not Be Continued Till The Vote Is Closed!
Xxx
Angeldelight
21-06-2005, 11:34
what! what! what! you can't leave it like that... please let it be Jake... please let it be Jake... please please please... let it be Jake... Jake and Chrissie together forever n ever n ever...
Now i know what it feels like, who is MM? and please post more
Layne
x x x
Is it Jake? I hope so! :)
That's so unfair please post moreeeeeee soon please it has to be Jake it has to be I'll cry if it isn't off to vote now....so post more pleaseeeeeee
post more soon please!!!!!!! :cheer: :) :bow: :clap: :thumbsup:
The poll closes in 20 minutes! Unless there is a sudden rush of Jakissie haters, Jake will win!
xxx
Post the next part pleeeeeeeeeeeeease!
Chrissie sits at the kitchen table when someone's hands go over her eyes, she is about toscream when they say
MM:Guess who?
Chrissie: Jake?
Jake: The one and only!
Chrissie jumps up and kisses him. He kisses her back.
Chrissie: Where have you been?
Jake: Its a long story.........
xxx
I promise the next one will be nice and long
JAKE'S BACK! Awwwwwww! I can't wait for the next part! More soon
squillyfer
23-06-2005, 19:01
yay he's back!!!
Angeldelight
23-06-2005, 19:21
yey yey yey... it's JAKE... it's JAKE... yey yey yey... he's BACK... yey yey yey... my world is now set to rights.... hehe
JAKEY BOY yay yay yay he's back and he's back and he's back yay yay more soooon
(If you were wondering Jake's fathers gone, he was rather boring and had to go on a cruise)
Jake and Chrissie sit in the lounge.
Chrissie: So what happened?
Jake: Its a long story
Chrissie: You said that
Jake: Right, I did didn't I
Chrissie: Yep. Come on Jake just tell me
Jake: Well everything happened just as everyone thought it did
Chrissie: So you and Danny just went over in a cliff in a car that exploded 10 seconds later?
Jake: Okay, It didn't happen like that.
Chrissie: I gathered
Jake: Are you trying to be angry with me?
Chrissie: And they say Sherlock Holmes didn't exist!
Jake: What did I do?
Chrissie: What did you do???????
Jake: Wow I have a parrot
Chrissie: (starting to shout)Look, you disappear and everyone thinks you're dead and you let me think you're dead. Then I have to face a whole funeral. Next I am forced to identify Danny's body. Finally I have to start recieving apparent bits of your body through the post. And you ask what did you do?
Jake: Fine. Can I just ask one thing before we go on?
Chrissie: (shouting) WHAT?
Jake: Bits of me through the post?
Chrissie: (starting to calm down) well it started with a hand then other bits. The police took them away to be identified and I was so scared. Dont laugh!
Jake: I'm not laughing (laughing)
Chrissie: (Trying not to laugh) Look, can we just sort out what happened with you first.
Jake: Right. Well when the car went off the cliff, Danny's head whacked against the dashboard and I knew he was dead. I managed to escape and I dragged Danny with me. Then the car went up. I had to run, before someone looked. I left Danny in the bushes. I didnt want to, but I had too. He was brother I know I shouldn't have left him. (starts to cry) I just felt like I deserted him.
Chrisie: You didn't
Jake: (wiping away tears) That's when Johnny found me.
Chrissie Johnny........................
TO BE CONTINUED........................
squillyfer
24-06-2005, 20:54
yay more asap
johnny!!! :eek: :eek:
more soon please!!!! :cheer: :bow:
Just caught up please post more like NOW!
Johnny....this is wicked babes post more sooooooon pleaseeee awwww bless Jakissie
EastendersRox
25-06-2005, 06:51
Just caught up - yay! Jake's back!
Tina: Come on babe, lets go over to the Vic
Johnny: Fine but only for one drink, I got work to do
Tina: You always do!
They head over towards the vic
Little Mo: What can I get you Johnny?
Johnny: An orange juice for me and a white wine for Tina
Little Mo: Coming right up. You must be happy then?
Johnny: What about?
Little Mo: Jake being back
Johnny: Jake's back?
uh oh I smell trouble big time can't wait fo the next part more sooooon
di marco
26-06-2005, 16:16
great! :D just caught up. johnny saved jake! and jakes back with chrissie yay! :) more very soon please, cant wait
Angeldelight
26-06-2005, 21:48
have just caught up and can't believe i missed all that... so Jake's been alive from the start and with Johnny??? and Johnny doesn't know he's gone to see Chrissie??? i hate to say it but i reckon there's guna be a lot of trouble now... more more more... please post more.... SOON... NOW... PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE...
EastendersRox
27-06-2005, 16:10
Yay!
But why's Johnny bring weird? Maybe he told Jake to stay away.
Jake stares out the window and spots Johnny.
Jake: I'm just going to have yto um go and sort something out
Chrissie: What? you still haven't told me about Johnny.
Jake: I will just give me two minutes
He runs out
Chrissie goes over to the window and sees Jake running over to Johnny. They disappear into an alleyway
Johnny: What are you doing back?
Jake: What do you think?
Johnny: After everything that happened between you know
Jake: Oh you mean that little thing about you tipping off those two kidnappers about where Danny and I were
Johnny: Ok that but I was talking about the other thing
Jake: Oh don't worry I'm not bothered about that. Trust me thougb you are going to pay
Johnny: I was trying to stop you coming back
Jake: Failed didn't it. You put Alfie and Chrissie through hell because of it!
Johnny: I just didn't want you back. After everything that's happened recently
Jake: Oh yes because putting Chrissie through hell wasn't the only thing you did
Johnny: What
Jake: I know Johnny
Johnny: About what?
Jake: about the letter
Johnny: You know
Jake: I know
TO BE CONTINUED.....
EastendersRox
29-06-2005, 16:20
Ooooooooooooh, a mystery letter!
Johnny it was your fault for putting Chrissie through hell so just go and die! Jake go back to Chrissie NOW!
oooooo what does he know??? im intrigued!!! :confused:
more soon please!!!! :cheer: :bow: :thumbsup:
Angeldelight
29-06-2005, 18:43
Oooh... it's all kicking off now... is it Johnny who's been sending Chrissie the body part letters then? Johnny is EVIL... EVIL i tell you... He split Chrissie and Jake up... he helped those nasty people KILL danny... and if that wasn't enough you've put Chrissie and Alfie through hell... AND made sure Jake stayed away... DIE johnny DIE...
Know what?
more please
layne
x x x
EastendersRox
30-06-2005, 15:53
Die Johnny, die!!!!!!!!!!
You put Chrissie n Alfie through hell and you got the Moons into this mess!
ooooooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhh a letter please kill Johnny please nasty Johnny his faulkt Danny's dead the big meanie die and go and rot
di marco
03-07-2005, 14:52
brill! :D i hate johnny! was it johnny sending the body parts to chrissie? evil evil johnny! :) more soon please, cant wait
EastendersRox
08-07-2005, 16:38
Just found out about Bobby, apparently, he's Jake and Danny's dad.
The final part will posted a.s.ap.
xxx
Final part I
Jake turns his back on Johnny and heads to the Vic. Johnny heads after him.
Johnny: Jake wait, you have to understand why I did those things.
Jake: How can you justify sending body parts in the post and sending that letter?
Johnny: I think you need to tell me what you know about that letter
Jake: Fine, lets go to the cafe
They wonder into the cafe.
Jane: Jake? I thought you were dead.
Jake: So did a lot of people. COuld we have two teas please.
Jane: Sure. It's on the house.
Jake and Johnny go to a table in the corner
Ian: What do you think you're doing? Free teas?
Jane: Look, the man's just come back from the dead. He deserves a free drink.
Ian: You could have given him a higher price, he wouldn't know the price had changed.
Jane: IAN!
Johnny: So what do you know about this letter
Jake: I know yousent it to my mum, who was so ill the shcok would have killed her. I know you describded me being thrown off the cliff and then being...chopped up and mailed to my girlfriend. Johnny she had a heart attack when she read that. She nearly died.
Johnny: Jake, I only did it so you would have no one to go to. Look they were threatining to kill Ruby if I didn't do it. I didn't want her to die.
Jake: Oh so it was fine for me and Danny and my mum to die though.
Johnny: look, when someone close to you is dying you do whatever you can to save them. Look Jake, I am sorry thopugh.
Jake: Forget it Johnny. What you did it was despicable.
Jake gets up.
Jake: Make those teas take out.
Jane: Sure thing. She hands Jake the teas
Jake walks out. Thanks.
Johnny departs just after
Someone sits in a black Car. We don't see their face.
Person in Car: Boss he's just left the cafe
Boss: Ok then, lets roll.
TO BE CONTINUED...... FOR THE FINAL TIME
oh my god this is brill please let Jakey be all right awwww I'm loving this
Lat jake be ok!
More soon
Layne
x x x
Angeldelight
09-07-2005, 17:37
please tell me the NASTY people in the car are after Johnny and NOT Jake... EVIL johnny... EVIL Johnny... he didn't have to do that to Chrissie... Johnny is EVIL... EVIL i tell you...
Final Part II - I have decided to add one more part after this
Jake heads into the Vic upstairs.
Jake: Chrissie I'm back
Johnny: Wait Jake
Jake: Quit following me.
Johnny: Lets go somewhere and talk
Jake: We've already done that.
Suddenly there is a cry from the lounge. Jake runs in.
Edie: Hello Jake
Jake: What are you doing here?
Edie: Paying your girlfriend a little visit
Jake: Get off her. (He steps forward)
Edie: Don't move or she gets it. (She holds a gun to Chrissie' head)
Suddenly Johnny walks in
Edie: Oh Johnny too, I've been wanting to see you. Fred lock the door. Well know we are all here maybe we can sort out our problems.
Jake: Problems?
Edie: The fact you're alive, Johnny's told you everything and you can tell your girlfriend everything.
Jake: What about the fact you're here isn't that a problem?
Edie: No. All I want s for someone to pay. Because in a minute someone in this room is going to die!
Johnny: What have all of us done wrong?
Edie: Jake isn't dead and knows everything we did. Johnny, you could easily go to the cops, best way to shut you up for good. Chrissie here she could know something plus she nicked my fella.
Jake: I never was your fella. Plus what about you two, you could die. I mean Johnny has a gun under his coat. (johnny pulls out his gun0
Johnny: Edie, you killed Danny and tried to kill Jake. You don't deserve to live and Fred well he went along with it.
Edie: Well lets see who dies
(both guns are raised)
(Camera scans room) (Chrissie screams it is heard in the market below. Everyone looks up. A gunshot rings out across the square)
TO BE CONTINUED WHEN I RETURN NEXT WEEK...............
nooo you cant leave it there!!! :eek: :eek:
is jake dead??? whose dead!!! :searchme:
more soon please!!!
Angeldelight
10-07-2005, 16:17
noooooooooooooooooooooooooo.... you can't leave it like that... nooooooo... i have to know who's dead... please don't let it be Jake or Chrissie... :praying: please don't let it be them... please don't kill them... more more more... you have to post more... you have to post it soon... NOW... more more more... we need more now...
Final Part II - I have decided to add one more part after this
That is good news
TO BE CONTINUED WHEN I RETURN NEXT WEEK...............
That is bad news, you meanie :p please post more now, need to know what has happened let jake and chrissie be ok, please
Layne
x x x
di marco
11-07-2005, 08:36
fab! :D its getting really interesting! hope edi and fred die, and maybe johnny! let chrissie and jake be alright! cant believe i have to wait a whole week to find out what happens! :) more very soon please, cant wait
EastendersRox
11-07-2005, 16:04
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!
Who died????????????
no no no this is the best script everrrrrrr(no offence any1) ahhhhhhhhhhhh must know soon
Who died? I need to know! Please say it's Fred/Edie/Johnny or all 3 of them. I want Jake and Chrissie to live :crying:
Here is the final part of Gunshot
The residents lines the square as the hearse drove slowly down the square. Patrick removed his hat and bowed his head.
Patrick: She was such a lovley women.
Yolande: I know she was so lovely
They stop talking as the black cars follow. The windows are blacked out, but it is clear who is inside. All the residents know who s crying inside.
Rosie: He must be broken hearted. They were so close.
Keith: I couldn't bear to lose you Rosie.
Rosie: I know
At the grave
The watts clan are gathered round as the the vicar finishes what he was saying
Vicar: God has taken a wonderful women into his arms and she will be sorely mised
Vicky: I cant believe she's gone.
Dennis: I know.
Slowly the crowds back away and we see the grave. You can't see the name though
The Vic
Vicky: Its time to make a toast. To remeber the spectacular women who we are here to remeber. To
Sharon
Everybody: To Sharon
Chrissie: I just want to say how sorry I am. I couldn't believe it when Sharon waled in and the gun went off. Dennsi I know how much you heart must be breaking and I don't know what to say
Dennis: I know Chrissie. It wasn't your fault. I know they will may. They deserve to be sentenced to life, that would be justice for killing my darling.
Chrissie: This saga started and ended with a gunshot
THE END!!!!!!!!
I hope you liked this. Sorry for who died but chance chose. I asked on the shoutbox. I asked my mum and she said Jake!
xxx
awwwww pooor Sharon but look on the bright side Dennis is single
This has been brillaint babes from start to finish loved it keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more of your scripts
Awwwwww sharon!!!!!!
Wow babes that was a fabbi script!! I enjoyed every part!!!
Luv ya
layne
x x x
Jessie Wallace
26-07-2005, 23:30
Wow that was great
Angeldelight
27-07-2005, 18:21
wow... wow... that was brill... i can't believe she died... how said... i'm sitting here welling up... POOR Sharon... it was a brilliant story from start to finish... it's fantastic...
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