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bakedbean
06-07-2005, 19:58
Ok i know i said that well i wouldnt be back until August but i have wrote some episodes and there is going to be about 14 episodes all together. Then i wont return until late november when it will be season three. So enjoy and please give me some feedback.


Episode 1

Scene One
(Images of the last series, mainly focusing on the murder of Roy Crabtree, it then shows Malcolm striking Phil in the back of the head and then setting fire to the post office just as Shawn and Mike run in to save everyone, but then BANG!!! The post office explodes. The images then change to Shawn and Amy bedroom a baby begins to cry as Shawn suddenly awakes, he gets out of bed and walks over to the cot and grabs the baby and looks out of the window.)

Shawn: Come on Princess its time to sleep.

Scene Two.
Upstairs of the Bowlers.
(A baby begins to cry as a light switches on, Stacey gets out of bed and walks over to the crib and picks up the baby and cuddles it.)

Scene Three
Market.
(Its now morning and people are busy walking around and through the market, we see Lucy walking through with some shopping as she accidentally walks into Phillipa Perry.)

Lucy: Oh im so sorry.
Phillipa: So you should be.
Lucy: Excuse me, I have said sorry it was an accident.
Phillipa: Whatever, (points to the shopping bag) you shop at that tatty place.
Lucy: It’s a good shop thank you very much nothing wrong with it, anyway who the hell are you telling me where to shop.
Phillipa: Me, you mean you don’t know who I am, im Mrs Phillipa Perry and you are?
Lucy: Lucy Scotsman, look we can forget that little incident and shake on it yeah.
Phillipa: I don’t think so, I don’t know where you have been I mean look at you your common.
Lucy: (laughs) Well If you don’t like common then you have come to the wrong place.
Phillipa: Really, we shall see.
(Phillipa walks off leaving Lucy, from behind comes Viv.)
Viv: I see you have met miss bossy boots.
Lucy: Yeah, you know what she just said.
Viv: No
Lucy: She said that she doesn’t like us common people.
Viv: Oh really, well I will show her.
Lucy: How do you mean?
Viv: You will see.

Scene Four
Inside Riley’s [James office]
(James is busy on his laptop writing something up, when his wife Phillipa walks in.)

James: Oh hi ya love.
Phillipa: Where were you this morning?
James: Erm I had a bit of business to deal with.
Phillipa: What sort of business.
James: Business that’s all.
(Viv walks into the office with a bag of shopping)
Viv: I have brought those lemons for you, where do you want them.
James: Anywhere, er later is it ok if you cut them up.
Viv: Yeah of course.
Phillipa: Do you mind knocking next time before you come barging in.
Viv: Oh im so tribally sorry, I will make a note of it, you see us commoners don’t know how to us are manners. [She walks out smiling]
Phillipa: And where the hell did you get that thing from?
James: She is an old friend of mine.
Phillipa: Well I don’t like her, get rid of her.
James: What, no she has not done anything wrong.
Phillipa: Well if you wont then I will. (Philipa walks out into the bar and walks over to Viv. Who is then followed by James)
Phillipa: Vivian
Viv: Yes
Phillipa: Your fired.
Viv: What, you cant do this.
Phillipa: Oh yes I can, and I have so get yourself out of my club.
Viv: Oh its your club is it, I have more power over this place then you.
Phillipa: Well not anymore because your fired now get out.
Viv: No, you cant fire me, but James can, so James fire me go on say the words.
James: What
Viv: Come on.
[James just stares at her and turns to a furious looking Phillipa.]
Viv: I thought so [Viv then walks off]

Scene Five
Outside the bookies.
(Alan is looking around when Mike walks up to him)

Mike: I see the place has been sold.
Alan: yeah I am just hoping it stays as a Bookie.
(Alan walks off and then James comes up and looks at the bookies and then turns to mike.)

Mike: Well, well, look who has final come to see me.
James: Now Mike we don’t need to get into an argument.
Mike: Oh please, you left me high and dry with nothing; I have nothing to say to you.

Scene Six
The Kitchen of Phil and Sharon’s.
(Sharon is making a sandwich, when Phil walks in.)

Phil: Oh can I have one love.
Sharon: Course, ham pickle.
Phil: You know me better than anyone.
(Phil goes up to give her a kiss.)
Sharon: Well I am your wife.

Scene Seven
Stacey’s Bedroom.
(The baby is asleep in the cot while Stacey is on her mobile.)

Stacey: I have something to tell you, meet me in the park in ten minutes.

Scene Eight.
The Bar of the pub.
(Lucy just finishes pouring Viv a glass of white whine.)

Lucy: Here you go.
Viv: (Rustels through her purse, picks up a five pound note but drops it.) Oh piggin hell
Lucy: You ok Viv.
Viv: Oh I am fine, no I’m not Phillipa Perry has just fired me.
Lucy: What.
Viv: Oh yeah.
Lucy: Well why
Viv: I don’t have a clue.
Lucy: But she cant.
Viv: Oh she can, you want to know why
Lucy: go on
Viv: Because she is a conniving witch.

Scene nine.
In the park.
(Stacey is in the park with her baby, she is sitting on a bench.)

Stacey: Where is he?

Scene Ten
Upstairs of the pub.
( Mike just comes off his mobile as Lucy walks in.)

Mike: Erm , love I am just popping out.
Lucy: Ok don’t be late.

Scene eleven.
Daniel is seen walking to the park.

Scene twelve
The park
( Stacey is still sitting on the bench, when Mike walks up to her.)

Mike: Well what did you want?
Stacey: Well… Erm.
Mike: Come on hurry up and shut that damn baby up.
Stacey: Its about my baby.
Mike: And.
Stacey: I mean are Baby, he’s yours.

big bro fan
09-07-2005, 20:25
it is good i like the ending hope to see more soon :rotfl: :cartman: :
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bakedbean
09-07-2005, 20:41
Next Epiosde up on Monday!!

Bryan
09-07-2005, 21:42
what is this all about, im intriged but havent foggest what it is about?

bakedbean
10-07-2005, 10:37
Sason 1 is on one of the other pages, here. But anyways Exeter is basically my soap about a big estate called exeter and follows the daily life of the scotsmans who own the local pub the oak. The show also follows the lives of 20 other charecters.

If you need more info email me at [email protected]

Bryan
10-07-2005, 10:58
ohhhh interesting...i am also making a soap of my own... which once ive finsihed my writing course at uni i will send off to the bbc

good luck with yours and i hope you enjoy writing it as much as i love all my writing

bakedbean
10-07-2005, 13:17
Thanks, i am very much hopeing one day that i to will be come a script writer, i love writing. Next episode up either later on today or tommorow!!

Bryan
10-07-2005, 13:42
get as much expericne as you can, my two performed plays are already a kick start for me

bakedbean
10-07-2005, 13:49
yeah cool well the problm is i am only 14, and the only person that believes in me is my english teacher, she has helped me a hell of a lot over the last two years.

bakedbean
10-07-2005, 13:53
I am now officially announcing that a few characters will be leaving Exeter over the next two series.

Phil: He will leave at the end of this season/ beggining of season 3, however he will not die becuse i feel i can do more with him just not right now.

Mike: Yep i am getting rid of the man the myth and the ledgend, i feel it is time for him to leave, however i dont know if i am going to kill him off. It will not be till next season, however he will become a nasty man in the next few weeks.

Now i believe that i should give you the readers the chance to have your say, so i am going to start a pole and write me a message on what you think thanks.

bakedbean
10-07-2005, 14:55
Scene One
The Park
(Stacey is still sitting on the bench, and talking to Mike as he looks at his new born child who is in the pram.)

Mike: It cant be, can it.
Stacey: you are the only one that I, well you know.
Mike: What is it a boy or girl
Stacey: A boy
Mike: Name
Stacey: I haven’t chosen one, I thought you might like to pick one.
Mike: Me
Stacey: Well you are the farther.
(There is silence in the park for a few moments, when Stacey speaks again.)
Stacey: Well??
Mike: Ok, I have chosen one
Stacey: And
Mike: Bobby
Stacey: Baby Bobby.
Mike: You do know I want to see him everyday.
Stacey: Yeah I know, you just ring me on my mobile and I will bring Bobby.
(Stacey gives Mike a kiss on the cheek and then walks off)
Mike: Oh Stacey
(She stops)
Stacey: Yeah
Mike: No One is to ever know, you understand me.
Stacey: course.

Scene Two
Outside The Post office.
(The Post Office is bordered up, with burn stains all around it, Silvia is walking with Bob they are talking.)

Silvia: This place gives me the creeps.
Bob: well he’s dead now, so you don’t need to worry about him, do you.
Silvia: I suppose, but what about poor Jill I mean she may of survived but, if it was not for her Aunt she would have no where to live.
Bob: Well they have both gone now and so should I, I have a business meeting over some contracts, so I will see you later.
Silvia: Ok see you later love.

Scene Three
Outside Riley’s
(It has now turned to night and the estate is bussing with nightlife, people are cuing up outside of Riley’s waiting to enter.)

Scene Four
Front Room of Phil and Sharon’s.
(Sharon is looking in the mirror while she is putting on her lipstick, Phil comes in putting on a shirt)

Phil: You ready love
Sharon: yep ready as I will ever be, now lets party.
Phil: Have you taken something?
Sharon: No im just happy that’s all.
Phil: Whys that then
Sharon: Well its are first night out since well you know.
Phil: Look im sorry about that, but you could have always gone out yourself.
Sharon: Yeah I know, its just that well I nearly lost you and I want to spend every minute of every day with you.
Phil: (Chuckles) Come on we best get going.

Scene Five
Kristy’s Bedroom.[upstairs of the pub]
( Amy is putting Baby Kristy to bed when Shawn walks in.)

Shawn: Phil and Sharon are downstairs love come on we better get going.
Amy: Shhh I have just got her off, I will be down in a minute

Scene Six
Riley’s [James Office]
(Silvia is on her phone while James is counting his Money.)

Silvia: Yeah, ok all right so I guess I shall see you next week then, ok see you then bye.
(She puts her phone down)
James: Who was that.
Silvia: Paul
James: Who
Silvia: My brother Paul.
James: Oh him, what about him.
Silvia: He is coming to stay for a couple of weeks.
James: What, please tell me you are joking, you know that me and him don’t get on.
Silvia: It is only for a few weeks I promise.
James: Well it better be, I cant stand that arrogant good for nothing lousy.
Silvia: Erm that is my Brother you are talking about.

Scene Seven
The Oak [at the bar]
(Mike is serving pints to Hugh and Alan while Lucy is talking to Amy)

Amy: If any thing happens just ring me.
Lucy: Look calm down everything is going to be all right, Kristy will be fine now go and have some fun.

Scene Eight
The club Dance Floor
(People are dancing on the dance floor, notice a strange man with jet black hair and in a black leather Jacket is sitting at the bar when Sharon, Phil, Shawn and Amy arrive)

Sharon: I will go get drinks you three go find a table.
(Sharon walks to the bar and stands next to the man, the bar maid is busy asking other people what they want to drink. Sharon is trying to get her attention.)

Man: I would not bother love, I had to wait ten minutes before I was served, you might as well sit her and wait.
Sharon: Oh ok then, and you are.
Man: Oh my name is Ray, Ray Butcher and you are.
Sharon: Oh im Sharon Richmond
Ray: Nice to meet you Sharon, do you live round her.
Sharon: Yeah in Crawley Street do you live around here.
Ray: Oh yeah in Eginton lane.
Sharon: Oh yeah I used to live there when I was young.
Ray: Really, which Number
Sharon: 3
Ray: No way, that’s where I live.
Sharon: Get away
Ray: Can I ask you something Sharon.
Sharon: Go ahead.
Ray: Are you married
Sharon: Yes I am, to the man over there his name is Phil, been married to him for six years.
Ray: Any Kids
Sharon: No, are you married
Ray: No.

The camera then shifts over to the table where Shawn and Phil are sitting.

Shawn: Whos that, that Sharon is talking to.
Phil: I don’t know.

Scene 9
Outside Roy Crabtree’s Old house.
(A taxi pulls up as a woman, and three children step out and is then followed by the driver.)

They walk into the house as the woman switches on the light.

Woman: Home Sweet Home.

di marco
11-07-2005, 09:25
great! :D yay the second season is here! :) more soon please, cant wait
(ps. cant believe youre only 14, its brill)

bakedbean
11-07-2005, 18:03
Thanks, im still working on some of the episodes so next episode will be up sunday/monday!

Jojo
13-07-2005, 11:57
Hi bakedbean, are you from this area then??

bakedbean
14-07-2005, 18:44
I am from stafford, Exeter is a street in Stafford which is where i live.

Bryan
14-07-2005, 19:09
I am from stafford, Exeter is a street in Stafford which is where i live.

ah brilliant so it is set where you live! ace! are the characters real people lol? :lol:

keep up the great work this is fab, as i say ive got my own soap in the pipeloine but can never come to exactly writing a full episode, so hats off to you baked bean

bakedbean
14-07-2005, 19:53
the only real people in my show are my nan and granddad, Alan and Trudy.

I struggled at first writnig episosdes but i finnally got the nack of it.

Jojo
15-07-2005, 12:52
I am from stafford, Exeter is a street in Stafford which is where i live.Ah I see, its where I'm from (though not anymore) so just wondering!

bakedbean
15-07-2005, 18:40
what you are from stafford, cool. What School did you used to go to???

bakedbean
15-07-2005, 19:03
Scene 1
Sharon and Phil s Bedroom.
(Sharon just wakes up to see phil is getting dressed.)

Sharon: Phil your up early its only half past six.
Phil: I know I have gotta go up town, you know beat the traffic. Sharon
Sharon: Yes babe.
Phil: Who was that man last night.
Sharon: oh just some man who lives in my old house.
Phil: Oh
Sharon: Why
Phil: Just Wondered that’s all.

Scene 2
Down the cellar.
(Mike is on his mobile, he is talking quietly.)

Mike: I want to see Bobby, today in an hour at the park.

Scene 3
Outside The Bookies
(A rolls Royce pulls up outside the Bookies, a man steps out of the drivers seat and walks to the back of the car and opens the door and out steps a man with dark blonde hair, he walks up to the bookies and opens the door and then shuts it.)

Scene 4
The Park
(Stacey Arrives with Bobby in the pram, she swings on the swing as Mike arrives)

Stacey: Mike.
Mike: Can I hold him.
Stacey: Of course he is your son.
(Mike picks him up from the pram and holds him)
Mike: He is beautiful
Stacey: he’s got your eyes.
Mike: (Mike puts Bobby back in his pram and picks his wallet out of his pocket and passess Stacey some money)
Stacey: Whats this
Mike: It is Two hundred pounds.
Stacey: I cant take this, its yours.
Mike: Its Bobbys now take it.

Scene 5
Inside the pub at the bar.
(It is now lunch time and Trudy and Alan are drinking at a table, while Shawn and Lucy are serving at the bar.)

Shawn: So that’s a bottle of larger right. ( Customer nods) ok that will be two pound fifty.
(Amy comes from up stairs and walks up to Shawn and gives him a kiss)
Shawn: What was that for?
Amy: For being you.
(The Bar door opens as two men in black suits enter followed by a man in a leather jacket, who was the same man who walked into the bookies earlier.)
Amy: Who the heck is that.
Shawn: I don’t have a clue.
(Shawn goes up to the man and serves him.)
Shawn: Yes mate what would you like.
Man: A small whisky please.
Shawn: I have not seen you around here before.
Man: That’s because I don’t live here.
Shawn: So what brings you down here then?
Man: Im just visiting my sister, you might know here Phillipa Perry.
Shawn: Oh, so what’s your name then?
Man: The name is Paul, Paul Ramasy.
Shawn: Paul Ramsay… yeah I have heard of the name before.
(Paul goes to sit down at a table with the two men.)
Amy: So who is he.
Shawn: Umm oh his name is Paul Ramsay.
Amy: Yeah I know that but you know more than that.
Shawn: Hes a top business man and a very powerful man.
Amy: More powerful than you?
Shawn: Possibly, I don’t actually know, but I know something though, he knows Phil.

Scene 6.
In James office.
(Phillipa is on her phone again and James is once again on his laptop.)

Phillipa: Ok I will see you there in a minute bye. (puts the phone down) Paul is here.
James: Great.
Phillipa: We are going to meet him in the Oak in about ten minutes.
James: Ok then I will see you later.
Phillipa: No you are coming with me.
James: Look the only time I ever socialize with the man is at weddings, funerals and meetings, I don’t want to meet him in the pub.
Phillipa: Oh you are coming and that’s the end of it, now get your coat.

Scene 7
Roy Crabtree’s old house.
(The new family are in the garden taking there stuff in to the house, the two kids are chasing each other.)

Rose: You two stop it now, come pick up some of these boxes.
Garry: Ok love, I will just go pick up the rest of the stuff from the flat.
Rose: Ok see you later.
(Garry gets into his Taxi and drives off, Silvia walks up to the gate.)
Silvia: Hi my names Silvia, I am your next-door neighbour.
Rose: Nice to meet you Gloria.
Silvia: No dear my names Silvia.
Rose: Sorry I am just so busy, my name is Rose.
Silvia: Would you like some help.
Rose: Oh please.

Scene 8
In the oak.
(Shawn and Amy are still serving, when James and Phillipa walk in.)

Phillipa: Paul, it is so good to see you.
Paul: Hello Phillipa, James.
James: Oh hello, can I get you a drink.
Paul: Yeah I would like a small whisky please.
(James walks up to the bar where Shawn serves him.)
Shawn: Ok what can I get you James?
James: erm a red wine, and two small whiskeys.
Shawn: I hear that he is your Brother in law.
James: Unfortunately that is true.
Shawn: How much do you know about him.
James: Oh just the usual, you know he is a Business Man.
Shawn: Phil knows him.
James: Really.
Shawn: I don’t know how though, its just that he has mentioned him be…. (Paul stands on a table and claps his hands to get peoples attention.) What the heck.
Paul: Ladies and Gentlemen I would like to announce that the Bookies will reopen next week thank you.
Shawn: Blooming idiot.
James: You think that is bad, you aint seen nothing yet.

Bryan
15-07-2005, 20:35
is Stafford in the west midlands?

bakedbean
16-07-2005, 09:04
yes it is, it is a small town.

di marco
16-07-2005, 15:24
brill! :D wanna know more about paul! :) more soon please, cant wait

bakedbean
17-07-2005, 11:22
Oh believe me over the next month you are going to see a lot more of paul.

di marco
17-07-2005, 12:19
Oh believe me over the next month you are going to see a lot more of paul.

good good! :)

Bryan
18-07-2005, 11:44
yes it is, it is a small town.

if you live in the west midlands then i suggest you apply for transmissions 2006, it is a writing workshop course,m where you go to the birmingham rep every other saturday and have writing workshops with proper playrights, and then at the end of the course they perform a play that youve written

its great on your cv for writing expericne!!! if your interested say so and ill let you know wmore about it

bakedbean
18-07-2005, 18:04
well i am 14 so i dont know!! I would like it a hell of a lot.

Bryan
19-07-2005, 09:57
well i am 14 so i dont know!! I would like it a hell of a lot.

that is in the age range, as long as your submission is okay, which judging by exceter will be very likely, then you will get in!

basically you have to submit an idea for your play (250 words max), and then a scene from your play to show your writing talent, (3 pages maximum)

Send it, along with you name, adress, phone number and email adress to:

Caroline Jester, on the email adress included on this website: Transmissions Website (http://www.transmissions.org.uk/)

let me know if you enter it, and let me know how you get on :)

bakedbean
20-07-2005, 18:48
Scene 1
Upstairs at the pub.
(Mike and Lucy are having an argument.)

Lucy: What is it with you, you have been acting very oddly lately, have you been having another affair.
Mike: Oh leave it out, don’t you think I learned my lesson last time.
Lucy: Oh you mean when I caught you red handed with that slapper of a bar maid.
Mike: Well you are not much different yourself.
Lucy: Excuse me?
Mike: Well look at you in your skirt and push up bra, selling yourself to every man that walks in.
Lucy: I am a bar maid it is my job.
Mike: And so was hers.
Lucy: Oh the last time I checked getting off with your boss, was not part of the job.

Scene 2
Roy Crabtree old house.
(The family are sitting down having breakfast.)

Rose: You two can stay off school for the rest of the week, providing you behave yourself.
Jamie: Are but mum, there is only a week left after that and we wont be doing anything, so cant we have next week off as well.
Garry: Oy don’t push it, if your mum says you go to school you go to school, aright.
Jamie: yes Dad.
Libby: But Dad he does have a point.
Rose: Look if you want you can start back at school today, if not hurry up and finish your breakfast and come and help me sort out some of those boxes.

Scene 3
No. 3 Evington Drive.
(Sharon walks up to the door, and rings the doorbell, Ray answers.)

Ray: Sharon, oh its great to see you, what are you doing here.
Sharon: Well I was just passing and I thought well I am going into town do you fancy coming with me, we can have lunch and a coffee.
Ray: That sounds good to me; I shall just go get my coat.

Scene 4
The Bar of the Oak
(Shawn is cleaning a few glasses, while Lucy is putting place mats on the tables.)

Shawn: You and Dad all right.
Lucy: What, oh yeah its just your farther being his usual selfish self.
Shawn: Do you want me to have a word.
Lucy: No it is ok and anyway you have your own troubles, what with Kristen and Amy.
Shawn: Yeah I suppose, is it me working tonight.
Lucy: Yes, but I am working on someone coming behind the bar full time.
Shawn: Oh yeah who?
Lucy: You will have to wait and see wont you.

Scene 5
The Café
(Trudy and Alan are having there breakfast, while Mike is drinking a tea on the opposite table.)

Trudy: And anyway, I am not going Bingo tonight.
Alan: Whys that then.
Trudy: I just told you but as usual you were not listening.
Alan: Sorry, its just I am looking for the right hoarse.
Trudy: Are you ok Mike; it is just that you have been looking at that empty cup for the last half hour.
Alan: I reckon you’re in the doghouse.
Mike: And why is that then Alan.
Alan: Well, whenever a man is in the doghouse they have somewhere to hide, like me for instance say Trudy has a go at me for something I will pop into the Bookies.
Mike: You must be in the doghouse all the time then.
(Trudy laughs)

Scene 6
Local Supermarket.
( Sharon and Ray are in the Supermarkets café having a coffee, and something to eat.)

Ray: Sharon
Sharon: Yes Ray
Ray: You know when I told you I was not married.
Sharon: Yeah
Ray: Well that is not strictly true, you see well (Sighs)
Sharon: Come on I am not going to bite your head off now am i.
Ray: Yeah, well I was married.
Sharon: So you got divorced right.
Ray: No
Sharon: She left you.
Ray: No
Sharon: You left her.
Ray: No it is nothing like that
Sharon: Well what then.
Ray: She died.
Sharon: What when
Ray: 18 months ago, of cancer.
Sharon: Oh I am so sorry, I should have known.
Ray: No, no it was my fault I should have told you sooner.

Scene 7
The back of the pub.
(The Backdoor knocks as Lucy goes to answer the door, a man with a bunch of flowers and a note shows up.)

Lucy: Oh thank you.
(Lucy shuts the door and looks at the note it reads “Sorry”)

Scene 8
The Bookies
(Mike and Alan are having a bet while Paul is behind the counter.)

Paul: Thank you gentlemen, blimey you have put a lot of money on that one.
Mike: Well I am a lucky guy, and one thing I don’t do is lose a bet, isn’t that right Alan.
Alan: Yeah I wish I had his luck.

Scene 9
Outside Rays House.
(Sharon walks to the door with Ray.)

Ray: So when will I see you again.
Sharon: Tomorrow.
Ray: How about I take you out for a drink.
Sharon: Yeah I would like that thank you, (Sharon gives Ray a kiss on the cheek and walks off., Ray turns to unlock his door and has a evil smile across his face.)

Ok next episode up next week.
:cheer: :cheer: :cheer:

bakedbean
27-07-2005, 13:10
Episode 5

Scene 1
James and Phillipas front room.
(Paul is sitting at the table drinking a cup of coffee while reading the paper. Phillipa is eating her breakfast while James is sorting out his briefcase.)

James: Erm have you two seen my green file.
Phillipa: No why.
Paul: I have not seen it.
James: It is a very important document, and I need it.
Phillipa: How do you mean by important.
James: It has information on every living person in Exeter.
Paul: Well why do you have it.
James: That is a surprise, anyway I best get going are you coming Phillipa
Phillipa: Ok, see you later Paul.
(Phillipa and James leave, Paul walks up to the window and watches them go, once the cost is clear he looks under the seatte and finds the green file, he grins and begins to read the file.)

Scene 2
Outside Vivian’s house.
(Lucy walks to the door and rings the door bell as Viv answers the door.)

Viv: Oh hi Lucy, how can I help you.
Lucy: Well its more like how I can help you.
Viv: I don’t understand.
Lucy: Well we have been very busy recently and well I need some extra pair of hands and I was wondering.
Viv: I can start tonight.
Lucy: Oh really thank you, so se you in the pub about half six.

Scene 3
The Bowlers Kitchen
(Hugh is eating some toast, while Ashley is eating a bowl of cereal and Stacey is feeding Bobby.)

Hugh: Did not hear him cry last night, that was a first.
Stacey: Yeah I know I actually got a goods night sleep.
Hugh: So what are you up to today kids?
Ashley: I am going to the park
Stacey: I have got a doctors appointment for Bobby.
Hugh: Do you want me to come with you?
Stacey: No I am ok thanks.
Hugh: Well if you are sure.

Scene 4
Outside Rays house.
(Sharon rings Rays door bell as Ray answers the front door.)

Ray: Come in come in.
Sharon: Oh thanks.

Scene 5
The Café
(Shawn is having a cooked Breakfast with Phil.)

Shawn: So were is Sharon today
Phil: I don’t have a clue, its funny she keeps going out every morning and doesn’t come back till late.
Shawn: Are you worried?
Phil: Yeah a bit, but she could just be doing shopping.
Shawn: Well does she come back with any bags.
Phil: Come to think of it no.
Shawn: I would have words with her if I were you.


Scene 6
The Pub
(Mike is serving Alan a pint of beer.)

Alan: Cheers, so did you get everything sorted yesterday.
Mike: Oh yeah, sorted it all out.
Alan: Oh and how did you do that one?
James: Sent her a bunch of Roses.

Scene 7
Inside Rays house.
(Ray is in the kitchen making tea, while Sharon is looking at Ray’s photos, she sees a woman that looks exactly like Sharon.)
Ray: She is beautiful isn’t she.
Sharon: Er… what oh yes she is.
Ray: She was my wife, I miss her every day of my life.
Sharon: Erm.. Ray she well she looks like me.
Ray: That is because you are her.
Sharon: What!! No Ray im Sharon.
Ray: No you are Judy.
Sharon: No, Ray I think it is time I left.
(Sharon walks out of the room and walks to the front door. Sharon tries to get out of the front door but it is locked.)
Sharon: Let me out, Ray let me out.
(Sharon walks to the living room and looks for Ray, but from behind she is stabbed in the neck with a needle, Sharon staggers and falls to the floor.)

bakedbean
27-07-2005, 22:43
Hey just a quick nte to say that i will be writing Mike out in the season finale in about a month, season 3 will be up about new year, with a xmas special!!

bakedbean
29-07-2005, 19:41
Hey there i am just giving out a few spoliers it will not reveal all of the plot lines so if you dont want to read dont scroll down!!!






Spoilers

Paul Ramsay has just joined the street, but why is he here and why will this all affect Trudy and Alan.
Will Shawn Scotsman get himself killed???
Who is Going to prison.
Plus who will plan for a divorce and then get themself killed.
Could a Love Triangle Begin???

bakedbean
31-07-2005, 19:24
Scene one
(Everywhere is dark, suddenly a light appears and everywhere is blurry, Sharon is then shown lying on a bed just coming to.
Sharon rubs her eyes and walks to the door, trys t get out, but the door is locked, She then puts her hand in her jacket and finds her phone and types in a number.)

Sharon: Come on pick up.
Phone: Hi this is Phil I cant reach you right now please leave a message after the tone thanks.
Sharon: Phil, Phil where are you, please its Ray the man I met in the Club he is keeping me locked in this bedroom, he lives at my old hou….
(A hand appears and takes the phone off of Sharon and throws it to the ground, it is Ray who has a needle)
Sharon: No not again please no, Ray no i…(Ray sticks the needle in Sharon arm and pulls it out she falls on to the bed.)

Scene 2
The Garage
(Rick is by the desk and realises Phils phone has just rang, he picks it up and takes it down to Phil where is working on a car.)

Rick: Phil, Phil
Phil: Yeah
Rick: Your phone has just rang.
Phil: Oh cheers.
(Phil listens to the message of Sharon n the phone, and puts the phone down; he walks out of the garage.)
Rick: Where are you going?
Phil: Out.

Scene 3
Inside the pub
(Viv is behind the bar with Mike and Shawn; Phil walks in and goes up to Shawn)

Phil: Shawn
Shawn: Yes mate
Phil: Listen to this
(Phil hands Shawn the phone and he listens to the message.)
Shawn: What are you going to do?
Phil: It is what am I not going to do.
Shawn: No Phil, wait you are not going on your own, I am coming with you.
(Shawn is just about to walk out when Mike stops him.)
Mike: Shawn, where are you going.
Shawn: I will explain later Dad.

Scene 4
Outside the Pub.
(Phil car is outside of the pub, Shawn and Phil get in. They speed off. )

Scene 5
Inside Phils Car
(Phil is driving while Shawn is in the passenger seat, Shawn see a gun on the back seat.)

Shawn: What the hell is that for.
Phil: Protection
Shawn: You have got to be kidding me.
Phil: Oh I am deadly serious.

Scene 6
Inside Rays Garage.
(Sharon is tied up to the passengers seat with duck tape covering her mouth. Ray is putting a few things in the boot.)

Ray: We are going on a little picnic and it will be the last meal we both eat.

Scene 7
Outside Rays house.
(Phil and Shawn pull up and both get out of the car; Phil opens the back door and grabs his gun. They walk to the front door and Phil begins banging on it.)

Phil: Come on Ray open up, I know you have got my wife now damn it open up.

Scene 8
Inside Rays Garage.
(Ray hears Phil banging on the door, Ray steps in the car and turns on the engine.)

Scene 9
Outside Rays House
(Shawn hears the car and taps Phil and points to the Garage. They run to the Garage doors and attempt to open the door.)

Phil: It is stuck.
Shawn: Phil look out.
(We hear the car Engine rev up and the doors come flying open as Rays car goes speeding out and up the street.)
Phil: Come on.
(Phil and Shawn run to the car and follow Ray.)

big bro fan
03-08-2005, 22:47
this last episode is really good congratulations on an excellent soap baked bean good luck as allways

bakedbean
04-08-2005, 11:15
Hey there Exeter fans, dont worry next episode up in next few days, but i am now giving you the chance to decide on whether or not Shawn Scotsman should wake from his comma??? Please give me a reply saying yes i want him to wake or no let him die and why please please i would be very greatful.
Plus Reps will be availible for evreyone who replys!!

bakedbean
04-08-2005, 11:25
Scene One
A cabin in the woods.
(Sharon is tied to a chair with duck tape around her mouth, Ray is pacing around the rom.)

Scene Two
(Phil is speeding down the country road with Shawn in the passenger seat.)

Shawn: Slow down your gonna kill us.
Phil: No I am not
Shawn: What are you going to do when you find them.
Phil: I am gonna kill him.

Scene Three.
Outside the cabin.
(Ray is attempting to put Sharon in the boot of his car)

Ray: Get in just get in.
(Sharon struggles.)
Ray: I am going to hurt you in a minute.
(Sharon tries to scream)
Ray: Fine have it your way. (Ray pushes Sharon who hits her head on the side of the car, she falls but Ray catches her and puts her in the boot.)
Ray: I told you (Ray shuts the boot and walks back into the cabin.

Scene Four
The Back of the Cabin.
(Phil and Shawn pull up, Phil gets out of the car and grabs his gun as Shawn gets out.)

Shawn: Just think about this Phil.
Phil: I already have.
Shawn: But Phil..
Phil: You take the back and I will take the front.
(Phil walks to the front of the hut while Shawn takes the back.)

Scene Five
Cabin Front Room
(Ray is in the room, and hears the front door burst open he runs up the stairs just as Phil walks in.)

Phil: Come on Ray, where are you where’s my wife, come on out.
(Phil hears a crash in the back room; he gets his gun into position as the door flings open out walks Shawn BANG. Shawn falls back down to the floor Blood pouring out of his stomach.)
Phil: Shawn, damn it no, Shawn speak to me.
Shawn: (Says faintly) look out.
(Rays comes behind as Phil turns, Ray has a knife in his hand.)
Ray: Well, well if it is not the Husband of Sharon.
Phil: Where is my wife.
Ray: Oh she is safe for now.
Phil: Where is she
Ray: If you stop pointing that gun at me I might just tell you.
Phil: I aint doing nothing for you.
(Ray launch’s at Phil with the knife in his hand, Phil moves and Ray drops the Knife.)
Phil: Now I will ask you again, where is my wife?
(Ray steps up with the Gun pointing at him.)
Ray: I told you she is safe for now.
Phil: Tell me.
(Ray attempts to take the gun off Phil, BANG. Ray takes a step back with blood all over him, he laughs as he slumps to the floor dead.)
(Then Police and a Swat team come through the front and back door.)
D.I. Ferner: Put the gun down Phil, put it down.
(Phil drops the gun and one of the policemen takes the gun.)
Phil: Where is my Wife.
D.I. Ferner: Check them both, your wife is fine, well officer.
Officer: This one is dead sir, the other one needs an ambulance fast.
D.I. Ferner: Phil Langston I am arresting you on the Murder of Ray Butcher, you do not have to say anything however if you do say anything will be used in court as evidence.

Scene Six
Outside the ranch.
(Sharon is being questioned by the police as two ambulances pull up, Phil comes out and is followed by two police men who take him to the police car.)

Sharon: Phil, what is going on?
Phil: Im being arrested on the murder of Ray Butcher and it is your entire bloody fault.
(Shawn is being wheeled out on a stretcher.)
Sharon: Shawn, what happened to him?
Phil: He was shot
Sharon: By you
Phil: (Just looks at her)

Episode 7

Scene One
Outside The Bookies
(Paul walks up to the door and picks up the local paper, showing Phil on the front page it says in big letters MAN MURDERS TO SAVE WIFE! Alan walks up to Paul)

Alan: It’s awful isn’t it.
Paul: Yes it is.
Alan: So you are opening up then.
Paul: Not for another few hours.

Scene Two
Inside The Hospital
(Shawn is unconscious on the Hospital bed with Amy and Lucy at his bedside.)

Amy: Why did he have to go with Phil.
Lucy: I don’t know I really don’t know.
Episode 7

Scene One
Outside The Bookies
(Paul walks up to the door and picks up the local paper, showing Phil on the front page it says in big letters MAN MURDERS TO SAVE WIFE! Alan walks up to Paul)

Alan: It’s awful isn’t it.
Paul: Yes it is.
Alan: So you are opening up then.
Paul: Not for another few hours.

Scene Two
Inside The Hospital
(Shawn is unconscious on the Hospital bed with Amy and Lucy at his bedside.)

Amy: Why did he have to go with Phil.
Lucy: I don’t know I really don’t know.

Scene 3
Inside the Bookies Office.
(Paul is sitting down at his desk he opens up his brief case to reveal James missing Green file, Paul smirks as he flicks through a few pages, he stops and picks up his phone and types in a few numbers)

Paul: Yes hello, I was wondering if you know the number for the Landlord of a Mr and Mrs Lisbon, thank you.
(Paul writes down a number and puts the phone down. He picks it up again and types in some other numbers.)
Paul: Put me through to The Land Lord of Mr and Mrs Lisbon.

Scene 4
The Café
(Trudy and Vivian are having there breakfast at the café, Viv is reading the paper.)

Viv: Isn’t it awful Trudy.
Trudy: What? Oh yeah it is.
Viv: Are you ok, I mean you seem a bit off today.
Trudy: No it is well its Daniel
Viv: What has he done now.
Trudy: He has been expelled from school.
Viv: What oh no how many years did he have left?
Trudy: One.
Viv: What is he going to do?
Trudy: Work with Douggie I suppose, and then he will go to college.
Viv: Well you could try for another school
Trudy: It is not worth it, two schools have turned him down and the next one is to far away.

Scene 5
Inside Riley’s.
(James is cleaning up the bar, while Phillipa is checking the wine.)

Phillipa: Red or White.
James: Red
Phillipa: I hope you have nothing on tonight.
James: Well actually…
Phillipa: Cancel; we are invited to a dinner party.
James: With who
Phillipa: Bob and Silvia.
James: Why
Phillipa: Bob has got an idea or something that could make us a bit of money.
James: We make enough with this place let alone anything else.
Phillipa: Well from what I have been hearing it is something big.
James: Your Brother going to be there.
Phillipa: Of course.

Scene Six.
Inside the Police Station.
(Detective Ferner is questioning Phil)

Ferner: I shall ask you again Mr Langston, did you shoot Shawn Scotsman.
Phil: No Comment.
Ferner: Look you are going down for the murder of Ray Butcher now just tell me did you or did you not Shoot Shawn Scotsman.
Phil: No Comment.
Ferner: Fine I will ask him myself once he has woken.

Scene Seven.
Living Room of Sylvia and Bob.
(Sylvia is putting out the knives and Forks. Bob is looking through the window.)

Bob: They are here right how do I look.
Sylvia: Gorgeous.
Bob: Come on really how do I look.
Sylvia: Good.
Bob: Good, Good is that it good, Sylvia look are future is riding on this business deal I don’t want to just look Good.
Sylvia: You look fine don’t worry look go and answer the door.
(Bob walks to front door while Sylvia is lighting a few candles, James, Phillipa and Paul walk in followed by Paul.)
Bob: Right Red or White.
Phillipa: Well we have brought some with us.
Bob: Oh fantastic well sit down and I will pop it open.
(Bob walks into the Kitchen leaving James, Phillipa and Paul alone)
Paul: Very nice house.
Phillipa: It is isn’t it.
Paul: So James have you found your file yet.
James: No not yet, I could have sworn that I put it down somewhere just cannot rember where.
Phillipa: It is probably in your car or the club.
(Bob walks in with the wine and Sylvia walks in with a trolley with the dinner on.)
Bob: Here we are.
Phillipa: So what is for starters?
Sylvia: Oh nothing fancie just Prawn Cocktail.
James: Oh my favourite.
(They sit down and begin to eat.)
Phillipa: So Bob what is this propacishen you have for us.
Bob: Ah well you see it is land.
James: Go on.
Bob: Well at the back of your Club there is two empty fields and well I was wondering if you would not mind me buying it.
James: Well what for.
Bob: Yes well you see, this is going to effect everybody but in a good way. You see well I have plans see on well a Hotel and I was going to ask you if you would not mind If I build it on the fields behind you.
James: Well.
Bob: You see this will bring new jobs new opportunities and plenty of money especially with your Night Club.
Paul: Well that sounds very good, do you have any partners in this Hotel.
Bob: No not yet but I have the plans and the costs.
James: Ok.
Bob: Ok what.
James: Build it.
Bob: You mean it.
James: Yes.

Scene Eight
The Park.
(Mike is talking to Stacey, Bobby is not there.)

Mike: Where’s Bobby.
Stacey: He’s got a chesty cough so Dad is looking after him.
Mike: Is it serious
Stacey: No not really, just thought it would be safer leaving him at home.
(We see Daniel coming from the alleyway he can see Mike and Stacey talking and stops and watches.)
Mike: Here take this.
Stacey: That is Five Hundred Pounds what if my Dad finds it.
Mike: Say you got it off Benefits.
Stacey: I suppose that might work.
Mike: look I best be off I will ring you later in the week ok.
Stacey: See you.
(Mike walks off from behind comes Daniel.)
Daniel: Why did you get that Money off Mike?
Stacey: Daniel you gave me a shock, what money?
Daniel: The Money in your Pocket Five Hundred I think you said.
Stacey: I have not got time for this I have got a Baby to look after.
Daniel: That’s it.
Stacey: That’s what?
Daniel: He is the farther of Bobby isn’t he.
Stacey: (Laughs) No he is not.
Daniel: Yes he is don’t lie.
Stacey: So what, what you going to do no one will believe you.
Daniel: Whys that
Stacey: Because you are a thug simple.
Daniel: Yeah well why don’t I go tell someone then maybe Lucy see what she has to say.
Stacey: No Daniel wait, look take this.(Stacey hands Daniel two hundred pounds.)
Daniel: and I will expect the same next week.
Stacey: And if I don’t.
Daniel: Then the entire street will know your secret.

~*~Leanne~*~
07-08-2005, 20:49
this is great

diamond1
08-08-2005, 18:28
yeah its really cool

Eastenders_4ev@
08-08-2005, 19:03
cool

bakedbean
13-08-2005, 12:39
Episode Eight

Scene One
Inside Bobs House.
(Silvia is eating her breakfast while Bob is busy going through some paperwork.)

Silvia: Have you had any breakfast yet
Bob: No not yet, but I will have something in a minute.
Silvia: Just put the paperwork down and have some breakfast please.
(The Doorbell rings.)
Bob: Get that for us.
(Silvia walks out of the room to answer the door, she walks back in with Paul.)
Bob: Paul, how can I help you.
Paul: I think it is how can I help you.
Bob: How do you mean
Paul: Your Hotel.
Bob: Yeah
Paul: Yesterday you said you have not got a partner yet, and well what do you say about me and you fifty fifty.
Bob: Really
Paul: Yes of course.
Bob: Ok, yeah ok I will get the contact read..
Paul: No need I have one already, don’t worry erm come to The Bookies about twelveish and we can sort it out there ok.

Scene Two
The Hospital.
(Shawn is still in Bed, Lucy and Amy are sitting by his bedside.)

Lucy: Mike should be here in a while.
(A knock on the door and Sharon walks in with a packet of grapes.)
Lucy: What the hell are you here for, if it was not for you we would not be in this mess.
Sharon: Look I am sorry, but I did not shoot him.
Lucy: Oh no I know you did not shoot him but if you did not go see that man this would not of happened.
Sharon: I am so sorry amy please.
Amy: Just leave now get out.

Scene Three
Upstairs of The Pub
(Mike is going through his safe and pulls out some papers looks at them and smiles)

Scene Four.
Alan and Trudys
(Alan is sitting in his arm chair reading the local paper while Trudy is on the phone.)

Trudy: What do you mean you cannot handle him, he is your son. Yes I know that a lot has happened but, no we have not got room for him, look I have got to go bye. (Trudy puts the phone down)
Alan: Whats up.
Trudy: His mum can not handle Daniel anymore.
Alan: Can anybody handle him.

Scene Five
Inside James and Phillipas
(James is eating his breakfast and Phillipa is drinking a cup of coffe.)

James: I still want to know where that folder has got to.
Phillipa: Will you stop going on about that bloomin folder.
James: It has got important documents in.
Phillipa: It will turn up.

Scene Six.
The Hospital
(Amy and Lucy are still at Shawns bedside)

Amy: He will wake up soon
Lucy: Yeah of course, shawn is the strongest man I know.
(A man with Blonde hair and a suit walks in.)
Man: Tougher than me.
Lucy: Robert, what are you doing here.
Robert: Hello Mum, I got your call and just thought well I would come and see him.
Lucy: Oh you have not met, this is Amy ,Shawns wife, and Amy this is Robert Shawns Brother.
Robert: Nice to meet you.
Amy: Ditto
Lucy: Right I cant just sit around here all day, I have a Pub to run, you will stay here and look after Amy wont you Rob.
Robert: Of course.
(Lucy walks out)
Robert: So you are the new Mrs Scotsman then.
Amy: Yeah I guess, so how come I have not seen you around before.
Robert: Well Exeter Street was not how should I put it my place.
Amy: How do you mean.
Robert: Well lets just say that I am not as big a fish as Shawn is in the small pond by the name of Exeter Street.
Amy: I see, so what have you been doing.
Robert: Oh you know the usual stuff.
Amy: Like what.
Robert: Just stuff now can we leave it at that.
Amy: You have not asked about Shawn yet.
Robert: Well how is he.
Amy: How does he look.

Scene Seven
Inside Trudy and Alan.
(Trudy is going through some letters as Alan walks in with two teas in his hand.)

Trudy: Alan how come it says here we have not payed are rent for the last two months.
Alan: Agah.
Trudy: What do you mean Agah
Alan: Well I have had trouble with some money, I mean Ray has not been around recently with the fags so I cant really make any money.
Trudy: Alan for goodness sake we need to get this sorted out and soon because, if we don’t we will have nowhere to live.

Scene Eight.
Upstairs of the pub.
(A Gift box is on the table, Lucy walks in and looks at the box and Mike walks in.)

Mike: Well are you going to open it.
Lucy: It is for me.
Mike: Yeah, oh before you do how is Shawn.
Lucy: Oh no changes but Robert has turned up.
Mike: Rob, why.
Lucy: Because Shawn is his brother.
Mike: Well open it then.
(Lucy opens it to find a few pieces of paper in it.)
Lucy: What is it.
Mike: Read it.
(Lucy reads through it.)
Lucy: It is divorce papers.
Mike: That is right.
Lucy: I don’t understand.
Mike: We are getting divorced.
Lucy: What no we cant I mean how that is.
Mike: I have already packed your bags I will give you twenty minutes, oh and I do not want to see you in Exeter Street ever again and don’t bother going to see Shawn.
Lucy: You cant stop me.
Mike: Oh I can because if you do not do what I say then I will kill you, now get out.
Lucy: I am not going anywhere.
Mike: Yes you are now do as I say.
Lucy: Since when did I do as you say.
Mike: Oh believe me you will go.
Lucy: No.
Mike: excuse me
Lucy: I said no.
Mike: Come on (Mike grabs Lucy by the arm and pulls her down the stairs, he grabs her suitcase and opens the back door, he chucks Lucy out and the bag.) and you can stay out.




Scene One
The market
(Paul is on his mobile talking to someone.)

Paul: Yes look don’t worry, I will get it started trust me this place will go dirt cheap once I have finished with the place.

Scene Two
The field.
(Bob and Silvia are walking through the field and stop at the lake.)

Bob: This place is going to be perfect, I mean look the hotel will be great and imagine waking up looking at this Lake and the bird sanctuary.
Silvia: yeah it will be perfect, maybe you could put a garden in here as well I me it would be lovely.
Bob: Maybe

Scene Three.
The pub bar.
(Mike is emptying the pumps when the door knocks he goes to answer it.)

Mike: Viv what are you doing here you’re an hour early.
Viv: Yeah well I thought I would get an early start Lucy around?
Mike: Erm no she is still up the hospital.
Viv: Have you been up yet.
Mike: No not yet I shall pop up later.
Viv: Well you better.
Mike: since when did you giving me orders, I am your boss.
Viv: Well sorry.

Scene Four.
The Hospital
(Amy and Robert are at Shawns bedside.)

Robert: She is beautiful she has your eyes.
Amy: yeah I will have to feed her soon.
Robert: So whats new in Exeter Street.
Amy: Well how long have you been gone?
Robert: Five years.
Amy: So you knew Malcolm and Jill then.
Robert: Oh yeah
Amy: Well Malcolm killed Roy Crabtree and then tried to kill Jill, and nearly killed Shawn.
Robert: Malcolm killed Roy Crabtree why?
Amy: I don’t know, and then this happened I mean (She begins to cry.)
Robert: Hey, hey calm down everything is going to be ok (He hugs her and smiles) trust me.

Scene Five
Riley Club.
(James is on his mobile.)

James: yeah, yeah ok so we have a deal great.

Scene Six.
Sharon and Phils house.
(Sharon is in her dressing gown with the curtains closed she is drinking out of a bottle of wine.)

Scene Seven
The Hospital
(Amy is feeding Kristen, Mike walks in with a bag of grapes.)

Amy: Oh Mike
Mike: How is he.
Amy: Oh he is ok I suppose, what am I saying he is not ok.
Mike: Calm down, Shawn is as tough as nails he will wake up soon.
Amy: yeah I suppose, so Lucy not with you.
Mike: No she is behined the bar tonight.
(Robert walks in with two coffees)
Robert: Ello Dad
Mike: Rob, how are you me son.
Robert: Oh you know this and that, Mum not with you.
Mike: No she is busy.

Scene Eight
The lake
(It is night, a van pulls up to the lake and Paul steps out, he looks around and opens the back doors and brings out some barrels they say on it WARNING TOXIC WASTE. He pours the waste into the lake and puts the barrels back in the van and drives off.)

Well i am going on holiday for 10 days on monday so i shall try and post another two episodes before then enjoy :)

bakedbean
13-08-2005, 19:33
Yes that is right people we are coming closer and closer to the grand finale and boy have i got a lot to write.

I did promise that Bully boy Mike Scotsman will be leaving the street and will indeed get himself killed in possibly Exeter Streets best storyline yet. But the big question is who will kill him on the episode it will seem so obvious until the very last moment.

Also another Scotsman could very well end up dead and buried when Shawn who is still in a comma shall fianally awake but will suffer from a heart attack.

And finnally Paul Ramsay has not been in the show for very long but his life will possibly come to a crashing end when he is attacked by a mystery person.

Also much much more.

bakedbean
14-08-2005, 13:56
Episode 10

Scene One
The Bookies office
(Paul is on his phone)

Paul: I have sorted it, trust me when the health and safety visitor visit and see all them dead birds from the sanctuary, then you will get that land trust me that hotel will not be built. But you better give me my forty percent because I have a lot riding on this.

Scene Two.
The Hospital
(A Nurse is checking Shawn while Amy is watching on.)

Amy: nurse
Nurse: Yes Mrs Scotsman
Amy: Will, will he wake up.
Nurse: It is hard to say, at the moment he is at a steady pace but yeah he should wake up soon.

Scene Three
Vivian House.
(Vivian is on the phone.)

Viv: What no I can not believe that man, no you must come back, yes I will ring you everyday and tell you about Shawn but you should be there not me please hello…hello.

Scene Four
The Bookies
(Paul is at the counter taking bookings from Hugh and Alan.)

Hugh: So how you doing.
Alan: Me oh you know the usual Trudy is still banging on about a bloody new carpet so I am trying to get some money together.
Paul: How are you getting on with the rent.
Alan: Sorry?
Paul: Nothing.
(Paul phone rings.)
Paul: Excuse me. (Paul walks in to his office and answers it.) Hello, yeah well am I going to get the place I am excellent yes I know they are having trouble with the rent, who says anything about keeping them in the house.

Scene Five.
The Hospital.
(Amy is talking to Robert.)

Amy: Why wont he wake up.
Robert: He will you shall see
Amy: Do you promise
Robert: of course.
(Vivian walks in)
Amy: Viv.
Viv: It cant be Robert Scotsman.
Robert: Ello Darling.
Viv: Come and give your God Mother a cuddle.
(Robert gives Viv a hug)
Viv: Well I never thought in a million years you would come back.
Robert: Well when I heard about Shawn I decided I would come back.
Viv: How long are you here for.
Robert: I have not decided yet.
Viv: Well if you need somewhere to stay you can always come round mine.
Robert: Yeah I might do that.
Viv: So how is he?
Amy: He is pulling through the nurse says he will wake up soon.
Viv: Well that is good.

Scene Six
The Pub
(Mike is serving Alan)

Alan: So how is Shawn
Mike: Still in a comma but I reckon he will wake up soon.
(Alan goes over to Trudy)
Trudy: Well we best get back soon for dinner.
Alan: come on then (they both walk to the door) See you Mike.
Mike: Yeah see you.

Scene Seven
Outside Trudy and Alan
(A Lorry is outside of the house with two men in black suits at the door.)

Alan: Can we help you.
Black suit 1: Are you a Mr and Mrs Lisbon
Trudy: Yes we are, who are you.
Black Suit 2: We are Balifs
Trudy: You What?
Black Suit 1: it is all here. (He hands a sheet over to Trudy)
Trudy: My god they are evicting us and taking over one thousand pounds worth of stuff.
Alan: You cant do this
Black Suit 2: Yes we can because you see that is what happens when you don’t pay your bills.

well i wont post anymore episodes until 2 weeks so enjoy. :thumbsup: :cheer: :)

diamond1
20-08-2005, 19:05
really cool story :thumbsup:

bakedbean
25-08-2005, 14:02
Hey people i am back and i have some news.

I did a lot of thinking over my holiday and i have come to the descision that Exeter Street will continue with no seasons, however i will take a short break now and then. I already have storylines planned to keep me going through to the new year.

bakedbean
25-08-2005, 16:21
Scene One
Vivian house.
(Trudy and Alan are unpacking there stuff while Vivian is making a drink.)

Viv: So have you contacted your landlord.
Trudy: Of course but he is not there anymore.
Viv: What
Trudy: he is not our landlord.

Scene Two
Bob and Silvia
(The letter box opens and in falls a letter addressed to Bob and Silvia. Silvia picks it up and takes it into the kitchen where Bob is busy reading the paper.)

Bob: I thought the bills have already arrived.
Silvia: They must of forgotten to post this one.
Bob: That bloddy postal service is getting worse day by day (Silvia starts to open the letter) I mean they should sort this out before hand.
Silvia: Bob
Bob: What
Silvia: look at this (She hands him the letter on it in Newpaper letters it reads GET OUT OF EXETER STREET BEFORE IT IS TO LATE!!!)
Bob: What the hell does that mean.
Silvia: I don’t know.

Scene Three
The lake
(Paul is at the lake looking at the Lake, he notices some dead fish and a few dead birds, he gets his phone out of his pocket)

Paul: Hello is that Environmental Health.

Scene Four.
Rileys
(James is going through some files with another man in a black suit.)

James: So it is a deal then.
Black Suit: Oh you bet you it is a deal.
James: I want you to find everything you can on him every detail and double check it.
Black suit: Don’t worry Mr Perry it will all be sorted soon.
(Phillipa walks in)
James: Well that will be all for now (Black Suit stands up as does James they shake hands as Black Suit leaves.)
Phillipa: Who was that
James: Oh just someone trying to get me to try out some of this new wine he has.
Phillipa: And
James: I said no.
James: So what do you want.
Phillipa: That is a nice thing to say to your wife isn’t it, no well I did want something.
James: How much do you need.
Phillipa: Oh no
James: You don’t want money
Phillipa: Well not yet anyway, no I have a proposel.
James: So you do want money
Phillipa: Listen will you.
James; Ok go on.
Phillipa: Well this place has been doing alright for business lately
James: Yes
Phillipa: Well I got thinking how about we open in the afternoon.
James: Oh no I am not doing one of them twenty four hour things.
Phillipa: Let me finish will you
James: Sorry
Phillipa: How about we serve lunch here I mean we will make more money and everything.
James: Fine
Phillipa: What really, no argument no nothing.
James: Don’t push it.
Phillipa: great

Scene Five
The Bowlers House.
(Hugh is coming down the staris when a letter comes through the letter box, he picks it up and opens it words in newspaper say GET OUT OF HERE BEFORE IT IS TO LATE!!!)

Scene Six
The Pub
(A letter falls through the letter box as mike sees it he picks it up and opens it, it reads THE END IS HERE!!)

Scene Seven
The Bookies office.
(Paul is once again on his phone.)

Paul: Oh trust me they will all be walking out of here soon and then you will get the land, after all of this no one will ever live in Exeter Street again.

Scene Eight.
The Café
(Hugh is drinking a cup of tea while Bob and Silvia are reading through the letter.)

Silvia: Well what does it mean get out of Exeter Street before it is to late.
Bob: I don’t know
Hugh: You got one to did you.
Silvia: What you got one.
Hugh: Oh yeah.
Bob: Well what does it say
Hugh: Get out of here before it is to late (Chuckles.)
Silvia: This is not a laughing matter.
Hugh: Oh come on it is probably a bunch of kids messing about.
Silvia: You think so
Hugh: Oh yeah, well I mean it is not doing anybody any harm anyway, it is better then them taking drugs.
Silvia: I suppose.
Bob: No
Silvia: No what
Bob: Well kids I mean why would they want to do that
Hugh: You know what they are like
Bob: No someone wants us out of Exeter Street and they want us out now.

Scene Nine
The Bookies office
(Paul is still on the phone.)

Paul: Exeter Street is soon to be a bad place to live in, trust me even if it means costing a life.

diamond1
26-08-2005, 20:54
yeah what happened to shawn?

diamond1
28-08-2005, 23:46
other than that really wicked

bakedbean
30-08-2005, 11:56
well if you read from the start he was accidentally shot by phil who is now waiting trial

diamond1
30-08-2005, 11:57
yeahi know about phil shooting him i meant what happened to him in hospital you said something about a heart attack?

bakedbean
30-08-2005, 12:43
sorry where did i say that#

diamond1
30-08-2005, 14:03
Yes that is right people we are coming closer and closer to the grand finale and boy have i got a lot to write.

I did promise that Bully boy Mike Scotsman will be leaving the street and will indeed get himself killed in possibly Exeter Streets best storyline yet. But the big question is who will kill him on the episode it will seem so obvious until the very last moment.

Also another Scotsman could very well end up dead and buried when Shawn who is still in a comma shall fianally awake but will suffer from a heart attack.

And finnally Paul Ramsay has not been in the show for very long but his life will possibly come to a crashing end when he is attacked by a mystery person.

Also much much more.

there you go its in there somewhere

bakedbean
30-08-2005, 14:29
oh that was one of my spiolers but i have changed it.

diamond1
30-08-2005, 18:26
oh ok sorry but really this is classic,to be honest i know a pub called the royal oak never been in it though *useless info for you* but really carry this on cause its really good do you make this stuff up?also if i ask really nicely could you give me some more info on the characters because sometimes i forget whos who a bit if thats ok with you?

bakedbean
31-08-2005, 09:59
Sure of course.

Well yes most of the storylines i have made up but some are based on my experiances and what my family has been through.
The Pub is now being called The Lion becuse it is better.

Charecters

Mike Scotsman: He is the king of the hill, Mike is the landlord and a bully boy, him and James Perry have history that we dont really know about.
Lucy Scotsman: Mikes wife, at first you would think things are going on well between the two but behined closed doors it is a diffrent story.
Shawn Scotsman: The eldest son he is what i like to call the chosen one, evreyone likes him and he is married to Amy Scotsman and has a daughter six month old Kristen.

Bob Mero: Bob is something of a bussiness man, he is a nice guy he is a community man.
Silvia Mero: Bobs wife, she is a bit of a busy body.

James Perry:The Top gun, owns Riley night club and is married to Phillipa.
Phillipa Perry: Phillipa is the queen bitch of the street and does not get on with Lucy.

Paul Ramsay: We dont know much about him just yet appart from he is the brother of Phillipa so he is bowned to be evil, he owns the local bookies.

Sharon Hillary: Shes married to Phil except he is in prison for murdering Sharons kidnapper Ray Butcher.

Alan Lisbon: Sixty years of age and he is a big gambler as well as a drinker.
Trudy Lisbon: Alans wife, she does evreything for you.
Vivian Langton: Trudys sister, she knows James two well.

Well i hope that helps i have some more charecters joining soon

bakedbean
01-09-2005, 10:38
Scene One
Bob And Silvia’s Home
(Bob is talking to a police officer on his couch)

Police Officer: and you say a few other people have recived letters
Bob: Yeah nearly everyone
Police Officer: Yes well I think that we will need to do some more investigations and I will need all the letters
Bob: Well we are having a meeting tonight in the local pub you can come then
Police Officer: Ok that will be great

Scene Two
The Field
(Paul Ramsay is standing by as two men in white suits are taking test on the lake; they find a few dead fish and some dead birds. Paul gets his mobile out of his pocket and dials in a number.)

Paul: Bob I need you down at the lake fast, just come it is an emergency.

Scene Three
Vivian’s Flat
(Viv is talking to Trudy)

Viv: I can’t believe that everyone is receiving letters like this.
Trudy: Well there is going to a meting tonight in the pub anyway
Viv: Yeah have you had any luck in finding your landlord?
Trudy: Yeah as if.

Scene Four
The Lake
(Bob walks up to the lake and meets Paul.)

Bob: What the hell is going on
Paul: They have found toxic waste in the lake.
Bob: WHAT
Paul: It has killed all the fish and the birds from the bird sanctuary.
Bob: Well we need to get it sorted.
Paul: Yeah and there is something else
Bob: What
Paul: There is a chance that it has got into the water pipes that lead straight into the street.
Bob: But there was no warning or anything I mean I had a drink of coffee early today and…
Paul: Don’t worry it has not got into the main pumps just yet so they are going to shut them off and send warnings to everyone.
Bob: And the hotel
Paul: It looks bad.

Scene Five.
The Bowlers
(Stacey is trying to get water out of the tap.)

Stacey: Dad, dad
Hugh: What
Stacey: Did you pay the water bills this month?
Hugh: Just about why.
Stacey: Well there is no water coming out.
Hugh: Of course. (He has a go.)
Stacey: See I told you (A knock on the door is heard)
Hugh: I best get that.

Scene Six
The Perry’s
(Phillipa turns on the tap but no water comes out.)

Phillipa: That is funny
James: What is that love.
Phillipa: There is no water coming from the tap.
James: You sure.
Phillipa: Well I would not have told you otherwise would I. (A Knock at the door.) Well go get it then.

Scene Six
The Bowlers
(Stacey is trying to turn on the tap when Hugh walks in.)

Stacey: Who was it.
Hugh: Environmental health, it looks like some toxic waste has got through the pipes so they have shut off the water.
Stacey: So what are we going to do?
Hugh: They have given us two big bottles of water that should last a few days and then they will fill it up for us.


Scene Seven
The Hospital
(Shawn is still lying on the bed while Rob and Amy are talking.)

Rob: So how did you meet Shawn?
Amy: Well I used to work at the old snooker hall which is now Rileys and we just met.
Rob: The Snooker Hall has been replaced by who.
Amy: oh yeah by James Perry
Rob: No way, I bet Dad had a good moan
Amy: Oh you bet you he did, what is his problem with him anyway.
Rob: I don’t know something to do from when they were young.
Amy: It is silly really isn’t it
Rob: Yeah
Amy: They have only spoken once
Rob: Blimey I am surprised they even did that
Amy: Its that bad.
Rob: Oh yeah when me, Shawn and Tanya were young most of the arguments between dad and mum where over him.
Amy: Tanya, oh yeah I remember your sister I have only seen her once at the wedding what is she up to now a days.
Rob: Good question that is none of us know really, mum said something about her living with a sugar daddy, but your not to tell dad he will flip, especially his little angel.

Scene Eight
The Pub
(Everyone is handing in there letters to Inspector Grouse)

Inspector Grouse: Thank you ladies and gentlemen, yes well me and my team are working hard on this so called blackmailer and they obviously do not want you here. However we think we have made a few connections what with the Toxic Waste and Mr and Mrs Lisbon being evicted from there house and the missing landlord.
Viv: Well who is it then
Grouse: That is a good question indeed and certainly one that I promise I shall personally answer however I have come to the conclusion that someone in this Pub right now is indeed the Blackmailer and I am warning them now beware because when Inspector Grouse is on the case you will be caught.

diamond1
01-09-2005, 19:35
thanks alot thats brilliant for the characters and the story is still good i sense an affair starting with rob and amy

bakedbean
01-09-2005, 21:20
Yeah you might be right there, however i have just wrote two episodes which will be up very soon when a new resident could spoil evreything.

bakedbean
01-09-2005, 21:24
Scene One
Rileys
(James is busy doing a stock check while Phillipa is going through some paper work with a man)

Phillipa: Well I will look forward to working with you in the future Mr Alyson so the kitchen should be ready in a week or so, so you can start in three weeks I should think.
Mr Alyson: It will be a pleasure working with you both.
Phillipa: And the same from us

Scene Two
Viv House
(Viv walks in the front room where Alan is reading his paper while Trudy is reading a magazine.)

Trudy: Oh this Is bloody awful
Viv: I know it is that water they gave us.
Alan: I would rather have the normal water.
Trudy: What and get ill.
Alan: I wonder if the Pub has been affected (He puts his Tea on the table it begins to shake as a loud noise is heard outside.)
Viv: What the hell is going on. (She and Trudy look out the window.)
Alan: What is it
Viv: Lorrys
Trudy: They look like they are builders
Viv: Come on the rest of the street are going outside lets go.

Scene Three
Exeter Street
(Bob and Silvia are outside as well as Mike, Phillipa, James and Paul and then out come Viv and Trudy.)

Viv: What is going on
Silvia: They are digging up the street
Trudy: What for
Silvia: They are checking the water or something Bob is just coming now he has been speaking to one of the workmen.
Bob: I cant believe it, they are taking up the whole street and no cars or anything can come through for the next eight weeks.
Phillipa: Hold on they cant do that
Bob: They have got to, so they can replace are pumps and that sort of thing.
Phillipa: But what about are kitchen
James: It wont effect Rileys.

Scene Four
The Hospital
(Amy is feeding Kristen while Rob is talking to her.)

Rob: You know how I told you about Tanya
Amy: Yeah
Rob: Well don’t be surprised if she turns up
Amy: How do you mean
Rob: She is a Scotsman and when a family member is hurt they always come rolling in.
Amy: So what she will turn up
Rob: I would put all my money on it.
Amy: Well what is she like, I mean the last time I saw her at my wedding she did not say much
Rob: She is like mum times ten
Amy: Oh no
Rob: Oh yeah and she is spoilt and (His phone begins to ring.)
Amy: You should not have that on here
Rob: Hello, ok yeah I will be right there.
Amy: Where are you going?
Rob: I have just got to see someone; I will be back in about an hour.

Scene Five
The Bowlers
(Hugh is watching television while Bobby is crying because of all the noise from outside.)

Hugh: Hey, hey come on now little feller.

Scene Six
Viv House
(Viv is looking out of the window while Alan is reading the paper.)

Viv: I can’t believe we have to put up with that racket for eight weeks.
Alan: I know I can’t concrete.
Viv: Ha you concentrating that will be the day.

Scene Eight
The Pub
(Mike is talking to Stacey)

Stacey: What do you mean you have chucked Lucy out?
Mike: Well it was time she left and it means you and Bobby can move in here with me.
Stacey: I don’t know
Mike: Everything will be fine.
Stacey: Yeah I suppose, Mike I am being blackmailed
Mike: What
Stacey: by Daniel
Mike: Leave it to me I will sort it.

Scene Nine
The Canal
(Paul is sitting on a bench by the canal waiting for someone, then walks on Robert.)

Rob: Paul, it is great to see you.
Paul: Rob, how are you.
Rob: Oh you know this and that more to the point how are you.
Paul: Me im fine
Rob: look I know you did not call me for just a chat on how we are so what did you want.
Paul: It is not me it is Dennis Hill, he is back and I wants to offer you a job.
Rob: What sort of job.
Paul: I don’t know but he wants to see you now I will drive you up there if you want.
Rob: Yeah ok.

Scene Ten
The Alleyway
(Daniel is walking down the alleyway with his hud up, he walks past some boxes when suddenly he is pulled back and held up the wall, the man holding him up is Mike.)

Daniel: Get your hands off me.
Mike: (Laughs) Or what, aye you going to blackmail me to.
Daniel: I don’t know what you are talking about
Mike: You know damn well what I am talking about and if you even think of blackmailing Stacey again then I will kill you got it.
Daniel: Yeah I got it.
Mike: Good now get out of my site. (Daniel runs off)

Scene Eleven
Hills Incorporation.
(We are taken to an office inside sits Dennis Hill with two men by his side, a knock on the door.)

Dennis: Enter
(Enter Paul and Robert.)
Dennis: Brilliant, Paul
Paul: Dennis this is Robert Scotsman
Dennis: Scotsman aye, let me guess jet black hair brown eyes well suited you must be Mikes son.
Rob: Unfortunately yes.
Dennis: I like him Paul, I believe you have told him why he is here.
Paul: Just the bit that you told me
Dennis: Good, good, Robert let me ask you a question do you live in Exeter Street
Rob: I was brought up there.
Dennis: Right and your thoughts on the place.
Rob: Nothing really it is just full of common muck
Dennis: I really do like you, how would you feel about a job.
Rob: What sort of job
Dennis: Well Exeter Street is a valuables piece of land and well I need it, that is where you come in.
Rob: Meaning
Dennis: Well I already have Paul on the case and well I think it would be wise to have another associate to help me with capturing this land.
Rob: I don’t understand
Dennis: Robert you could become a very wealthy man if you help me, because if you get me this land I will then be able to build my new Hotel and shopping mall, you could become a millionaire.
Rob: so let me get this straight you want me to ruin everybody’s lives in Exeter Street and it will make me a millionaire
Dennis: Correct
Rob: It is a deal (Rob and Dennis shake hands.)

diamond1
03-09-2005, 12:05
i still think i see an affair coming hopefully when shawn wakes up i hope he sort rob out or mike could if shawn dies? and i think we need someone to stand up to that paul fella and dennis as well but still this is such a good story keep it going its wicked

bakedbean
04-09-2005, 17:51
Oh no Paul and Robert will be sticking around through to the new year. Believe me i have so many storylines between these two i promise that Exeter is going to get so much more intresting.

diamond1
04-09-2005, 21:04
yeah you got to have the bad guys, anyway im intrested in seeing how this pans out with these guys! and is phil written out now for good or will he stand a trial?

bakedbean
05-09-2005, 09:29
I am debating that i tell you what why dont you decide.

bakedbean
05-09-2005, 09:33
Scene One
The Pub
(Mike walks down the stairs as a letter comes through his door, it is red he opens it and looks shocked.)

Scene Two
The Bookies
(Paul is talking to Robert in his office.)

Rob: So what do you want me to do?
Paul: I have an idea, do you know Daniel
Rob: I have seen him out and about
Paul: yeah well he seems like the kind of kid that would do anything if you get my drift

Scene Three
The Hospital
(Amy is crying by Shawn’s bedside, Shawn’s hand suddenly moves.)

Amy: Shawn, Shawn are you awake can you hear me Shawn?

Scene Four
The Pub Upstairs
(Mike is on his phone.)

Mike: Dennis hi its Mike I was wondering if I could come and speak to you, I can oh good.

Scene Five
The Park
(Daniel is smoking while kicking a football around with some other kids, when Paul and Rob come up to him.)

Daniel: What do you want?
Rob: Watch your mouth you little
Paul: Enough, now shall we start again good. Daniel what would you say to a job.
Daniel: How much
Paul: Fifty sound good.
Daniel: Fifty what.
Paul: Pounds
Daniel: I don’t know, what is this job.
Paul: Well, I know your not lets say the perfect schoolboy
Daniel: Well that’s cuz I was expelled.
Paul: Yeah well any way how would you feel about scaring off some residents?
Daniel: How
Paul: Well I am not sure yet
Daniel: What do you mean your not sure yet.
Rob: Look you little brat listen to him
Daniel: Shut your mouth
Paul: Look Daniel can we find somewhere more private then here.
Daniel: Yeah follow me
(Daniel walks out of the park and Robert and Paul follow him.)

Scene Six
The Hospital
(Amy is talking to a Doctor)

Amy: Look I am telling you, I saw his hand move
Doctor: Yes well Mrs Scotsman you have not had much sleep over the last few days and well
Amy: Look I am not stupid I saw it with my own eyes end of.

Scene Seven
Hills Incorporation
(Mike pulls up in his car outside the offices, he steps out of his car and looks at the building, he shuts his car door and locks it and goes inside.

Scene Eight
Dennis Hills Office
(Dennis looks out of his window and see Mike arrive he smirks and sit back down on his chair waiting for Mike. A knock on the door.)

Dennis: Enter
(A receptionist enters with Mike behind her.)
Receptionist: Sir this is Mr Scotsman
Dennis: Thank you Tracey.
(Tracey leaves)
Dennis: Sit down Mike
Mike: Thanks (He sits down)
Dennis: So how can I help you?
Mike: do you still do loans
Dennis: (He laughs)

Scene Nine
Abandoned Warehouse
(Daniel walks in through a broken window Paul and Robert look at the window)

Daniel: Well if you want my help you are going to have to step into my office.
(Paul looks around and climbs in followed by Robert)
Daniel: Welcome, so how can I help you.
Paul: I told you about
Daniel: Yeah you want me to ruin the residents lives I understand that bit, but how
Paul: That is where you come in see, we need someone small somebody who is fast and bingo that’s you.
Daniel: And
Paul: We need you to go into peoples houses and well can you spray paint.
Daniel: Course I can
Paul: Well spray something on there walls that will scare them off.
Daniel: And that is it.
Paul: Pretty much
Daniel: And I get fifty pound for it.
Paul: Yep sure
Daniel: Deal (Daniel shakes hands with Paul)

Scene Ten
Dennis Office
(Dennis is talking to Mike)

Dennis: You want to borrow money off me because you are in trouble how much
Mike: Fifty thousand
Dennis: (Says with a sharp tongue) Fifty Thousand my god what kind of trouble have you got yourself in.
Mike: It seems that I have well been throwing around my money.
Dennis: But fifty thousand I mean throwing around that much.
Mike: Please im begging you
Dennis: All right, all right Fifty thousand you say, well I want it back in three weeks understand.
Mike: Yes I do three weeks
Dennis: Good (Dennis stands up and walks to his safe he unlocks it and gets out some money he counts it and hands it to Mike)
Mike: Thank you
Dennis: Oh and Mike don’t screw me around because there will be hell to pay.

diamond1
05-09-2005, 20:19
phil should stay for a while and get written out in an emotional court case for sharon or summin or some nutcase shoots him in court

bakedbean
06-09-2005, 10:45
Lol i like the nutcase thing but yeah i think i will do the court case but it wont be until near the end of the year.

diamond1
06-09-2005, 21:14
yeah thats cool

diamond1
09-09-2005, 19:13
your next episode is soon i hope yeah?

bakedbean
11-09-2005, 18:27
Tomorow i will post the next episode dont worry.

bakedbean
12-09-2005, 19:23
Scene One
Outside Bob and Silvia
(On the Front of Bobs door it says SCUMBAGS, Silvia opens the door to get the milk she turns and sees the writing she drops the milk.)

Scene Two
The Perrys
(Paul peers out of the netting and sees Vivian helping Silvia as well as Bob looking at the door Paul smirks.)

Scene Three
Outside Bob and Silvia’s
(Viv is talking to Silvia and Bob)

Viv: Who has done this, I mean who would want to
Bob: I will tell you
Viv: Who
Bob: That ruddy Blackmailer, and do you know what I am going to do, I am going to ring inspector Grouse.
(Bob goes into the house.)
Silvia: Why us Viv why us.
(Silvia begins to cry and Viv hugs her)
Viv: Oh come on now Sill a bit of paint on the door and no one will notice
Silvia: It’s not that Viv, what’s next; I think it is time we left
Viv: You can’t say that Sill I mean you are going to let this Blackmailer whoever they are beat you.
Silvia: No you’re right; nothing is going to drive me out of my home.

Scene Four
The Lion
(Mike is busy cleaning the glasses when a knock at the door.)

Mike: Alright im coming
(Mike answers the door revealing a beautiful thirty something Brunette.)
Mike: Can I help you?
Woman: Hi the names Chrissie, Chrissie Doyle the new bar maid.
Mike: What, I never asked for a bar maid
Chrissie: No you didn’t your wife did, well are you going to let me in or what.

Scene Five
Vivian’s
(Alan and Trudy both come out of there bedroom as Viv walks in.)

Viv: Morning
Trudy: Morning Viv, what was all that shouting all about.
Viv: Someone has only just gone and spray painted scumbags all over Silvia’s front door.
Alan: What
Viv: Bob reckons that the black mailer has something to do with it.
Trudy: It would not surprise me.

Scene Six
The Lion
(Mike is showing Chrissie around the bar)

Mike: So when did my wife contact you
Chrissie: Last night
Mike: That’s funny
Chrissie: Why
Mike: Because my wife does not even live here or work here.
Chrissie: I still have a job right.
Mike: Well you seem to know a bit about working in a pub.
Chrissie: Well I grew up in one.
Mike: Oh really anywhere around here.
Chrissie: Yeah you might know it The Dog.
Mike: The one just round the corner.
Chrissie: Yeah.
Mike: Chrissie
Chrissie: Yes Mr Scotsman.
Mike: Please it is Mike.
Chrissie: Mike
Mike: Why having you brought two suitcases with you.
Chrissie: Oh your wife said that I can live here while I am working here.
Mike: Really

Scene Seven
The Hospital
(Amy is talking to an unconscious Shawn.)

Amy: Come on Shawn wake up, please Shawn If you can hear me show me.
(She looks at Shawn)
Amy: Please (She begins to cry on Shawn’s chest.)
Shawn: Amy (Amy stands up to see Shawn awake.
Amy: Shawn your, your awake
Shawn: Yeah
Amy: oh (She faints)
Shawn: Amy, Amy

Scene Eight
Inside Bob and Silvia’s house.
(Silvia comes down the stairs as Bob puts the phone down.)

Silvia: What did he say?
Bob: He wants us all to meet him in the Lion tonight
Silvia: I suppose I will go rally up all the troops.
Bob: yeah thanks love.

Scene Eight
The Hospital
(Shawn is talking to Amy)

Shawn: So what has been happening while I have been you know away (Smiles)
Amy: Oh you know the usual, oh Robert came back to see you, he is still here well not in the hospital but he is still around somewhere.
(Robert walks in)
Robert: Oh im still here, Shawn your awake.
Shawn: Robert.
Robert: How are you feeling?
Shawn: A bit sore but nothing serious, I don’t suppose that Tanya has shown up.
Robert: No mum did not want her knowing, gosh is that the time look I have got to dash I will be back tomorrow see ya.

Scene Nine
The Lion
(Viv, Mike and Chrissie are serving customers while the rest of the residents of Exeter Street are listening, to Inspector Grouse.)

Inspector Grouse: So as I was saying who ever this blackmailer is they have a motive.
Bob: And do you know it.
Grouse: Well I have a few answers but at the moment I am keeping them to myself.
Bob: Oh come on you need to tell us.
Grouse: A mastermind never reveals until the last minute (Chuckles, Robert walks into the bar.)
(Robert walks to the bar not noticing Chrissie and speaks to Mike)
Robert: Good new dad.
Mike: What’s that then
Robert: Shawn’s awake.
Chrissie: Oh that’s good.
(Robert suddenly stops grinning and turns to see Chrissie)
Rob: What the hell are you doing here.
Mike: Do you two now each other.
Chrissie: Oh yeah we know each other very well, you see my last name is no longer Doyle in fact its Scotsman, because im Roberts wife.

baileya
12-09-2005, 21:45
you are a really good scriptwriter and another great part. Youll have some rivalry to because Ive wrote the first season of my soap and it will be up soon so check it out when it comes up.

diamond1
13-09-2005, 17:41
hey thats gonna be cool cant wait but for the time being exeter is the best script soap on here

bakedbean
13-09-2005, 18:09
you are a really good scriptwriter and another great part. Youll have some rivalry to because Ive wrote the first season of my soap and it will be up soon so check it out when it comes up.

Great some competition good luck

baileya
13-09-2005, 19:02
hey thats gonna be cool cant wait but for the time being exeter is the best script soap on here

Cant beat Exeter but im quite satisfied with it. Very very good stories here bakedbean.

bakedbean
13-09-2005, 19:23
Thanks a bunch i have an explosive episode coming up at the end of the month it is exciting with a death. What is your soap about then??

baileya
13-09-2005, 19:34
Well its called Merseysiders and obviously based on a street called Liverpool Street. I hope you enjoy it as much as I have enjoyed your soap. The season finale will be a very explosive episode!!!

bakedbean
13-09-2005, 19:34
so when are you going to post it??

baileya
13-09-2005, 19:40
later on possibly after eastenders. Ill post the characters first followed by the first script

bakedbean
13-09-2005, 21:14
Goody i am waiting for it now come on lol

diamond1
14-09-2005, 20:44
pretty exciting stuff then coming up wonder who could be dying? oh well look forward to it and with merseysiders coming up should be entertaining stuff to read. oh yeah just to let you know im gonna make up a online soap called newcastle street ....just joking lol im glad shawns ok and now maybe this could start tension between shawn and rob over amy!

bakedbean
15-09-2005, 18:26
Oh man your good at guessing my storylines, there will be a grudge forcing one of them leaving Exeter Street forever!!! and dont expect to see Paul Ramsay for much longer, becuse i will be writing him out in a cliff hanger of a show in november. I am planning on a big shake up forcing some charecters to leave the show however newer and fresher faces will be joining the street in the new year!!

diamond1
15-09-2005, 18:52
ive got a bad feeling its gonna be shawn leaving but this is still gonna be a good storyline cant wait hopefully a fight will happen wanna see rob get beaten up

bakedbean
17-09-2005, 18:08
Scene One
The Lion
(The meeting with Grouse is still going on as Chrissie has just revealed Roberts secret.)

Mike: WHAT
Robert: Chrissie upstairs now.
(Robert goes to the back followed by Chrissie.)

Scene Two
The Lions Living Room
(Robert barges in followed by Chrissie she shuts the door.)

Robert: What the hell are you doing here?
Chrissie: Oh I don’t know perhaps that little thing you know leaving me behind in New Zealand with no money.
Robert: I left you with the bar.
Chrissie: Don’t you give me that crap you sold it, just before you left but you forgot to mention that to me didn’t you.
Robert: How did you know I was here.
Chrissie: You think im stupid, it just so happens I found your old phone with your mums phone number and I rang her and explained everything.
Robert: Oh I knew she would have something to do with it, the meddling bitch where is she anyway.
Chrissie: Her and your Dad have split up.
Robert: What when
Chrissie: How am I supposed to know that I am not a miracle worker.
Robert: That is brilliant you have been here for five minutes and you know more about what’s going on then I do. Well pack your bags.
Chrissie: why
Robert: Because I am sending you back.
Chrissie: Oh no Rob I like this place I like it a lot I aint going anywhere.
Robert: Don’t push it look I will be back in a few weeks.
Chrissie: No you wont, you were just going to leave me there with nothing well im staying put.

Scene Three
The Lion [Downstairs]
(Bob is talking with Grouse.)

Grouse: I believe you have something you want to show me.
Bob: Yeah I got another letter it (Searches through his pockets) Well I did have it. Oh I must have left it at home I will just pop back and get it.
Silvia: Where are you going love?
Bob: I have just got to go and get something I will be back in a minute.
Silvia: Well be careful.

Scene Four
Upstairs of The Lion
(Chrissie and Robert are still in the living room and are arguing.)

Chrissie: So let me get this straight, you get yourself into trouble in new Zealand and you run away leaving me, leaving me with nothing at all you sell the bar and I am left to pick up the pieces, so I have to ring your mum and tell her everything and she tells me, that I am to start work at The Lion where you are currently living and when you see me all I get is what the hell are you doing here. Robert you are nothing but a selfish gutless coward. I hate you.
Rob: Well do the right thing lets get divorced.
Chrissie: (Laughs) You would love that wouldn’t you finally you get your freedom, well guess what it is not going to happen not now not ever.
Rob: Listen to me
Chrissie: no you listen to me, im no longer that defenceless bumbling wreck that you married, I am here in Exeter Street and I am here to stay have you got it, and you are not getting rid of me end of.

Scene Five
The Lion [The Bar]
(Mike is serving drinks while Paul is on his mobile.)

Paul: Daniel, listen to me have you done it yet, you have well good now get out of there because Bob is on his way back meet me at the back alley in half an hour.

Scene Six
Bob and Silvia’s
(Daniel is finishing off spray painting one of the walls, the front door opens Daniel runs and hides in the kitchen, Bob walks in and turns on the light he sees on the wall it says GET OUT OF HERE BEFORE IT IS TO LATE)

Bob: What the bloody (He hears a crash in the kitchen.) Hello who is there come on out I know you are in there. (Bob slowly walks into the kitchen he looks around but sees no one.) Come on out I know you are in here (WHACK, Bob falls to the floor pulling down the table on top of him.)

Scene Seven
Upstairs of The Lion
(Chrissie is looking at some of the photos on the side bored while Robert is pulling himself a drink.)

Rob: So it looks like I am stuck with you then
Chrissie: Oh yeah I am not going anywhere.
Rob: Look I am sorry about everything that happened back in New Zealand you know, but I got into some trouble.
Chrissie: Yeah I know just don’t ever do that to me again understand.
Rob: Yeah, so do I get a kiss (Chrissie looks at Robert and walks over to him they kiss passionately)

Scene Eight
Downstairs of The Lion
(Silvia is sitting with Alan and Trudy.)

Trudy: And anyway Alan when are you planning on going back to work
Alan: You know I am not going back because of my back.
Trudy: Well you do know that there is a Lolly man job going.
Alan: You have got to joking I can just about manage with are grandkids let alone anybody else’s.
Trudy: Well suit yourself then
Silvia: Where is he
Alan: Who
Silvia: Bob he has been gone for nearly half an hour.
Alan: I tell you what I will walk with you to the house and we can find out what he is up to.

Scene Nine.
The Back alley
(Paul is waiting in the Alleyway when Daniel turns into the Alleyway)

Paul: Where have you been I have been waiting for ten minutes.
Daniel: I had I bit of trouble
Paul: Bob
Daniel: Yeah
Paul: Did he catch you?
Daniel: No
Paul: But
Daniel: Well I was hiding in the kitchen and I knocked a plate off he walked in and well I got a frying pan and hit him across the head with it and the table fell on him
(They hear a scream)
Paul: I guess someone has found him then

Scene Ten
Bob and Silvia’s Kitchen
(Alan pulls the table off of Bob, while Silvia rings for an ambulance.)

Alan: Bob, Bob are you awake Bob.

baileya
17-09-2005, 21:02
very good again. I wonder if Bob survives I hope he does.

bakedbean
17-09-2005, 21:47
you will have to wait till tommorow to find out.

diamond1
18-09-2005, 20:52
oh no not bob what a shame heres my take paul might help dan out though in a coverup and then blackmail him into more work for him?

diamond1
18-09-2005, 20:54
love the pauline fowler esque frying pan attack

bakedbean
20-09-2005, 18:29
Scene One
The Hospital
(Shawn is sitting on the bed with Amy and Kristen while the Doctor is talking to them.)

Doctor: So I want you take it easy for the next few weeks ok.
Shawn: Yeah I suppose.
Amy: Don’t worry Doctor I will take good care of him.

Scene Two
Mikes Bedroom
(Mike is asleep in his bed when his mobile rings, he wakes up and answers it.)

Mike: Hello, Dennis your money yeah I have some of it but I don’t have to pay you back till next week, yeah ok I will make sure I have the money by then. (Mike puts down his Phone he looks across the bedroom and see his suitcase he smiles.)

Scene Three
Robert and Chrissies Bedroom
(Chrissie is asleep on Roberts chest however Robert is awake he looks at Chrissie, he smirks)

Scene Four
Bob and Silvia’s Bedroom
(Bob is in bed with some bandages across his head Silvia walks in and give him a plate of toast and a cup of tea.)

Bob: You shouldn’t have love
Silvia: Now you are not to get out of this bed do you understand
Bob: Yeah I understand.
(They kiss.)

Scene Five
Outside The Lion
(A Taxi pulls up first steps out Amy who is carrying Kristen and is then followed by Shawn, Shawn hands the Taxi driver some money. Shawn then looks up and down the street and sees all the roadwork.)

Shawn: What’s been going on here.
Amy: Something to do with the water it is sorted now.
Shawn: Well let’s go in.
(Shawn puts a key to the door and lets Amy and Kristen in first and looks around and smiles and then goes in.)

Scene Six
The Bar
(Robert is behind the bar in his shorts picking out some champagne from the fridge as Shawn and Amy walk in.)

Shawn: Rob, what are you doing?
Rob: Shawn your back good to see you
Shawn: Never mind that why are you in your shorts.
(Chrissie walks in with just one of Roberts’s shirt on.)
Chrissie: Have you got that arghh you must be Shawn and Amy
Shawn: And you are.
Chrissie: Chrissie, Chrissie Scotsman
Amy: (Says in shock) Scotsman
Chrissie: Oh you don’t know either do you.
Shawn: Know what
Chrissie: Im Mrs Scotsman as in Mrs Robert Scotsman.
Amy: (Says in shock) Your married.
Shawn: Where’s Mum and Dad.
Rob: Dads popped out and Mum has left
Shawn: Left, I don’t understand.
Rob: Mum and Dad had a bit of an argument and she packed her bags and walked out.
Shawn: That does not sound like Mum
Rob: I know

Scene Seven
The Solicitors
(Mike is sitting down talking to his Solicitor.)

Solicitor: So Mr Scotsman you want to sell your pub but you don’t want anybody to know about it.
Mike: Yeah that’s right
Solicitor: Well it will cost you a bit more.
Mike: Fine, but I want it done as soon as possible; I want to get out of that damn well Pub as soon as possible.

Scene Eight
The Bookies
(Paul is on his computer in his office when his phone rings. Paul looks at it for a moment and then answers it.)

Paul: Hello, Dennis you want to see me this afternoon, I cant I have a meeting I(Short Pause) Yes of course I will cancel the meeting of course I will be there this afternoon.

Scene Nine
The Lion [The Living room.]
(Amy is feeding Baby Kristen, when Robert walks in)

Rob: Oh sorry I will go
Amy: No Robert stay but shut the door.
(Rob shuts the door)
Amy: When where you going to tell me that you had a wife or did that just slip your mind.
Rob: Look I have enough from Chrissie so I don’t need (Pause) what the hell has it got to do with you.
Amy: Nothing its just I would have preferred it if you had told me first that’s all.

Scene Ten
The Lion [The Kitchen]
(Shawn is making a sandwich while Chrissie is making a pot of tea.)

Shawn: Are you from New Zealand then.
Chrissie: Me no, im from Blackpool
Shawn: oh yeah
Chrissie: Yeah my Dad and Mum own a Hotel up there.
Shawn: Oh really, so erm did you and Robert come back to Britain together
Chrissie: No
Shawn: So you came back what two three days later.
Chrissie: Try a month
Shawn: A month, what the hell is going on?
Chrissie: Look I will explain soon I have things to sort out with Robert first (Mike walks in) Mike your back do you fancy a cuppa.
Mike: Yeah, Shawn Robert told me you where awake I did not think you would be back so soon.
Shawn: Yeah it is great to see you to Dad but what’s this about Mum leaving.
(Mike sighs)

Scene Eleven
Hills Incorporation
(Dennis is sitting at his desk when Paul Ramsay walks in)

Dennis: Paul so good to see you, now do I have my report?
Paul: Yes
Dennis: Go on
Paul: Well I have a feeling that one couple will be moving out, when Daniel attacked one of them.
Dennis: You have a feeling, a feeling I don’t want feelings I want proof I want solid evidence Paul you are skating on very thin ice if I don’t see a fast improvement I am giving you a month and if there is not an improvement then I will send you off in style one month.

big bro fan
20-09-2005, 19:09
i think your soap is amazing hope mine is as good as yours

bakedbean
20-09-2005, 19:59
Thanks for the complement i am enjoying your soap i just hope you are enjoying mine, tell me who is your favorite charecter on my soap???

diamond1
20-09-2005, 21:26
sorry but this week has been great one of your best episodes and by the looks of it amy fancys rob and i can feel an affair coming between them.

bakedbean
21-09-2005, 17:54
Yeah well their is soon to be fireworks, lets just say the new year will begin with a bang. Also i have an explosive Christmas Episode it is going to be fantastic i promise. But make sure that you read my next few episodes where it will conclude to an exit from a charecter and a fire that could kill three leaving somebody crippled in the legs i wonder who???? LOL

big bro fan
21-09-2005, 18:58
i finally finished reading all of exeter and have to say it is realy really really really really amazing i hope my soap will be as good as yours

diamond1
21-09-2005, 19:24
wow so your gonna have all this up soon i hope?cause the thought of waiting till christmas to find out really is unsettling but a fire that could leave someone crippled hmmmm thats gonna get me thinking i think mike cause you said hes leaving but dunno

bakedbean
21-09-2005, 19:42
Well he will be part of this explosive episode, but not neceserialy to do with the fire!!

bakedbean
21-09-2005, 19:50
Scene One
The Café
(Paul is getting a coffee when Sharon walks in she accidentally knocks into Paul and his Coffee spills all over his shirt.)

Paul: Oh that was my best shirt
Sharon: Oh im sorry
(Paul who is whipping his shirt looks up into Sharon’s eyes.)
Paul: It is Sharon isn’t it.
Sharon: Yeah, yeah it is you must be Paul what’s your last name
Paul: Ramsay its Ramsay, how are you by the way with everything.
Sharon: Oh you know here and there, look let me buy you another coffee
Paul: Well if you are sure.
Sharon: Yeah go find us a table.
(Paul goes to find a table as Sharon orders two coffees.)
(The camera then moves over to Chrissie who is drinking a cup of tea while on her mobile.)
Chrissie: Yeah sure, he has been acting a bit strange these last few days, whenever the phone rings he answers it, it is as if he has something to hide you know.
(Sharon walks over to the table Paul is sitting at and hands him his coffee)
Paul: Thanks
Sharon: So you’re related to Phillipa right
Paul: Yeah im here Brother
(Sharon smiles and begins to play with her hair.)

Scene Two
The Lion [The cellar]
(Mike is on his mobile)

Mike: You have found a buyer good, when do they want it two weeks time yeah that will be just fine.

Screen goes black

(Mike is now on the Phone to Dennis Hill)

Mike: Dennis look I was thinking I need some more time say an extra week, you will oh trust me I will bring it all by then (Mike puts the Phone down, Mike begins to laugh)

Scene Three
The Café
(Paul is talking to Sharon, Paul’s phone begins to ring)

Paul: Excuse me (Paul answers the phone) Yeah I understand ok. (Paul puts the phone down) look erm what are you doing tonight
Sharon: Not much just another night in front of the tele
Paul: Good how about I take you out for diner tonight
Sharon: What me, where
Paul: Well I thought about that new place down town.
Sharon: Sure
Paul: I will pick you up at eight, its number eleven isn’t it?
Sharon: Close number twelve
Paul: (Stands up) I will see you at eight

Scene Four
The Park
(Stacey is in the park walking around with Bobby in the pram when Mike walks into the Park; Stacey runs over to Mike and hugs him)

Stacey: I have not seen you in days
Mike: I have been busy
Stacey: Well what did you want to tell me.
Mike: Im leaving
Stacey: What, when, why, you cant.
Mike: I have to
Stacey: But why
Mike: Its time I left I don’t belong here anymore
Stacey: You cant, dad always told me when I was young that you would never leave the street, and it’s like you own the street.
Mike: Look Im leaving in a few days but you have to promise me something your not to breathe a word of this to everyone not your dad no one.
Stacey: I promise
Mike: Good, look I will sort some money out for you and Bobby don’t you worry and I will send you a check every month.
Stacey: I could come with you
Mike:(He smiles) No im sorry, look you will be safer here trust me.
Stacey: But why
Mike: Look trust me, if things calm down then I will be back
Stacey: When a week two weeks a month or a year
Mike: I don’t know (mike kisses Stacey on the forehead.) but I will be back.

Scene Five
The Lion (Living room)
(Chrissie and Amy who is holding Kristen are sitting down when Shawn and Robert walk in with a brochure)

Chrissie: What’s this then.
Rob: Arghh well me and Shawn were thinking.
Chrissie: Oh that has to be a first
Rob: Well we that is the four of us are going on a cruise
Amy: What when
Shawn: Tomorrow.
Chrissie: Tomorrow, you could have told us before I mean come on we will need to go shopping and get some new shoes.
Rob: That will be another dent in the credit card.

Scene Six
Stacey’s Bedroom.
(Bobby is asleep; Stacey is lying on her bed tugging on her pillow crying)

Scene Seven
Hills Incorporation
(Dennis is in his office talking to two Black suits.)

Dennis: It is time that we help Paul along
Black Suit 1: How do you mean
Dennis: Well that is simple break into a house
Black Suit 2: Oh yeah and which one where you thinking of then.
Dennis: Number twelve
Black Suit 1: Any particular reason
Dennis: (Smiles) A former Bodyguard of mine used to live there he is in prison now, its just his wife living there I know you can handle her.
Black Suit 2: Leave it to us.

Scene Eight
The Lion (The Kitchen)
(Mike walks in looking worn out he sticks the kettle on when Shawn walks in)

Shawn: Dad
Mike: (Grunts)
Shawn: Look you don’t mind if me rob and the girls go away for a few weeks I have already altered the roster.
Mike: Oh you have, have you?
Shawn: Yeah well Vivian was looking for overtime and Trudy is working here every now and again
Mike: Ok, there is no point of arguing so when are you going
Shawn: Tomorrow morning
Mike: Fine

Scene Nine
Number Twelve
(Paul Ramsey’s car pulls into the drive, Paul steps out and rings the door bell, Sharon answers)

Sharon: Hey, I wont be a minute just come in.
Paul: Thanks (Paul walks in as Sharon shuts the door behind him.)

Scene Ten
Sharon’s Living room
(Paul and Sharon walk in)

Sharon: Sit down I have just got to put on my necklace oh you couldn’t give me a hand could you.
Paul: Of course
(Sharon goes to the mirror as Paul puts on Sharon’s necklace)
Sharon: Thank you
Paul: My pleasure
Sharon: So where are you taking me then
Paul: I told you
Sharon: Oh of course, well I am ready
(Paul and Sharon leave)

Scene Eleven
Outside Raldonnies
(Paul and Sharon come out of the restaurant)

Sharon: That was a lovely meal (She begins to rub her arm)
Paul: Are you ok
Sharon: Its just a bit cold
Paul: Oh here have my jacket (He takes his jacket off and puts it on Sharon)
Sharon: Thank you, I never knew you knew Phil
Paul: Oh yeah when he was working for Dennis Hill, it was years ago.

Scene Twelve
Outside Number Twelve
(Paul pulls up in his car, he steps out and helps Sharon out of his car, he walks her to the front door.)

Paul: So when will I see you again.
Sharon: Tomorrow
Paul: Ok (Paul kisses her on the cheek, he walks to his car)
Sharon: Wait, do you fancy a coffee
Paul: Sure (Paul walks to Sharon as she opens the front door they walk in)

Scene Thirteen
Sharon’s Living room.
(Sharon and Paul walk in she turns on the light to see that her house has been burgled)

Sharon: Oh my gosh
Paul: Stay where you are I will go look around the house

Screen goes black

(Paul walks back into the Living room)

Paul: There is no one about look I think it would be safer if you stayed at mine I will stay on the seatte
Sharon: Really
Paul: Sure

Scene Fourteen
Upstairs of the Bookies
(Paul brings out a sleeping bag and puts it on the Seatte)

Paul: Ok the bedroom is ready for you now.
Sharon: Thanks, (she stands up and looks into Paul’s eyes they kiss passionately) look that bed will get pretty cold with just me in it if you know what I mean
(They walk into the bedroom shutting the door behind them.)

diamond1
21-09-2005, 19:50
aaaah cant wait for next weeks episode and the week after and the week after wow you make a good story

diamond1
21-09-2005, 19:51
you posted that right before my last post cheers for the episode

bakedbean
21-09-2005, 19:52
Thank you very much

diamond1
21-09-2005, 19:57
sharon and paul? i dont belive it...but phil boy is he gonna be mad. geys better each week

big bro fan
21-09-2005, 20:05
are sharon and paul going to get serious because whats going to happen when phil comes out it could be a whole kat alfie mo stoyline and then pau; kidnapps sharon for dennis or something either way great episode

bakedbean
21-09-2005, 20:09
No Phil is in prison for at least 12 years he will be appearing soon for about four episodes.

baileya
21-09-2005, 21:23
Maybe a showdown involved with Phil and Paul. Looking good.

bakedbean
25-09-2005, 18:37
Well here is the episode evreybody has been waiting for enjoy :)

Scene One
Upstairs The Bookies
(Inspector Grouse is talking to Sharon)

Grouse: Well it was certainly a break in
Sharon: But was it the blackmailer
Grouse: Well they have not left any graffiti on the wall like they usually do but you may be right, that is why I don’t want you to go back to the house for a few weeks or so just in case.
(Paul walks in)
Paul: Well she can stay with me
Sharon: Is that ok
Paul: Of course, listen I have a business meeting and I wont be back till late so don’t wait up for me ok
Sharon: Sure
(Paul leaves)

Scene Two
Outside The Bookies
(A car is parked outside with Dennis Black suits sitting in it they are watching The Bookies)

Black Suit 1: So run this past me again
Black Suit 2: Paul is going to be out all day and wont be back till way past one in the morning giving enough time to burn down this dump, then when he returns he will realise that this is his final chance.
Black Suit 1: And what about that scumbag Scotsman
Black Suit 2: Oh Dennis is going to deal with him tonight
(They both laugh)

Scene Three
Mikes bedroom
(Mike is looking out of his window, he turns to his desk and sees a plane ticket and his suitcase he smirks)

Scene Four
Bob and Silvia’s bedroom
(Bob is trying to get out of his bed but Silvia walks in)

Silvia: Oh no you don’t not for another day or two now get back into bed.
Bob: But Silvia I have to do some paperwork
Silvia: No

Scene Six
Rileys [The New Kitchen]
(Phillipa is showing the new head chef around the kitchen)

Phillipa: So is it ok then Mr Costello
Mr Costello: Oh please it is Roberto
Phillipa: Ok then Roberto
Roberto: It is fabulous, it is just what I need did you say we start tomorrow
Phillipa: Yes I did
Roberto: Excellent, well I was thinking that I will start off with my home countries favourites meals Pizza and as you British people say spagbowl
Phillipa: SpagBowl is something that Lucy Scotsman would say no we call it Spaghetti Bolognese, like you call it.
Roberto: Of course, we Italians are wonderful cooks.

Scene Seven
Hills Incorporation
(Dennis is sitting at his desk talking to James)

Dennis: How much do you know about Mike Scotsman
James: Mike, him and me used to be friends.
Dennis: Used to be
James: It’s a long story why do you ask.
Dennis: Oh its just that he has been a bad boy and not paid back his debt so I think he deserves a punishment
James: What sort of punishment
Dennis: Lets just say if anybody is to find him there will be a bullet hold in his head (Laughs)

Scene Eight
The Lion [The Bar]
(Viv is serving a drink to Sharon)

Viv: So how are things?
Sharon: Oh Im getting on you know
Viv: I see that you were in Paul’s flat this morning
Sharon: It wasn’t me
Viv: Oh please Sharon
Sharon: Alright but you have to keep it a secret
Viv: Of course
(James walks in)
James: Viv
Viv: What do you want
James: Is Mike in
Viv: Yeah he is upstairs why hey you just cant go up there

Scene Nine
Mikes Bedroom
(Mike is packing his case when James barges in)

Mike: What the hell do you think you are doing?
James: Not now Mike, why did you ask Dennis for money
Mike: Because he has enough himself
James: listen, he is after you…you need to get (Looks at the case)
Mike: Don’t worry I am already running
James: Well you better run soon
Mike: I will as soon as the new buyer turns up now if you don’t mind
James: Right, look Mike can we let bygones be bygones (He puts his hand out)
Mike: I suppose (Shakes James hand, James walks to the door and turns to Mike)
James: Good luck
Mike: Thanks (James leaves shutting the door behind him, Mike continues to pack his case when another knock on his door.) What now (Mike opens the door to see Lucy)
Lucy: Hello Mike
Mike: What the hell are you doing here?
Lucy: Going somewhere are we
Mike: What is it to do with you?
Lucy: Well that’s a funny question see when I heard that you were selling this place I thought to my self, he must be in trouble (Smirks)
Mike: No not you
Lucy: Oh yes Mike, it looks like I own your empire, its such a shame you wont be able to say good bye to the rest of the Family isn’t it.
Mike: How do you know that
Lucy: Chrissie
Mike: Oh I thought it was to good to be true
Lucy: So what have you done
Mike: Its got nothing to do with you
Lucy: I think it does Mike
Mike: No it does not (He shuts his suitcase and picks it up and grabs his plane ticket and walks out of the door)
Lucy: Mike
Mike: What
Lucy: See you in hell
Mike: Not if I see you first
(Lucy laughs as Mike walks down the stairs.)

part two soon!!

bakedbean
25-09-2005, 18:38
Scene Ten
The Lion [The Bar]
(Sharon is at the bar with Viv, Sharon finishes off her drink)

Sharon: Well I will see you soon.
Viv: Night
(Sharon walks out as Lucy comes in from the back)
Lucy: Fancy a lock in
Viv: (Turns round) Lucy your back, but I thought
Lucy: oh I have got rid of him, meet your new boss. (She smiles)

Scene Eleven
Outside The Bookies
(Sharon is on her mobile as she unlocks the door)

Sharon: Hey Paul, its me you must still be in your meeting well I am going to bed so I will see you when you get back. (Sharon walks into the Bookies and shuts the door behind her just as a car pulls up outside with Dennis Hills Black Suits)

Scene Twelve
Inside The Bookies
(Sharon walks to the front desk and turns off the alarm she puts the keys down and walks up the stairs)

Scene Thirteen
Outside The Old Post Office
(A Taxi pulls up outside, a man steps out he helps out a woman with a blindfold on, he hands the Driver some money and the Taxi drives off.)

Man: Here we are
Woman: Jake its cold
Jake: That’s because we are outside love (He takes her blindfold off, she looks around)
Woman: Oh Jake, ive always wanted a shop
Jake: Well are you coming in then
Woman: What is this place (She looks around)
Jake: Its called Exeter Street nice place in it. (The woman is still looking round) Emma, what’s up love
Emma: Sorry nothing its wonderful.

Scene Fourteen
The Canal Side
(Mike is walking by the canal side smiling when from under the tunnel comes Dennis)

Dennis: Mike Scotsman, good to see you.
Mike: (Says in shock) Dennis
Dennis: Going somewhere are we (points at the suitcase)
Mike: Just a little Holiday
Dennis: Oh really, funny that seen as you sold the pub, usually when somebody sells there business they leave
Mike: Like I said I was going on a holiday
Dennis: Well your going on a Holiday all right
Mike: I know
Dennis: (Chuckles) so I guess you don’t have my money
Mike: I will get it to you in a few weeks.
Dennis: no the games up (Pulls out a gun) I told you before don’t mess me around (Dennis puts his finger on the trigger)
Mike: Please Dennis I promise I will bring the money to you I promise
Dennis: Go to hell (BANG, Dennis watches as we hear a splash in the canal, Dennis laughs)

Scene Fifteen
Paul’s Bedroom
(Sharon is asleep in the bed)

Scene Sixteen
Paul’s Car
(Paul is driving down the Motorway)

Scene Seventeen
Outside the Bookies
(The Two Black suits go to the back of the boot they pull out some Gasoline, they walk to the front door, they open it and walk in)

Scene Eighteen
Inside the Bookies
(The Black Suits are pouring the Gasoline all over the place, one of them pulls a picture out of Paul and sets it alight they laugh and they leave)

Scene Nineteen
Paul’s Bedroom
(Sharon is still asleep)

Scene Twenty
The lion
(Viv and Lucy are enjoying a drink)

Viv: So he is not coming back then
Lucy: Well you know Mike he will probably be back but he aint get this place not in a million years
Viv: (She looks at her watch) Blimey is that the time I best go love.
Lucy: Yeah I will see you out.
(They walk out of the Door)

Scene Twenty-One
Outside The Lion
(Viv and Lucy walk out of the Pub)

Lucy: Well I will see you tomorrow
Viv: Yeah I suppose (Viv turns to the Bookies) Hold on
Lucy: What
Viv: It’s the Bookies its on fire
Lucy: I will go ring the Fire service
Viv: And the Ambulance
Lucy: Aye Paul isn’t in there
Viv: No but Sharon is.
(Viv runs to James and Phiilpa’s house she bangs on the door as Phillipa answers the door)
Phillipa: Oh what do you want?
Viv: It’s the Bookies
Phillipa: What about it
Viv: Its on fire and Sharon’s inside
Phillipa: What, I will ring the
Viv: No need already done ring Paul aye tell him what’s going on

Scene Twenty-Two
Paul’s Car
(Paul’s is on the Motorway when his Mobile rings he answers it)

Paul: Phillipa, slow down what is it, WHAT? I will be there in Ten Minutes (He begins to speed down the road.)

Scene Twenty-Three
Inside The Bookies
(The fire is blazing through Paul’s office and the front desk)

Scene Twenty-Four
Paul’s Bedroom
(Sharon is still asleep when the smoke begins to fill the room, Sharon begins to cough and she wakes she looks around seeing smoke, she walks to the door and opens it to see the stairs on fire, Sharon runs to the window.)

Scene Twenty-Five
Outside The Bookies
(The residents of Exeter Street are gathering outside of the Bookies when, Sharon opens her window and begins to shout)

Sharon: HELP SOMEBODY PLEASE
Lucy: SHARON DON’T WORRY THE FIRE SERVICE WILL BE HERE ANY MINUTE (She turns to Viv) Where are they
Viv: I don’t know
(Suddenly Paul’s car comes speeding down the road it stop and Paul gets out.)
Phillipa: Paul, Sharon she is inside
(Paul looks up to the window, he then runs to the door and kicks it open and runs in)
Phillipa: No, James go in with him
James: Me
Phillipa: Just do it (James follows Paul into the Bookies)

Scene Twenty-Six
The Bookies [The stair case]
(Paul is trying to get up the stairs when James runs in)

James: James what are you doing? You wont make it up there
Paul: I have got to save Sharon
(Sirens begin)
James: Look the fire service is here now come on
(The stairs begin to give way)
James: Paul get off there they are going to collapse
Paul: What?
(The staircase Paul tumbles down pieces of rubble fall onto Paul.)
James: Paul
(Two Firemen run in)
James: She’s up there and get some help for Paul please.
Paul: James, please, please…tell…tell Sharon that I…that I…love…her
James: No Paul you are not giving up not now
Paul: Its… Its all over
James: Who made this fire come on Paul I know you know
Paul: It was…it was…(Paul falls unconscious)
James: Paul no
(The firemen bring in a ladder and place it on the broken stair case they climb out, one of the men pulls James out of The bookies, another brings Sharon down from the stair case she sees Paul)
Sharon: PAUL No Paul!!!

baileya
25-09-2005, 20:22
Very good episodes really dramatic.

diamond1
25-09-2005, 21:07
please dont say we got to wait a week for another episode that was so good it really was like bailyea said it was dramatic bit of of a den watts style death for mike wonder if dennis will get caught?but the death(?) of paul was good as well, like the sound of jake and emma by the way

bakedbean
25-09-2005, 21:21
Alan Allsop- Married to Trudy, 3 kids not yet seen on Exeter currently lives with Trudys sister Viv after Paul Ramsay kicked Trudy and Alan out of there house.
Trudy: Has 4 children only 1 mentioned soon to join the Street, has 12 grandchilden.
Sharon Grand- Lives at Number 12, married to Phil Grand who is currently in prison for murder. Currently dating Paul Ramsay.
James Perry- Lives at Number 14 owns Rileys is a big time gangsta, does not get on with the now descesed Mike Scotsman (Or is he) is married to the street number one bitch Phillipa
Phillipa Perry: Married to James Perry, she is the super bitch of the street.
Viv Round- Trudys sister, lives at Number 3 the downstaris flat. Long time friend of Lucy Sctosman.
Shawn Scotsman- The youngest of the two sons. Gets on with James Perry and anyone else in the street, arch enemy Paul Ramsay. Currently married to Amy and has a babie daughter Kristen.
Amy Scotsman- see above
Robert Scotsman- Is the eldest son, a bit of a shady past, not alot known about him. All that is known is that he left his wife Chrissie in New Zealand to face the music.
Chrissie Scotsman- Married to Robert, originally from Blackpool. Chrissie is very confident and independent.
Lucy Scotsman- The queen of the street married to the now dead (Or is he) Mike Scotsman. Lucy is the head of the family.
Hugh Bowler- Farther of two marrige unknown.
Stacey Bowler- Stacey is 17 and has a baby boy by Mike Scotsman named Bobby.
Nick Bowler- Son of Hugh and brother of Stacey
Paul Ramsay- Younger Brother of Phillipa Perry, owns the local Bookies, currently works for the very shady Dennis Hill.

bakedbean
25-09-2005, 21:23
Sorry Dennis is sticking around and i will put the next episode up in the next few days.

lisapearce
26-09-2005, 21:12
Keep on writing BakedBean. It's great stuff.

And lots of people believe in you - not just your English teacher.

diamond1
26-09-2005, 22:43
why do you want people to believe in you for your a good writer and you know it

bakedbean
27-09-2005, 19:53
Hey peeps, i am currently planning out our own soap awards i will be posting rules and evreything later on tongiht.

Scene One
Inside Paul’s mind
(Paul is having flash backs of everything since he came to Exeter Street, Dennis keeps popping up warning him when suddenly he hears Sharons Voice)
Sharon’s Voice: Paul, Paul please wake up please
(There is a white flash that fades into the Hospital we see Sharon and Paul in his bed, Phillipa walks in with James)
Phillipa: How is he
Sharon: I don’t know he has not woken
James: What about his fall what have they said
Sharon: I am going to get his results later
Phillipa: He will wake up wont he James
James: I don’t know
(There is another white flash we hear James, Phillipa and Sharon talking in the background when suddenly we see Paul in his usual Black suit in what seems to be a white room, he looks around)
Paul: Where am I
Voice: (We hear a soft female Voice) We are wherever you want to be.
(Paul turns round)
Paul: (Says in a shock) Sally, but your, your dead.
Sally: (Sally is dressed all in white she walks to Paul and touches his heart) Not in here I am not.
Paul: No this is not happening this is just a dream
Sally: Sort of
Paul: What do you mean sort of
Sally: I can’t explain
Paul: What’s going on what happened
Sally: Don’t you remember Paul, you fell trying to save Sharon from the fire.
Paul: Oh yeah, am…am I dead
Sally: No
Paul: Sally, I don’t understand
Sally: I know you don’t, look all I am trying to do for you is to show you what could have been.
Paul: Wait a minute if your dead then you will know who killed you right
Sally: Yes
Paul: Well tell me
Sally: I am only here to show you what could have been, nothing else
Paul: No you must tell me
Sally: No, we are here for one reason and one reason only now can we get on with it, good.
(There is suddenly a bright white flash when suddenly from out of nowhere appears a Hotel by the name All Bridge)
Paul: Where are we
Sally: Lets take a closer look
(They walk inside the Hotel, Paul looks around and sees people that look happy he turns to the front desk and sees Bob and Silvia happily working)
Paul: That’s Bob and Silvia (He points to them)
Sally: I know
Paul: But, this is not real I mean there is no Hotel I…I
Sally: You destroyed their dreams Paul, this is all they wanted and you ruined their Hopes and Dreams
Paul: It wasn’t my fault I had to do it, it was my job.
Sally: You could have said no
Paul: I couldn’t, if I did it would mean the end for me
Sally: Take a look at these two, they are both happy but lets take a look at them now
(Another white flash until they turn up in Bob and Silvia’s bedroom)
Silvia: Here you are a nice cup of tea
Bob: I don’t want it, look all I want to do is get out of bed and get to work
Silvia: Drink it
Bob: I said I don’t want it (He throws the drink at the door.)
(Another white flash taking Paul and Sally back to the White Room)
Paul: What have I done
Sally: They wont be together in a few months, it will be there last Christmas together
Paul: No, they are good together
Sally: Not anymore
Paul: Because of me right
Sally: Yep
Paul: No I couldn’t have they are good together
Sally: Well they wont be together soon.
(Another White flash taking them both to a Prison Cell they see Phil lying on a bed)
Paul: That’s Phil I rember me and him used to work together for Dennis
Sally: Do you remember what you did just before he moved to Exeter Street
Paul: I killed his Brother
Sally: That hurt him Paul, if it was not for that Phil would not be in here, Sharon only went to find another Man because they were both unhappy.
Paul: I could not help it Dennis ordered me to
Sally: Don’t you see Paul?
Paul: What
(Another white flash taking them to Exeter Street)
Sally; This is your home now, but if your not careful many people will leave, look (She points to Alan and Trudy who are looking at there old house) You forced them both out of there Home that they both loved Paul you have ruined there lives
Paul: But I had to for
Sally: Dennis!! Don’t you see Paul he is the cause of all of this you where just his little helper and once he got what he wanted you would be no more.
Paul: What
Sally: Now its up to you Paul, its your move, if you want to destroy other lives then you do that but just remember you will go straight to hell!!!
(Sally disappears, we hear the Doctor talking to Sharon, Phillipa and James.)

Scene Two
Paul’s Hospital bedside
(The Doctor is talking to Sharon, Phillipa and James)

Phillipa: So you have the results
Doctor: I do
Phillipa: Well go on then
Doctor: I am afraid I have bad news
Sharon: He is going to live right
Doctor: Yes, however im afraid he won’t walk ever again
Phillipa: What, there must be some other way
Doctor: I am afraid not Mrs Perry
James: But there must be a chance right
Doctor: There is a five percent chance that he may walk
Phillipa: My brother is never going to walk again

Scene Three
Outside the Bookies
(The Bookies is burnt down, Emma and Jake are looking at it)

Emma: I thought you said this was a quiet street.
Jake: It is
Emma: Yeah it really looks like it.
Jake: Look it will calm down soon
(Viv walks up to Emma and Jake)
Viv: hi the names Vivian you must be the new owners of the corner shop.
Jake: Yeah that’s right how did you
Viv: I saw you moving in last night, what a night to move in aye
Emma: You can say that again
Viv: So when do you plan on opening up
Jake: Next week with any luck

Scene Four
Hills Incorporation
(Dennis is sitting down on his chair looking out of his window, there is a knock on the door, Dennis turns around as the door opens enter the two black suits)

Dennis: Gentlemen
Black Suit 1: Boss
Dennis: I am very pleased with your work, I hear that Paul is crippled what a shame (He laughs)
Black Suit 2: So what did you want us for
Dennis: Plan B gentlemen, there is a House on the market or was, I have just brought it me and my Family will be moving in there
Black Suit 1: Where is it
Dennis: Exeter Street

Scene Five
The Hospital
(Sharon and Phillipa are sitting at Paul’s bedside watching him)

Sharon: He is never going to walk ever again
Phillipa: My brother Disabled so tragic
(Paul begins to move as sweat falls down his face)
Paul: (Muffled) No…Sharon I will save you…no please no not now…not this way
Phillipa: Paul, Paul can you hear me Paul
Paul: (He slowly opens his eyes and looks around) Phillipa, Sharon
Sharon: Your awake
Phillipa: Oh Paul thank God
(They both hug him)
Paul: Why?
Phillipa: Why what?
Paul: I, I cant feel my…my…legs…why not
Phillipa: (Tears fall down her eyes) Paul, listen to me you’re never…your never going to… I can’t say it.
Paul: Sharon
Sharon: Paul im so sorry, you’re never going to be able to…walk
Paul: No please, no not now not this way. (He begins to cry)
Sharon: Im so sorry

Scene Six
Outside number 2
(A removal van is outside as Removal men are putting the seatte through the door)

Viv: We have another one moving in next door now.
Lucy: I know, I still cant get over that fire, how is Paul
Viv: I don’t know, I will pop up later, if that’s all right with you
Lucy: Yeah of course I will manage
[They both walk into the Lion]

Scene Seven
The Hospital
(Paul is lying on his bed trying to move his legs, Phillipa and Sharon are no where to be seen, Paul turns to the door and sees Dennis)

Paul: You…no.
Dennis: Paul how are you
Paul: Don’t you come all innocent with me look what you have done.
Dennis: I don’t know what you are talking about
Paul: Look at what you have made me become, a invalid
Dennis: Like I said I don’t know what
Paul: Don’t talk that crap to me I hate you.
Dennis: (Kneels down to Paul) Now you listen to me you fool, if you contact the Police about me then I will bring you down with me.
Paul: I don’t care I have nothing left
Dennis: Oh no, that Sharon looks a picture doesn’t she.
Paul: You leave her out of this.
Dennis: Well that is up to you, its your call Paul.

diamond1
27-09-2005, 22:19
well that was really diffrent and good the whole sub concience thing was wicked but really thats was so good theres better scripts here than on some soaps no joke, so dennis is moving to the street,paul's crippled and hopefully seen the light,jake and emma are gonna move to the corner shop i dont think mikes dead either i think hes gonna return in your xmas special coming up but you've proberley got some twist in store but whatever it is cant wait to read it

diamond1
27-09-2005, 22:27
when i meant other soaps i meant eastenders and hollyoaks not running down any ones soaps on here cause theyre all great

Rain_
27-09-2005, 23:25
This is amazing !!!!!

bakedbean
28-09-2005, 18:41
Scene One
Merton Prison
(The Camera moves from the street into the air, the camera suddenly comes out from the sky inside a Prison cell l, there we see the inmates doing there daily chores, we are then slowly taken to a cell where inside is an Prison Officer and the one and only Phil Grand)

Officer: Right Grand you have exactly an hour to do what you need to do before your trail got it.
Phil: Yeah whatever
Officer: You’re allowed one Phone call
(The Officer leaves, Phil who is lying on his bed reaches into his Pillow case and gets out a Picture of Sharon)
Phil: We will be together again soon love.

Scene Two
L wing [The Phone]
(Phil is on the Phone)

Phil: Yeah Twelve pm, yeah Burton Road got it good. (He smiles)

Fade into Black

Scene Three
Exeter Street (Outside The Lion)
(A car comes whizzing down the road and stops at The Lion, out steps Chrissie and Amy with Kristen who are then followed by Shawn and Robert)

Chrissie: Right boys you get the Suit cases and well we will sit back.
Rob: You’re not on your holidays anymore.
Chrissie: (Laughs) That’s what you think
(Chrissie knocks on the door while Shawn is getting the Suitcases out of the Boot Rob winks at Amy who smiles and blushes, The Lion Door opens and Lucy comes out in her Dressing Gown)
Lucy: Did you have a good time.
Chrissie: Fantastic thanks you must be Lucy
Lucy: Chrissie (They Hug) Robert after you have done that I want a word, you two alright
Shawn: Fine thanks mum
Lucy: And how’s my little Granddaughter.
Amy: She’s fine
Rob: (Looks across the road to the Bookies) Whats been going on
Lucy: Someone set fire to the place and Paul and Sharon got trapped
Shawn: Sharon
Lucy: It’s a long story
Shawn: Who’s that moving in down the Road
Lucy: I think there the Hills
Rob: Hill
Lucy: Yeah

Scene Four
Inside Number 7
(Dennis is busy in the front room, when a beautiful Blonde Girl about 18 walks in)

Girl: I miss Mum to Dad
Dennis: I know you do, cancer is a terrible thing, Danielle
Danielle: I hate that name its Danni dad
Dennis: Fine Danni where are your brothers?
Danni: Josh is job hunting and Jeff is well Jeff

Scene Five
Outside Merton Prison
(A Prison Van pulls up, two officers take Phil inside who is handcuffed, Phil looks around as the door is shut in his face.)

Scene Six
The Shop
(Emma is stacking some shelves while Jake is going through the books)

Jake: Big day tomorrow Babe
Emma: I know, looking forward to it
Jake: Me to

Scene Seven
Lucy’s Bedroom
(Lucy is now dressed, Rob walks in and shuts the door behind him)

Rob: What did you want mum.
Lucy: Don’t act all innocent with me Robert I know what you did to Chrissie that makes me sick
Rob: Look it is none of your business
Lucy: Its all my business when there is family involved
Rob: Look at you acting like the bloody well Queen Bee, now listen to me you can say all you want but as far as I am concerned you are just another medalling bitch
Lucy: How dare you
Rob: Oh don’t give me any of your Family Crap
(Rob walks out)
Lucy: Hey I haven’t finished with you yet

Scene Eight
Cannock Chase Road
(The white Prison van is speeding past the forest when suddenly from out of no where comes a black van, the white van skids and crashes into a fence and rolls down a hill. It comes to a stop, the driver and passenger are out cold, two men come running down one with a pick axe, he smashes open the back door and out falls Phil. The other man catches him.)

Phil: Tell Mike thank you I owe him one
(Phil runs off into the Chase as the Van sets alight the other two men run as the Van explodes behind them)

bakedbean
28-09-2005, 19:10
If you dont want to know the spoilers do not read anymore ************************************************** ************************************************** ************************************************** ************************************************** ********************************



Has Paul Ramsay seen the light after his fatal accident and who is going to come to his aid???
Dennis begins a mission to get hold of the Scotsman empire
Which Scotsman will be sent to Prison???
A passionate affair is soon to begin but who
Has James got a deep dark secret
Whos leaving after a discovery that will shock evreyone???

diamond1
28-09-2005, 21:08
wow phil escaping and the spoilers look great wonder what discovery will be revealed whos gonna have an affair and a scotsman get sent to prison wow cant wait ,hopefully not shawn and amy theyre great in the show

Rain_
29-09-2005, 08:44
Fantastic as ever :)

bakedbean
01-10-2005, 10:53
Scene One
Outside The Shop
(The papers arrive they are thrown on the floor on the front cover it reads MURDERER ON THE RUN with a picture of Phil underneath)

Scene Two
The Lion (Kitchen)
(Shawn is eating some Toast when he picks up the Paper on the table he looks at it with Shock, Amy walks in)

Amy: Shawn what up
Shawn: Its Phil
Amy: Yeah what bout him, he is in prison right
Shawn: No he has escaped
Amy: What
(Shawn puts his toast down and grabs his jacket and walks out)
Amy: Where are you going
Shawn: (Shouts) OUT
(Robert walks in)
Rob: Morning
Amy: Morning look what happened on that cruise between me and you cant happen again ok.
Rob: Sure, but I don’t think I can handle it
Amy: Handle what
Rob: My feelings for you
Amy: Well deal with it

Scene Three
The Old Railway
(Shawn is walking down the old track when he stops at a bridge, he sees a man sleeping in an old bin bag, he walks up to him and nudges him)

Shawn: Hello Phil
Phil: Shawn, how did you know I was here?
Shawn: Its where we always hung out when you were in trouble
Phil: Do you have anyone with you
Shawn: Don’t be stupid, what the hell are you doing
Phil: I can’t handle Prison its to much
Shawn: I know I was there for four years remember
Phil: Yeah, I thought I could you know from being in before but I cant
(Shawn reaches into his pocket he gets a wad of cash out and throws it to Phil)
Phil: What’s this
Shawn: You know what it is, good luck Phil
Phil: No wait don’t leave me here
Shawn: Phil the last time I got involved with one of your plans I got shot remember im not taking that risk again good bye Phil

Scene Four
The Hospital
(Sharon is talking to Paul)

Sharon: Im just popping downstairs to the shop
Paul: Get us paper please
Sharon: Yeah ok
(Sharon leaves)

Scene Five
The Old Railway
(Shawn is walking on the track when Phil runs up to him)

Phil: look Shawn, I need your help
Shawn: Why
Phil: Because you are the only one I can trust
Shawn: What do you want?
Phil: A fresh set of clothes
Shawn: That’s easy
Phil: And a gun
Shawn: Oh no, im not getting you a gun remember (Shawn lifts up his shirt to show a scar.)
Phil: Look that’s all I need from you nothing else
Shawn: Alright were will you be
Phil: Here
Shawn: But after that I don’t want to see anything of you hear me
Phil: Yeah

Scene Six
The Shop
(Jake and Emma are behined the counter, the place is packed)

Emma: Wow what a turn up
Jake: Anybody would think the Queen was coming

Scene Seven
The Hospital Shop
(Sharon goes over to get one of the papers she picks it up and reads the headline, she staggers and looks shocked)

Scene Eight
The Old Railway Bridge Tunnel
(Phil is lighting a fire when Shawn walks up to him with a bag)

Shawn: Here (Throws the bag at him)
Phil: (Rustles Threw the bag and pulls out some clothes and a gun) Thanks
Shawn: What’s the gun for
Phil: Security
Shawn: I don’t want you anywhere near Exeter Street got it.
Phil: That was the deal
Shawn: Good luck Phil
Phil: Thanks

Scene Nine
The Hospital
(Paul is lying on his bed when Sharon walks in with tears in her eyes.)

Paul: Sh…Sharon…what’s up?
Sharon: (She shakes her hand as she hands Paul the Paper)
Paul: (Reads Headline) No…It…Cant…be…no (Fear in his Eye)

big bro fan
01-10-2005, 12:47
This sounds as good as ever well done on yet another fantastic script.

baileya
01-10-2005, 13:22
one word brilliant!

diamond1
01-10-2005, 21:13
ok i want answers rob and amy what happened? wonder what phil needs the gun for? (protection my ass) ,why was shawn in prison? is mike dead? really good keep going

bakedbean
02-10-2005, 14:14
Well Phil isnt going to appear now for quite a while, i doubt that Phil will be back until the summer next year. Shawn in prison we are going to learn alot more about him in the next few weeks leading up to a dramatic climax. Mike is he dead, you wont believe how many people have asked me that well the answer will be very clear in a few weeks time. Rob and Amy well i know your not stupid and you saw straight through them. Could they have been having an affair on that cruise??? Its all gonna come out sooner or later right???

Rain_
02-10-2005, 19:18
this is brilliant !! keep going

diamond1
02-10-2005, 22:04
aah very good cant wait looks like theres loads ot look forward to see i keep thinking back to phils escape when he said say thanks to mike i owe him one, which leads me to belive this was after dennis "killed" mike which could mean mikes alive and wanting revenge?

bakedbean
03-10-2005, 18:23
Scene One
Outside The Bookies
(Sharon is looking around the front of the burnt Bookies, Trudy walks up to her)

Trudy: Are you all right
Sharon: Yeah, well no not really.
Trudy: Let me guess Phil
Sharon: I don’t know what I am going to do; I mean what if he finds out about This (Points to The Bookies) he will kill Paul
Trudy: But Sharon how is he going to find out, I mean there is no way he will come back to Exeter Street.
Sharon: I suppose your right
Trudy: Hey how bout a cuppa round are Vivs
Sharon: Yeah I would like that.

Scene Two
The Lion [Bar]
(Amy is whipping down the Bar, when Chrissie walks in with a suitcase.)

Amy: Where you off to
Chrissie: Just seeing my sister for the week
Amy: Great, Shawn’s gone away for the next two days on a job or something to do with the garage.
Chrissie: Look after Rob for us
(Robert walks in)
Rob: I heard my name.
Chrissie: I was just telling Amy to keep a watch on you.
Rob: I will be good.
Chrissie: I should think so to, right I have a train to catch
Rob: Do you want a lift.
Chrissie: No there is a Taxi outside waiting for me.
Rob: Oh ok so I will see you on Friday
Chrissie: Yeah you will (Kisses Robert) Bye, see you Amy
Amy: Bye Chrissie
Rob: See ya love
(Chrissie leaves)
Rob: Well its just you and me then for the next two days
Amy: No your Mums upstairs.
Rob: She is going out tonight, and you have the night off and so do I
Amy: Well what about Viv
Rob: Ive got cover, so we can pick up where we left off.
(They kiss, they hear Lucy coming downstairs they back off as Lucy walks in.)
Lucy: Chrissie gone has she
Rob: Yeah
Lucy: I hope you know that im going out tonight
Rob: Oh we know (Winks at Amy)

Scene Three
Vivs Front Room
(Sharon is sat on the Seatte when Trudy walks in with two cups of Tea.)

Sharon: Thanks
Trudy: Its ok (Sits down) so how’s Paul.
Sharon: He’s getting there
Trudy: It’s a terrible thing that happened to him you know
Sharon: I know, if I hadn’t have been in there then…well you know
Trudy: I understand

Scene Four
Outside Number 7
(Dennis comes out of the House and walks to his car when James walks up to him)

James: Hello Dennis, I see you have settled in
Dennis: Yeah, yeah I have
James: Nice place
Dennis: It is
James: Dennis, you may have had control over Paul and Mike but you haven’t over me.
Dennis: I don’t understand
James: You’re a Business man, and I know nothing stands in your way, but don’t even think that you are getting my place.
Dennis: Rileys you have to be joking, no I want something better (Looks at The lion and smiles) much better

Scene Five
Outside The Lion
(Viv is walking to The Lion when a sports car comes up to her the car window opens and a beautiful twenty something woman begins to speak to Viv)

Viv: Can I help you
Woman: Yeah I was looking for a Mr Paul Ramsay
Viv: He’s up the Hospital love just off the Main ro… (The Car speeds off) Charming.

Scene Six
The Hospital
(Paul is lying in his bed asleep)

Scene Seven
Hills Incorporation
(Dennis is in a suit and doing his hair when one of his Black Suits walks in)

Black Suit: Going somewhere Boss
Dennis: Have a hot date, which may just score me a certain Pub (Laughs)

Scene Eight
The Hospital
(Paul is asleep he wakes up and sees the Beautiful Woman from earlier)

Paul: Sophie
Sophie: Hello Dad
Paul: What hell are you doing here?
Sophie: I came to see you.
Paul: Where is Marc
Sophie: Forget about him, we are history
Paul: But you were going to get married to him’
Sophie: I said forget about it now are you going to tell me what happened or what.

Scene Nine
The Lion [Living room]
(Lucy is putting her Earrings on as Amy puts Kristen in her crib)

Lucy: Right Amy im off
Amy: Ok, have a good night
Lucy: Oh I will
(Lucy leaves just as Robert walks in)
Rob: (Looks to see if Lucy has gone we hear the back door slam shut, he shuts the door.) Now to pick up from were we left off. (They begin to kiss Amy pushes him back)
Amy: Not in here Kristen
Rob: Oh well my beds free.
(They walk hand in hand out of the Living Room)

Scene Ten
The Hospital
(Paul is talking to Sophie)

Paul: You aint brought your mum have you
Sophie: That bitch I don’t think so, I aint spoke to her for the last eight months or so.
(Sharon walks in just as Paul and Sophie hug)
Sharon: What the hell is going on
Paul: Sharon, this is my daughter
Sophie: The names Sophie, Sophie Ramsay and you are
Sharon: Sharon, Sharon Grand
Sophie: Oh this is the tart you were talking about
Sharon: I see you have some of Phillipas qualities

Scene Eleven
Restaurant
(Dennis is having a meal with Lucy).

Dennis: So tell me how many Scotsman’s are there in Exeter Street
Lucy: including me six, and how many Hills are there
Dennis: Including myself 5 one daughter and three sons.

Scene Twelve
Robert and Chrissies Bedroom
(Amy is lying with Robert in Bed)

Amy: Wow that was fantastic
Rob: I bet Shawn did nothing like that
Amy: Your right
(They kiss passionately)

baileya
03-10-2005, 21:34
very good again.

diamond1
03-10-2005, 22:07
how out of order is that how can they be like that to shawn boy that rob needs a smack and as for amy....

bakedbean
04-10-2005, 18:23
Hey i have just finished the latest 2 episodes that will be up toomorow

bakedbean
04-10-2005, 19:19
Scene One
Robert and Chrissies Bedroom
(Amy is asleep in Roberts arms he is awake. Amy wakes up)

Amy: Where is your mum
Rob: She did not come back last night
(They hear the back door slam shut and footsteps coming up the stairs)
Rob: Crap she is back
Amy: What am I going to do
Rob: Under the bed
(Amy with just a cover over her crawls under the bed as Lucy walks in)
Rob: Hello mum, you dirty stop out.
Lucy: Yeah yeah, just wanted to let you know I was back, where is Amy
Rob: Don’t know
Lucy: Well I am just popping in to Vivs for a few hours (Leaves and Amy comes from under the bed)
Amy: That was close
Rob: Round two tonight
Amy: But your Mum
Rob: I have it sorted

Scene Two
The Train Station
(A Train pulls up, the door opens and Chrissie steps out with a suitcase, she gets her mobile on.)

Chrissie: Robert its me, you must be busy seen as though your Phone is off im coming Home early and I have some news, I am just popping into Town back tonight, love you.

Scene Three
The Lion [The Bar]
(Viv is busy cleaning the glasses while Lucy is doing a stock check, Robert walks in)

Lucy: So you are finally up then
Robert: Yeah Amy’s upstairs with Kristen
Lucy: Oh where was she
Robert: Bed I think, mum I have got some tickets for this concert tonight for James Blunt. But I don’t fancie going so you and Viv can go.
Lucy: I would love to but I have a pub to run.
Robert: I have sorted, ive got some cover.
Viv: I wouldn’t mind going
Lucy: Where is it
Rob: Manchester
Lucy: That will mean we will need a Hotel
Rob: Got that sorted to
Lucy: Well I suppose.

Scene Four
Town Centre
(Chrissie is walking down the high street when she stops at a window with some sexy Underwear she smiles and walks in.)

Scene Five
The Lion (The Kitchen)
(Amy is on the Phone to Shawn)

Amy: What do you mean you are staying another night? A present sounds good; fine I will see you tomorrow. Love you to.
(Rob walks in)
Rob: Mum and Viv are about to leave we have the place to are selves.
Amy: Excellent
(Lucy walks in)
Lucy: Right then I will be off, see you sometime tomorrow
Rob: Yeah see ya Mum
Amy: Tra

Scene Six
The Lion [Back Door]
(Lucy and Viv are getting ready to leave.)

Viv: Taxis here
Lucy: Right off we go.

Scene Seven
The Lion [Kitchen]
(Rob and Amy are talking in the Kitchen)

Rob: Were is Kristen
Amy: Alan and Trudy are looking after her tonight.
(They get closer and kiss passionately, Amy walks with Rob into The Bedroom)

Scene Eight
Outside The Lion
(A Taxi pulls up and Chrissie steps out with bags in her hand she gives the driver some money and looks up at The Lion and walks inside.)

Scene Nine
The Lion [Staircase]
(Chrissie puts her bags down and walks up the Staircase)

Scene Ten
Outside Rob and Chrissie Bedroom
(Chrissie walks to the door and opens it to see Amy and Robert in bed)

Chrissie: What the hell is going on.

big bro fan
04-10-2005, 19:28
Excellent as always i hope chrissie gives rob a smack or chucks something at him or smashes a glass on his head...i had better stop otherwise i might start writing to much and create a whole spin off about rob and chrissie

Rain_
04-10-2005, 19:57
Has anyone else created a picture in their minds of what these characters look like? This story is so well written i feel like i know them all personally

big bro fan
04-10-2005, 20:01
That's the thing after a while you can paint apicture in your head of what the characters look like like paul ramsey i fel like i know what he is like and what he looks like

bakedbean
04-10-2005, 20:10
Thanks guys you dont know how much a compliment that is. (:(:(:

diamond1
04-10-2005, 21:48
you said two episodes for today are u still up for it? anyway wow i dont think chrissie will care i mean shes come to expect it but i think she will blackmail both of them

bakedbean
05-10-2005, 18:04
Scene One
Roberts and Chrissies Bedroom
(Rob jumps out of bed and puts his jeans on and Amy gets out and gets changed as Chrissie watches on)

Amy: We can explain
Chrissie: Save it you can explain all you want when I come back up. (Leaves)
Amy: What are we going to do?
Rob: Let me do the Talking
Amy: You’ve done this before
Rob: What you thought you were the first

Scene Two
The Lion [Bar]
(Chrissie walks in and rings the bell)

Chrissie: Ladies and Gentlemen we will be closing early so please drink up.

Scene Three
The staircase
(Rob and Amy are listening)

Amy: What is she doing?
Rob: She wants to talk to us and kicking them out that’s what

Scene Four
The Bar
(Chrissie helps one of the drinkers out and lets the Cover out and closes the door she puts the bolt on.)

Chrissie: I WANT YOU BOTH DOWN HERE NOW
(Rob walks in followed by Amy, they sit down as Chrissie goes and gets a drink from behind the bar she drinks it and looks at Rob and Amy)

Chrissie: So what’s the story this time Robert, bored with me or just felt lonely for the last twenty-four hours.
Amy: Look Chris…
Chrissie: I wasn’t talking to the dog I was talking to its owner Robert explain yourself.
Rob: It was a mistake im sorry
Chrissie: (Laughs) I warned you I told you, you had one last chance but like always you didn’t listen did you.
Rob: Look Chrissie we can work through this its just, Amy she came on to me.
Amy: WHAT how dare you, it was you who came on to me on that Cruise.
Chrissie: Oh so how long has this dirty secret been happening then Robert, Amy.
Rob: About 3 weeks
Chrissie: This just gets better and better each bloody minute
Amy: (Stands up) Chrissie this was a mistake just one big mistake
Chrissie: Sit down
Amy: No let me explain myself
Chrissie: I SAID SIT DOWN (Throws, the glass at Amy who ducks and it smashes against the wall.)
Amy: You’re a bloody psycho no wonder Robert went for somebody else
Chrissie: You stupid bitch (Walks up to Amy)
Amy: You haven’t got another glass what you going to do now
Chrissie: This (Slaps her hard across the face leaving a red hand mark)
Amy: Look what you have done you stupid Tart (Amy and Chrissie begin to fight , Robert stands up and pulls them off each other he lifts Chrissie on his shoulders and walks off)
Amy: Where are you going?
Rob: To speak with my wife you stay down here
Chrissie: Put me down

Scene Five
The living Room
(Rob walks in still with Chrissie on his back he puts her down and they begin to talk)

Rob: Well you want the truth you can have it
Chrissie: You don’t know the meaning of the word
Rob: You think you have one over my mum, she will find out your secrets Chrissie one way or another.
Chrissie: You don’t know me.
Rob: Yeah
Chrissie: I was so happy I was coming home tonight, I had some good news but maybe I came home to early.
Rob: Oh yeah and what was this good news
Chrissie: Im pregnant
Rob: What
Chrissie: But should I keep it or get rid of it.

Scene Six
The Bar
(Amy is drinking a bottle of vodka)

Scene Seven
The Living Room
(Rob and Chrissie are both sitting down)

Rob: your pregnant
Chrissie: Yeah that’s right
Rob: Your going to keep it right
Chrissie: (Laughs) Yeah with a farther like you.
Rob: I will be a good dad, you know I would.
Chrissie: You barley looks at Kristen what makes this (Points to her stomach) any different
Rob: I would love it, I would cherish it.
Chrissie: Yeah of course
Rob: I would
Chrissie: And eventually you would get bored you would find another piece of meat.
(The Door opens and Amy staggers in drunk with the vodka in her hand)
Amy: Chrissie you and me were best mates…lets (Hiccups) lest not let this stand in the way aye.
Chrissie: (Walks to Amy and takes the bottle out of her hand) You call yourself a mother look at yourself you daft bitch (Throws the drink over her face) You two deserve each other
Rob: Where you going
Chrissie: To bed you can sleep on the couch or with her
Amy: Your…Your not going to tell Shawn are you
Chrissie: What do you think?

bakedbean
06-10-2005, 18:29
Dont read any further if you dont want to know further storyline
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Plan Crash to effect Exeter Street Residents!!!!!

The residents of Exeter Street will soon be celebrating 100 years of the street. A grand party will happen in the street. Paul Ramsay organises a plane ride for some of the residents of the street they are Alan, Trudy, Vivian, Phillipa, James, Bob and Silvia!!! However disaster will strike while on the plane they crash in the chase (Local Forest) They will become lost and stranded and 2 of the passengers will be killed but the question that evreyone will be wanting answers to is "WHO SURVIVES???"
Coming Soon

big bro fan
07-10-2005, 19:30
I like the whole idea by chase do you mean cannock chase where me and you live

bakedbean
09-10-2005, 15:31
Thanks yeah it wont be up till near christmas!!

bakedbean
09-10-2005, 16:23
Scene One
Sharon’s House [The Landing]
(Sophie comes out of the bathroom just as Sharon comes up the stairs)

Sharon: So you’re finally out of the shower then.
Sophie: Yes your point
Sharon: I have no hot water left that’s my point.
Sophie: Well its not my problem
Sharon: Well how am I supposed to have a shower?
Sophie: I don’t know, I don’t care.
Sharon: Listen to me, you may be Paul’s daughter but you cant do what you want here, this is my home not your dads mine.

Scene Two
Rob and Chrissies Bedroom
(Chrissie is awake in bed she has tears in her eyes)

Scene Three
The Lion [The Kitchen]
(Amy is rubbing her head; she stares at her coffee when Robert walks in)

Amy: She isn’t going to tell Shawn is she
Rob: No I doubt it she wouldn’t do that
(Chrissie walks in)
Chrissie: You’d think that wouldn’t you.
(Chrissie goes to the cupboard and gets out some corn flakes, she pours it in her bowl and gets the milk out of the fridge and pours it on her breakfast, she turns around and pours her breakfast all over Amy)
Amy: My hair, it’s going to take ages to get right again.
Chrissie: Good (Walks out)

Scene Four
The Hospital
(A Doctor is talking to Paul and Sharon; Paul is in a wheel chair.)

Doctor: We will be doing a weekly check up on you Mr Ramsay and please take it easy.
Paul: I don’t have to do what you say any more im out of this damn hellhole.
Sharon: Paul
Paul: What, my god have you seen the food here a dog gets fed better, now lets go.

Scene Five
Outside The Lion
( A car pulls up and out steps Shawn, he looks at the Pub and walks in)

Scene Six
Inside The Lion
(Robert is working behind the bar when Shawn walks in)

Chrissie: Shawn your back
Shawn: Where’s my wife and daughter
Rob: Upstairs
(Shawn walks behined the bar and up the stairs)
Rob: Your not going to tell Shawn are you
Chrissie: You scared arnt you, your scared that for once you will have to face the consequences for the first time.
(Chrissie picks up her handbag and walks to the door)
Rob: Where are you going
Chrissie: Like you care
(Chrissie leaves)

Scene Seven
Upstairs of The Lion
(Amy is feeding Kristen when Shawn walks in)

Amy: Shawn (She goes to cuddle Shawn)
Shawn: What are up with those two
Amy: I don’t know

Scene Eight
Outside The Bookies
(Paul is in his wheelchair looking at the Bookies)

Paul: Look Sharon, what a mess
Sharon: Its going to cost you a lot.

Scene Nine
Outside The Abortion Centre
(A Taxi pulls up and Chrissie steps out, she looks around and walks in)

bakedbean
11-10-2005, 18:05
Scene One
The Lion
(Trudy and Alan are looking through an old photo album Lucy walks from the other side of the bar to them.)

Lucy: What are you two looking at
Alan: Trudy found one of the old albums from when her family first moved here
Trudy: It started with my Grandparents, they moved in just as the street opened.
Alan: Do you know that its 100 years next month that the Street opened.
Lucy: Really, maybe we could have a party.
Trudy: Yeah, pity its not in the summer, or else we could have had a street party.
Lucy: Well we can still have it here.
(Sharon walks in with Paul in his wheelchair, the Pub goes silent as they look at Paul.)
Paul: What are you all gawping at, have you never seen someone in a wheelchair.
(Lucy walks to Paul)
Lucy: Paul good to see you, have a seat, I mean…im sorry
(Paul looks at her.)
Paul: You lot never think do you come on Sharon.
Sharon: Well done Lucy

Scene Two
The Corner Shop
(Jake is working on some paperwork, when Dennis walks in)

Dennis: I hear you do building work
Jake: Me yeah I have a business
Dennis: Good, my house across the road needs some roof work.
Jake: Yeah sounds good.
Dennis: Starts tomorrow
Jake: It’s a deal
(They shake hands)

Scene Three
Upstairs of the Pub
(Shawn is talking to Amy)

Shawn: Im going to take Chrissie out for a drink to cheer her up
Amy: What
Shawn: She needs some cheering up , just me and her ok
Amy: If you must

Scene Four
Sharon’s House
(Lucy walks to the front door and rings the doorbell. Sophie answers it.)

Sophie: Can I help you?
Lucy: Im looking for Paul
Sophie: Oh my dad come in.

Scene Five
Sharon’s Living Room
(Paul is working on some paper when Sophie and Lucy walk in)

Sophie: Dad im going out, and you have a visitor.
(Paul turns)
Paul: Ok, well well look what the cat dragged in.
(Sophie leaves)
Lucy: Look I want to apologise for what I said, I wasn’t thinking
Paul: Fine, you go now
Lucy: Well there was something else
Paul: There always is with you Scotsman’s, what is it
Lucy: Well you see Exeter Street is One Hundred years of Age in a few weeks, and I know you like to arrange partys and things so what do you say.
Paul: What do you suggest?
Lucy: I don’t know
(Paul looks to his desk and sees a free ticket for a plane ride.)
Paul: Well the best thing I can do is offer you this
(Hands the Ticket)
Lucy: A free plane trip anywhere for eight people.
Paul: Yeah, perhaps we could do a plane trip and land here in the street
Lucy: Yeah sounds good.

Scene Six
The lion (The Bar)
(Chrissie is working behind the bar when Shawn walks in)

Shawn: Come on
Chrissie: What’s going on
Shawn: Im taking you out come on.

Scene Seven
Bella Italia
(Chrissie and Shawn are at the bar, Chrissie is drinking and seems to be a bit tipsy.)

Shawn: So what’s up with you and Robert?
Chrissie: Funny thing, he’s been having an affair.
Shawn: What
Chrissie: Yeah with, your wife.

big bro fan
11-10-2005, 19:11
Intresting that chrissie told him about the affair cant wait to see what happnes when rob finds out that chrissie visited an abortion clinic very very good.

bakedbean
12-10-2005, 19:45
Scene One
Bella Italia
(Shawn and Chrissie are sitting at the bar.)

Shawn: You don’t know what your saying your drunk.
Chrissie: no Shawn im (Hiccups) telling the truth (She begins to cry.)
Shawn: Hey it’s not your fault (They Hug)
Chrissie: What are you going to do?
Shawn: I don’t know yet

Scene Two
The Lion [The Bar]
(Lucy is talking to Bob, Silvia, Alan and Trudy. On the opposite table is James Perry and Phillipa who are both listening.)

Silvia: It all sounds good but this Plane I mean will there be any room?
Lucy: Ive contacted the company they will land in the field
Bob: We could have a street party or something.
James: (Walks up to them) We can have it at my place
Lucy: No I think it would be better if we had it at the corner stone of this Street The Lion
(They all agree)
James: Well have an evening party at Rileys, are theme could be new beginnings.
Lucy: Sounds good
Trudy: Will we all be going on this plane trip
Lucy: They can only fit eight people inside
Alan: Well I tell you what get people to sign up for it and pull some names out of the hat
Lucy: Sounds good.

Scene Three
Sharon’s House
(Sharon comes in to the living room in her dressing gown with wet hair, Sophie is watching the Telvevision and Paul is working on his laptop.)

Sharon: What are you doing Paul
Paul: Emailing my Solicitor
Sharon: What about
Paul: It’s a surprise
(A knock at the door)
Sophie: I will get it.
(Sophie walks out as Paul and Sharon hug, a woman with dark brown hair walks in followed by Sophie)
Sophie: Dad
Paul: What is it (Turns round and sees the woman and looks shocked) Eileen
Eileen: Hello Paul

Scene Four
Outside The Lion
(A Taxi pulls up and Shawn and Chrissie step out.)

Chrissie: Don’t do anything tonight Shawn please
Shawn: We shall see
(They walk in)

Scene Five
The Lion [The Bar]
(Amy, Viv and Lucy are behind the Bar, Robert is collecting glasses when Shawn and Chrissie walk in)

Rob: You had a good time
Chrissie: What do you care
Rob: Has she been this miserable all night Shawn.
Shawn: No, not really (Clenching his fist) in fact she let me into a few secrets of hers.
Rob: (Looking worried) Oh yeah what are they then
Shawn: You know this and that, and then she told me the dirtiest secret of them all
Amy: (To Chrissie) You promised
Chrissie: I promised nothing
Rob: You bitch
(Shawn punches Robert who drops the glasses and falls on a table, which collapses)
Lucy: What on earth is going on
Shawn: Why don’t you ask my wife and my brother?
Lucy: Well Amy, spit it out
Amy: I…I…I cant (She begins to cry)
Chrissie: (picks up a glass of brandy) She has been having an affair with your son
Lucy: What, is this true, Amy
Amy: Y…Yes…but it was a mistake
Lucy: (Looks at Amy with disgust and slaps her hard across the face) You conniving little bitch, and you (points to Robert) how dare you come swanking back in my life and ruin the family’s happiness
Robert: (Stands back up) Happiness, this family don’t know the meaning of happiness. Look at Dad you drove him away, I left because you were always nagging at me and then there’s Tanya
Lucy: Don’t you dare bring her into this; she has nothing to do with this.
Robert: Oh come on mum, I think the community should know they have a right after all you are the landlady. They should know that you kicked your own Daughter out of the family because her boyfriend beat her to a pulp.
Lucy: It had nothing to do with that; you don’t know nothing Robert, nothing
(The pub begin to talk about Lucy)
Lucy: (To The Pub) I swear it was nothing to do with that
Shawn: She’s right Robert, it was nothing to do with that, and it’s none of your business
Robert: (Says sarcastically) But im family
Lucy: No, your not family not anymore.
Robert: Oh but I suppose if golden boy over here did anything like that it would be totally different right
Lucy: But Shawn would never do anything like that
Robert: No Shawn wouldn’t would he now, no not golden boy. But well he did go to Prison, oops did I just tell another one of are family secrets
Shawn: Shut up Robert
Robert: I think the street has a right to know the truth about you and your temper don’t you.
Shawn: Ive had enough of this
(Shawn leaves to the living area of the Scotsman’s)
Lucy: Well done Robert
(Lucy follows Shawn)
Chrissie: Well, well Robert looks what you have done.
Robert: If you were not carrying my child I would kill you
Chrissie: Well im not Robert
Robert: What do you mean?
Chrissie: I had an abortion
Robert: You bitch (He launches his fist and hits Chrissie right across the face, James stands up and pulls Robert off him)
James: That’s enough, Viv ring the Police

Scene Five
Sharon’s House
(Paul, is talking to Eileen and Sharon is standing up as well as Sophie)

Eileen: Well aren’t you going to introduce me?
Sophie: Sharon this is my mum Eileen Robin
Eileen: (Laughs) So this is the tart you have now is it, what ever happened to that other one Sally
Paul: Sally’s dead.’

Scene Six
The Lion [The bar]
(The police are escorting Robert out of the Pub, when Lucy walks in)

Robert: Mum please
Lucy: Your on your own this time Robert.
(Robert and the Police leave, Shawn walks in with Kristen in his are and a suitcase)
Lucy: Shawn
Shawn: Im leaving and Kristen, for good and me.
Lucy: No Shawn not now please we need you.
Amy: Your not taking my Baby
Shawn: Your not fit to be a mother
(Shawn walks outside, Lucy, Amy and Chrissie follow)

Scene Seven
Outside The Lion
(Shawn puts Kristen in his car and his suitcase. He walks to the other door and opens it)

Lucy: Shawn please
Shawn: I will call you.
Amy: No please not my baby
(Shawn glares at Amy)
Shawn: You will be hearing from my solicitor (Gets in and shuts the door he speeds off)

big bro fan
13-10-2005, 17:10
Brill :thumbsup: :cheer: :) :clap: :cool: :cartman: :bow:

big bro fan
13-10-2005, 17:11
Brill :thumbsup: :cheer: :clap: :cool: :bow:

Rain_
14-10-2005, 04:02
Post more...this is brilliant

bakedbean
16-10-2005, 18:07
Montage
The show opens with the usual theme music and the camera shows all the houses in the street. The screen fades to a graveyard where James is holding some flowers kneeling at a grave. The scene then fades into The Lion where we see Lucy in the kitchen who is making breakfast.

Scene One
The Lion [Kitchen]
(Lucy is making breakfast, when Amy walks in)

Lucy: You still here
Amy: What
Lucy: I told you I want you out by this afternoon
Amy: You cant chuck me out, this is my home
Lucy: Oh yes I can and by the way your fired.

Scene Two
Graveyard
(James is kneeling at a Grave, he puts the flowers down.)

James: Happy Birthday darling. I miss you, you know. You’re my Daughter, the only child I ever had. Well I know it was all my fault happy fourteenth.

Scene Three
Paul and Sharon’s bedroom.
(Paul is in bed with Sharon)

Sharon: I want her out of my house
Paul: Don’t worry I will sort Eileen out, you do mean Eileen
Sharon: Yes, I can handle Sophie, but two of them.
Paul: I will sort it ok.

Scene Four
Rileys
(Phillipa is working behind the bar when James walks in.)

Phillipa: Oh welcome back, where have you been I woke up and you were not in bed. I arrived here, having to open up myself and you were not here and I even broke a nail.
James: Im sorry I have had other things on my mind.
Phillipa: Like what
James: It don’t matter
Phillipa: Well don’t do that to me again.

Scene Five
Paul and Sharon’s [Living room]
(Sophie is talking to Eileen)

Sophie: I told you not to come till I called you, to give me chance to get rid of that bitch
Eileen: Sharon (laughs) I can deal with her, but your farther he is going to be a hard one. I mean you think he is going to come back to me at the clap of my hands.
Sophie: You never know
(Sharon walks in, followed by Paul in his wheelchair.)
Sharon: Morning
Paul: Eileen I think we should have a little chat.

Scene Six
The Lion [The bar]
(Viv is behind the bar serving Bob.)

Bob: Do you think Lucy will be up to talking about this celebration
Viv: I don’t know, I mean after last night.
(Lucy walks in)
Lucy: Oh im fine lets sort it out shall we.
(Lucy walks to Bob and Silvia’s table and sits down)
Lucy: So, do you have any ideas?
Silvia: Well ive made a hat for people to put their names in.
Lucy: Sounds good
Bob: When is this plane trip
Lucy: Two weeks time.
Bob: Well we can collect the names by the end of the week.

Scene Seven
Paul and Sharon’s
(Paul is talking to Eileen, Sophie and Sharon are in the kitchen)

Eileen: Your kicking me out
Paul: Sharon and me need some space
Sophie: No, if your kicking out mum then I go to
(Paul sighs)

Scene Eight
Outside The Café
(A for sale sign is handing up on the café, Dennis who is walking with his son Jason look at the sign)

Dennis: Looks like a nice property
Jason: Could make you a bit of money
Dennis: Yeah, remember that number

Scene Nine
The Lion [Back Door]
(Amy has her bags packed she opens the door looks around with tears on her face and leaves.)

Scene Ten
The Hill Family Home
(Jason is sitting down watching Dennis on the phone)

Dennis: What do you mean somebody has already bought the Café, fine I will double there price, you will meet up tomorrow to decide excellent.

bakedbean
16-10-2005, 18:31
Hey there tommorows episode features the return of one of my original charecters from season one. So here is a little bit about her.

Jill Humphrey

The former shop owner Jill Humphrey started life in the street with a great life and a wonderful husband. But eight months on it has all changed, Jill is now returning after a 5 month break. Jills Husband turned out to be the murder of Roy Crabtree, Malcolm (Husband) trapped Jill in the Shop and was ready to set it alight until Shawn, Phil and Mike ran in to save the day, however Malcolm dropped the match settting the place alight but only killing himself. Jill left the Street an unstable woman but now she is back as strong and as confident as ever but could she be messing with the wrong person, leading to more disaster and what is she hiding???

big bro fan
16-10-2005, 23:02
I cant wait

big bro fan
18-10-2005, 16:16
when is your next episode up :hmm:

bakedbean
19-10-2005, 19:17
Hey my internet has been playing up but i will be posting three episodes up over the weekend including the plane crash!!!! :cheer:

Bryan
19-10-2005, 19:44
Hey my internet has been playing up but i will be posting three episodes up over the weekend including the plane crash!!!! :cheer:

3 eps wow! and a plane crash! :eek: very emmerdaleesque :hmm:

cant wait to read!

btw bakedbean... Devon Seas Episode 1 is now up for viewing!

bakedbean
21-10-2005, 09:59
Scene One
The Hills Family Residents [Living Room]
[Dennis is talking on his phone while Jason is busy on his computer]

Dennis: Jason turn that thing down will you i am having an important conversation. So your saying that the buyer want to meet me tonight in The Lion, what time? 6pm ok. [Dennis puts the phone down]
Jason:Well
Dennis: Looks like we are in luck, we could buy the cafe
Jason: Yeah but what if the other buyer doesnt want to sell up
Dennis: Oh they will son, trust me they will.

Scene Two
The Lion
[Lucy is serving Bob. Sitting at another table is Silvia and Viv]

Lucy: So are we calling out the names today for that plane ride
Bob: yeah say about six
Lucy: Will do
[turn to Viv and Silvia]
Viv: I hope i get chosen for that plane ride it sounds good.
Silvia: Same here
Viv: Me and Trudy have never been on a plane before
Silvia: Havent you
Viv: No, its always been one of our dreams.

Scene Three
Rileys [James office]
[James is interviewing a woman with jet black hair]

James: So tell me why should i give you the job, Stephanie
Steph: Well thats simple, i am very easy to work with
James: Flexible
Steph: Yes, very bubbley anda good sense of humor
James: Great, but you are forgetting one more thing
Steph: Oh yeah and what is that then
James: Your very attractive
Steph: Why thank you
James:So can you start tommorow
Steph: Sure, so i guess i have the job
James: Yes you do

Scene Four
Paul and Sharons
[Paul is busy on his laptop, while Sharon is in the Kitchen making a cup of tea]

Sharon: here you are [Walks in with a cup of tea and puts it down on the table.]
Paul: Thanks love
Sharon: What are you up to
Paul: Just some bussiness
Sharon: What sort of bussiness
Paul: never you mind

Scene Five
The Shop
[Chrissie is browsing round the shop with a basket, Jakes is busy texting, Chrissie comes other and puts the basket down and puts the contents onto the counter. Jakes scans it all and puts it into a bag]

Jake: Lived here long
Chrissie: Me, about a month or so, what about you
Jake: Only three weeks.
Chrissie: Well my names Chrissie Scotsman
Jake: Scotsman, arent you the family who owns the Lion
Chrissie:Yeah that is us
Jake: [Hands over the bag] That will be ten pond please
Chrissie: [Looks through her purse and hands over the Ten Pounds] Here you go
Jake: So which one are you married to
Chrissie: Robert
Jake: Didnt he
Chrissie: hit me yes, now if you dont mind i would like to go bye.
Jake: See ya [Chrissie leaves]

Scene Six
The Lion
[Most of the residents are sitting down at there tables when Chrissie walks in, Lucy rings the bell]

Lucy: Ladies and Gentelmen it is now time, for us to announce the eight lucky people who will be going on the plane ride so the first name is [pulls out a name] Silvia [crowd begin to shout fix] Oy keep it down. The next name Vivian [Viv smiles] and thirdly her sister Trudy. The fourth names out of the hat is James Perry and Fifth name is Chrissie, the sixth person going into the plane will be Alan, the next person is Phillipa perry and finnally Bob.
[Dennis and Jason walk in]
Lucy: the plane ride takes place tommorow when we celebrate 100 years of Exeter Street
Dennis: [Walks to the bar] Lucy you havent seen anybody new aroud here in the last five minutes
Lucy: No why
[Door opens and in walks Jill]
Jill: You must be Dennis
Dennis: [Turns round] thats...
Lucy: Jill your back what are you doing here
Jill: Im the new cafe owner, is anybody going to buy me a drink, oh and mr hill if you think i am going to sell the cafe to you, think again.

big bro fan
21-10-2005, 10:29
Well done that was amazing

bakedbean
21-10-2005, 12:27
Scene One
The Street
[The reisdents are all outside celebrating 100 years of Exeter Street.]

Scene Two
Airport
[The Pilot is talking to Chrissie,James,Phillipa,Viv,Bob,Silvia,Trudy and Alan.]

Pilot: ok so if you would like to bored the plane and we will be off in a few moments.
[They begin to bored the plane]

Scene Three
The Plane
[The plane door shuts as evreyone begins to sit down]

Trudy: Exciting isnt it Alan
Alan: why the ruddy hell did you put my name in that hat i do not know.
Trudy: This will get you over your fear of flying
Alan: I dont have a fear of flying
Trudy: No you just have a fear of spending to much money on a holiday in spain.
Alan: I am not going to a foreign country they dont even eat are food.
[James is speaking to Phillipa]
Phillpa: This plane is filthy, it looks like Lucy Scotsman has cleaned this plane
Chrissie: [turns round] Excuse me, how dare you talk about my family like that
[The monitor beginas to speak]
Monitor: Ladies and Gentelmen please fasten your seatbelts as we are about to take off
Silvia: here we go
Bob: Yeah
[The Plane takes off]

Scene Four
The Street
[Paul and Lucy are listening to there monitor]

Paul: There about to take off
Lucy: I will go and get evreyone down the field.

Scene Five
The Cafe
[Jill is putting up some ballons when Dennis and his son Jason walk in]

Jill: Gentelmen how can i help you
Dennis: You know how you can help me Jill
Jill: Im not selling this place, you can offer me as much as you like but i am not giving in you hear me now get out.

Scene Six
The Plane
[Evreyone is relaxed sitting down Viv and Trudy are looking out of the window.]

Viv: Wow have you seen this Trudy [Points to the window]
Trudy: it is beutiful
[The plane shakes]
Chrissie: What was that
James: Dont know, it might be the turbulance
[The Plane shakes agin but more violentely]
Bob: Im going to speak to the Piolt
Silvia: Be careful
[Bob walks into the cockpit]

Scene Seven
[Bob walks in the Piolt is driving the plane looking worried.]

Bob: What is going on, becuse this is not turbulence
Piolt: Its nothing
[Plane shakes agin]
Bob: What is going on
Piolt:Oh right, look somebody must have tampered with the Engine or something
Bob: i dont understand
Piolt: [Takes a deep breathe and saysc in a panic] we are about to crash
Bob: [Grabs the monitor and speaks to Paul] Paul, Paukl is that you
Paul Voice: Yes it is
Bob: We are in danger the Plane is about to crash, we are in the chase
Paul Voice: Stay calm we will get help
Bob: [To Piolt] I will go and tell the others
[Bob walks out]

Scene Eight
The Plane
[Bob walks in]

Silvia: What is it
Bob: Just sit tight
James: What is going on Bob
Bob: Look we are about to crash
Evreyone begisn to scream and shout
James: Bob go and get some paracuttes
[Bob walks back into the Cockpit but falls back into the Passenger area as the plane spins Bob hits his head as the plane crashses into the Chase

baileya
21-10-2005, 13:26
wow that was fantastic. Wonder who it is who has died. Looking forward to your next part.

bakedbean
22-10-2005, 18:05
EXETER

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Exeter Street is one of the nicest places to live right? wrong!!! The Street has been full of murder, arsons, drugs, villians and Gangters. But not evreything is bad in the street, in this street you can meet some of the most nicest of all people like Sharon, Bob and Silvia, Vivian, Trudy and Alan. But of course there is the odd bitch here and there Chrissie Scotsman,Lucy Scotsman, Phillipa Perry, Jill Humphrey. There is also plenty of villans around Dennis Hill, Jason Hill, Robert Scotsman and Paul Ramsay. But where would the street be without the first family the Scotsmans, if you are wise enough then you will know not to mess with this paticular family. There is one thing you can say about Exeter that is certainly true, The Street is a strong and loving community.

bakedbean
22-10-2005, 18:32
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Montage
We see the usual Street introduction, which then fades to the street celebrating 100 years of Exeter Street, the camera slowly takes us to Lucy Scotsman and Paul Ramsay who are talking to The Monitor

Scene One
The Street

Paul: Bob, bob are you there Bob
Lucy: No answer, look i will go and get some help
[Lucy runs to the Pub]

Scene Two
The Chase
[We see the airplane upside down on the ground, smoke is coming out of it thick and fast, the door swings open and out steps James Perry whos suit is torn, James helps out Phillipa, Viv, Trudy, Alan and Chrissie.]

Viv: Where are Bob and Silvia
James: I will go inside and look
Phillipa: Be careful James
[James stares and smiles at phillipa and walks in]
Trudy: How could this have happned, it was only supposed to take ten minutes and now look.
Chrissie: Someone must have tampred with the engine or something.

Scene Three
The Lion
[Paul and Sharon are at a table, Lucy is on the phone, no one else is inside]

Paul: Well
Lucy: [Puts phone down and walks over to Paul and Sharon] They are doing all they can, it is just they have to locate them first.
Paul: I have to go out there and look for them
Sharon: Dont be silly your in a wheelchair
Paul: My sister was in that plane she could be trapped or worse.
Sharon: No your not going the emergencie services should find them soon enough.
Paul: Should
Lucy: You need a whisky
[Lucy goes behined the bar and makes Paul a drink]
Paul: What am i going to do Sharon if they dont find her what if she...
Sharon: What if this and what if that it is not going to do you any good now is it.

Scene Four
The Chase
[James comes back out and walks over to the crowd]

Viv: Well
James; I cant see in there, its to dark and smokey
Viv: Well we have to get them out of there before it is to late
[a fire starts on one of the wings the rest do not realise]
James: Look i am taking one more look ok
Phillipa: James please dont do this
James: Are friends are in there somewhere
Alan: i am coming with you
James: Come on then
[James and Alan take a slow walk not seeing the flames, James runs on ahead when the Plane explodes, James goes flying and the Plane bursts into flames]
Phillipa: JAMES
Trudy: ALAN
[they all run to James and Alan]
Chrissie: There is no way that the other two are alive now
Viv: Oh no not Bob and Silvia [begins to cry]

Scene Five
The Lion
[Paul is drinking his whisky, Sharon is consolling him]

Sharon: Evreything is going to be ok trust me
Paul: No, she couldnt have survived
[The phone rings, Lucy runs to the phone and answers]
Lucy: Hello...no i dont want new bloody windows.
[Lucy slams down the phone]

Scene Six
The Chase
[James is lying on Phillipas knee, Alan is checking his leg.]

Alan: Does this hurt
[James screms in pain]
Alan: Yeah he has broken it
[They hear a helicopter in the distant, evreyone begins to scream for help]

Scene Seven
The Lion
[Paul and Sharon are still sitting down, the Phone rings and Lucy answers it]

Lucy: If you are selling me anything i will swing for, oh Inspector Grouse, you have found them, but only six of them, well who, i see ok thank you.
[puts phone down]
Paul: Well
Lucy: They have only found six of them alive
Paul: But there was eight of them
Lucy: They have not found the other two
Paul: Well who are they
Lucy: they have not said
Paul: Oh Phillipa

:crying: :(

big bro fan
22-10-2005, 21:48
i really thought that bob and silvia would be there till the end but it happens :crying: :crying: :crying:

baileya
23-10-2005, 14:07
:crying: :crying: :crying:

please change the story so their found. :(

bakedbean
23-10-2005, 17:07
Sory already done a months worth of writing and i am not changing it all, get ready for later on this week when the street says a sad far well to Bob and Silvia.

bakedbean
23-10-2005, 17:13
Pauls Mum Lexi comes to say!!!
The Street says there final far wells to Bob and Silvia!!!
Will Lexi buy Exeter Street???
Is someone stalking Viv???
Lucy is trapped when the Lion catches fire!!!
Who becomes diabetic???
Is Jill safe???
Is Mike alive or dead?
Which familiar face returns and buys The Lion???

big bro fan
23-10-2005, 18:16
sounds intresting :o

bakedbean
23-10-2005, 21:44
Scene One/Day/Afternoon
The Street
[Leaves are falling from all of the Trees in the street and the field, the street is empty not a body in sight, Two cars comes strolling into the street and out step, Alan,Trudy,James(on cruches),Chrissie,Viv,Phillipa,Sharon (who helps Paul out) and Lucy they look around and walk into The Lion]

Scene Two
The Lion
[The residents of the street are gathered round a table all eating, Lucy stands up with a glass in her hand]

Lucy: [Coughs] Thank you we all know why we are here today, for two very special people, Bob and Silvia. These two were the most genorus and kindessest of people you could ever meet. The Street will certainly not be the same with out them, they fought for there community, in fact they were the backbone of this street. [Begins to cry] They were my gretest freinds and you could always turn to them whenever in trouble, so please raise your glassess to Bob and Silvia.
Evreyone: Bob and Silvia

Scene Three
Police Station {Inspector Grouses office}
[Grouse is going through some files when DI Govener walks in]

Govener: Grouse
Grouse: What
Govener: Its about the plane crash the one with the residents of Exeter Street
Grouse: They have finished there investigation
Govener: Yeah but your not going to like it.

Scene Four
The Lion
[Lucy is behined the bar with Viv serving customers]

Viv: That was a lovely speech
Lucy: Thanks
Viv: I know your going to miss them, all of us will and i know that you have had some tough times recentley, but things will get better, just takes time.
Lucy: I hope so, but there is something i have to do
Viv: What, what do you have to do
Lucy: Im selling this place, and im leaving the Street for good.

Scene Five
Inside The Cafe
[Jill is busy trying to grab some ingredients form a top of some steel shelving, when the door opens]

Jill: We are closed [no answer] Hello, must have been the wind
[Jill countinues to grab the ingredients when she falls and the shelving collapses on top of her, we hear foot steps running out of the Cafe and the door flings shut, Jill is unconcious]

Scene Six
The Chase
[Police are checking the reckage when Inspector Grouse turns up]

Grouse: Well what is this news
Police Officer: Its not good
Grouse: Well i know it is not good, two people have died, but have you found out why???
Police Officer: Someone had tampered with the engine
Grouse: Someone was set out to kill, my gosh but who??

baileya
23-10-2005, 22:07
ooooooh i wonder who it is :searchme:

big bro fan
24-10-2005, 14:58
i bet i know who :hmm:

kirstienod
24-10-2005, 16:21
Just started reading this and its brill well done

diamond1
25-10-2005, 21:27
must be dennis and his knuckle dragging firm of thug's

big bro fan
27-10-2005, 15:27
i cant wait for your next episode

diamond1
02-11-2005, 11:58
is there gonna be any more coming up soon?

big bro fan
02-11-2005, 12:34
his internet is broken at the moment getting it fixed soon